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Default Re: Through the Eyes of a Flareon ~ [PG]

Chapter Nineteen: Tasting the New Life


Sorry, for some reason it showed up really craply. =/ But I'll colour it and then reupload it. c:

Zhol grimaced as the first numel thudded against the ground, the ears of his so close together twitching. She held her left arm with her right set of claws, letting a breath seep in and back out again through her small nose. As inclined as she felt to assist her scyther acquaintance, she knew was simply too weak. That rock slide had really taken its toll on her, especially when she had slammed into the ground without being able to cushion herself in any way. Normally she wouldn’t be so drained after one hit, but reasoning with herself, she realised she didn’t often deal with rocks and had not many defences against them. She was just glad she’d arrived in time to free Dusty.

Dusty. She’d sped off into the trees which would surely decrease in number as the rocky plains drew nearer, and those two sandslash had been closely following. She knew they were strong, but Dusty was too. But judging by the wounds she had, Zhol was surprised the flareon was able to keep going when she wasn’t. She appeared just as beaten, if not more, and the sneasel never thought she was more experienced in battle than her. Maybe they were equal, but being a hunter, surely Zhol was higher skilled.

Her mind derailed as she laid eyes on a wave of fire circling away from the numb pokémon as Shard dashed backwards and to Zhol’s right as she watched with angered eyes. She tensed her arm muscles, attempting to regain some kind of strength, and stumbled towards them. She was confronted by the sandshrew as he emerged from the soil, striking her in the chin. She toppled over, her face beginning to pulse with beats of pain. In no time the ground type was back over her, straightening his amateur claws and raking her belly. In a fury Zhol swatted her right chunky paw above her chest and into the pokémon’s jaw, scraping as it fell from his face.

The sandshrew squealed, and the ice and dark type took advantage of the speed she always carried, using quick attack to stand and sprint past him, feeling his body land flat against the ground as she stretched out her arm on the way past. Her legs ached and her knee almost failed as she came closer to the numel, temporarily disappearing with the shadows and showing herself again sometime soon, shoving a blunt side of her claws into the fire type’s face just as he released a small shower of flames. The embers plummeted into her left foot, and she cried out, shaking it as the fire remained lodged on her skin.

As a result of the knock to the face Zhol had given, the numel’s neck swung and he came straight back with a headbutt, shoving the dual type’s paw out of range. As she was distracted and had to lean down to brush the embers aside, he reared back and slammed down again, the ground nearby shaking violently and creating splits which dislodged Zhol’s same foot. It slipped and she scraped her ankle as a sharp rock gashed its top, the rest of her body following and connecting with the ground as it failed to cease its trembling. The rocky ground continued to shift back into place, and she screamed, feeling a horrible pain as a bone or two in her foot crunched and begged her to leave them be.

Shard had no trouble as he hovered above the unstable ground, but he seemed to be otherwise immobile. Zhol, through generating tears and increased desperation, figured that something was getting the better of him. Either that or he simply and plainly refused to help, which was definitely not a suitable option for her, and did not seem like him at all.

The numel turned to the avoidant scyther and felt the hot magma inside his hump fizz and bubble before he unleashed another inferno, and it washed toward his enemies as Zhol’s eyes grew as large as oran berries. Shard gaped and began to flee, but as he laid eyes on Zhol, he sparked a fight with himself.

He couldn’t just leave her there. He was a protector; a warrior. He was not prey; he was a predator. He glanced down his left side, arguing internally. But as he remembered his duty as a scyther – and more importantly, as a friend – he landed and sped to Zhol’s frail frame just in time for the fire attack to hit. The scyther screamed, acting as a barrier before Zhol, and her eyes were wary and wide. She waited only a pawful of seconds before he released another cry as a second attack was launched, bending over and using his scythes to support what his legs couldn’t. He met eyes with the sneasel, and they had but a moment before he swung around with rage and swiped at the dual type behind him. The numel was beyond his reach, but there was no need for closer ranges as a blade of air sliced through the space between them, knocking the numel paces back. He pressed on his right scythe to prop himself back onto his feet, and he turned, facing the foe.

Zhol breathed a small gasp as she took in the scorch marks the lava plume caused, and focused back on her foot with an effort to free it as she tugged. It remained lodged between the halves of earth, creating an enormous inconvenience for her...especially as she captured the moving image of a sandshrew plodding in her direction, and suddenly curled up and quickened his pace—or roll.

She bit down and cried out, trying harder to wedge her foot from the trap, but it would not budge and it was simply too painful to yank at. Shard was busy dodging attacks and issuing ones of his own to notice, and Zhol could only fire shards of ice—which rebounded off the ground type because of his rapid movement. She had no idea what to do as he neared, and her leg screamed in pain as she tried once more to free it.

She was mentally and physically stuck.

***

The dark and fire type continued rumbling, and as one of the sandslash made her move, he leapt, clearing me completely. I felt a wave of relief as I realised he must have made a tragic miscalculation and jumped over his target entirely, leaving me with the perfect opportunity to escape the way he came. My muscles jerked, my mind settled, and...I stopped myself.

The houndoom had came down onto Angry Sandslash, and while she was busy being stood on, he shot a trail of brightly burning fire at Sandslash One. She held her claws up, hissing as the flames worked around her, and I was taken by utter surprise. Why was he attacking them and not me? Pushing aside the possibility that he could have been mixed up, I realised...he must not be the typical enemy I imagined him to be. He was not only helping me, but on my side!

He pushed off Angry Sandslash and moved back a number of paces, only a few metres from me. I turned to him, but before I could ask anything, Angry Sandslash propelled herself forwards and slammed into the houndoom’s body.

I gasped, racing sidewards and tackling her with immediate regret; the pain in my shoulders intensified, and I hardly knew what I was doing as I realised I was throwing myself in harm’s way for a pokémon I didn’t know. We were thrown across the soil while the houndoom shook himself off and targeted Sandslash One. Instantly I scuttled away from Angry Sandslash, almost earning myself another scratch, and stood back to view the scene.

The houndoom fooled his opponent, leaped over her head, and landed behind her before blowing a powerful mouthful of fire onto her spines. She shrieked, darting from the flames, and the dark and fire type whirled around to repeat his action on Angry Sandslash, who was about to attack me. The sandshrew evolution squealed as well and wrapped herself in her spikes, becoming that large, spiky ball again.

I eyed the newest edition to the fight. My suspicion was rising. “What’s with the saviour act?”

The houndoom stopped before me and lowered his eyelids, his mouth flickering into a sly smile. “I’d love for you to stay and chat, but you better get out of here.”

My head withdrew, and I blinked numerously. Had he just told me to leave? “Wh...”

“Just look at you,” he began, scoffing and running his eyes across just about every hair on my body. For some reason I suspected he was only making excuses to check me out.

“What?” I growled in return.

“You’re hardly in any condition to fight,” he pressed, glancing over his shoulder as Angry Sandslash uncurled and plodded to her companion. He looked back at me as I opened my mouth. “They’re not gonna stop now, so go. I’ll take care of them.”

I fumbled with my letters, dropping them and feeling them roll clumsily around my tongue until they formed real words. “What’s in it for you?!”

He snorted amusedly, flicking his long, thin tail. “Impressing a female,” he replied, and whipped around to face Sandslash One as she ran at him. He lowered his head and crashed into her front, and the ground type managed to stand her ground as she blocked his horns with her palms. “Go!” he shouted, his voice strained under pressure.

I barely debated with myself as I gave a heavy sigh and spun around, making for the bushes next to the stone. Once I cleared them, I halted and turned back. The male dual type slipped from the sandslash’s embrace as her inadequate claws failed to attain proper grip, and darted between the trees that led to the barren land beyond. The two enraged pokémon followed, and I watched as they disappeared in the complete opposite direction to me. Huffing, I turned and ran without another thought, leaving them all behind.

***

After a tussle with that spearow who attacked me earlier, I accidentally killed it and it landed in a pile of crap. I felt kinda bad...but at least I finally managed to catch something. Although when I finally did, what were the chances of it becoming inedible? Sure, everything on the inside might taste okay...but I had suddenly lost my appetite when it plummeted into that cursed crap heap. “Stupid wild pokémon...” I muttered, padding to the fallen flying type. I slipped its tail feathers between my toes and dragged it from its place, scowling and knowing I wouldn’t let myself even taste it. “I’m a freakin’ trainer pokémon! I can’t eat this!”

Thinking I may be able to clean it, I carefully chose a place to stick my fangs in. I carried it through the bracken and emerged before a reasonably sturdy scyther and a panting sneasel. Shard was on the rock level above, where we’d been prior to the fight. He didn’t notice me as I showed myself, but Zhol, on the other hand, saw me immediately and radiated a relieved expression. She was leaning against a boulder implanted into the ground, and one eye was closed with what I assumed was pain. I was surprised and less than happy to see her like this, and walked over to her weakening frame, dropping the spearow.

“You’re...back,” she heaved wearily. “Did you...lose those sandslash?”

“Oh, Zhol...” I murmured, ensuring she was propped up. “We need to get back to the colony...”

She cringed, and I couldn’t help but do the same at the sight of her. “Are they...gone?”

“Crap... What happened to your foot?” I asked with worry, taking in its crumpled and deformed appearance. There was a notable gash along the start of her claws on the top of her foot, and she was not using it for support. “It looks—”

“Dusty,” she stated firmly, her eyes narrowing as her breathing showing as laboured. I was slightly startled by the tone in her voice as she swallowed her anger. “Where...are the sandslash?”

“Oh,” I started, agitation sparking, “them. Some houndoom showed up and stole them.” I kicked dirt over the spearow with a front paw, and Zhol seemed to notice, a tad confused.

“Stole...them?”

Our conversation was tucked away for us to retrieve later as Shard landed with a thump beside us. He held a very mangled pair of buneary between his jaws; one was missing an ear. With disappointment trickling from his face, he set them down and grimaced. The skin above my eyes folded in as I groaned, annoyed to have lost dinner to a bunch of rocks...not that there was much meat between them anyway. I was sure Shard felt the same way until he turned to wipe his scythe against a rock, and a scraping noise wavered to my ears. I noticed the long stream of singed armour along his back, and that seemed to be what he was making the uncomfortable faces at.

“Shard, you...your back,” I stuttered, and he met my eyes as his body faced me again.
He flung his eyes over his shoulder, running them down. “...I’m fine,” he insisted, but I shook my head.

“I don’t think so. You sure don’t look it...” I then laid eyes on Zhol. “Neither do you.”

The sneasel’s lips curled. “You aren’t exactly in pristine condition yourself,” she remarked sharply, and I took a step back.

“I’m just sayin’!” I responded, wondering why she got so defensive. “How ‘bout that river you went to check out?” I asked her, addressing the scyther at the same time. “We could go get cleaned up before heading back.”

The pokémon both agreed, and we made our ways to the rushing water past the rock wall with many levels, and where the forest began growing again. I neared the water’s edge and immediately felt like spitting into it, and I barely bothered to clean myself. I just splashed the liquid along my right side were the wounds from shards that had stuck into me at one point were, and I had to dunk my face in to clear the skin of stones and grit (leaving my tuft soggy and dripping wet).

Zhol sat on the bank and applied the water with care, washing away any blood or muck that may have been caking her fur. Shard stood in the centre, too strong and hardy to be taken by the current, and at times he lay down and held himself still to cool the burns on his back. After I was done with myself, I dipped my catch into the river and scrubbed it against a rock—which helped clean the excrement off, but coated it in moss and grime.

We stayed for nearly ten minutes before picking ourselves up and trudging back to the colony, using a shortcut behind the giant rock wall and eventually overtaking it once it levelled out. At one point I offered the bird pokémon to Shard, who accepted my gift and tore at it once we stopped for a single rest. He shared some with Zhol, and when I was offered some, I declined without a second thought. I thought he’d be able to smell the unpleasant odour, but apparently the water had washed it away.

“Why didn’t you want it? It was your catch, after all,” Shard had asked/mentioned, and I had given a sheepish smile.

“I...uh...dropped it in the river, and it...got...slimy?”

He’d been satisfied with that and we’d continued on, eventually arriving at our destination. By the time we waddled in through the east entrance, we were all about ready to collapse. We conveniently had another run-in with some wild ambipom and they’d somehow swiped me, placing me on a branch for their own amusement, and watched me teeter and topple from the unstable place. And it’s not like Shard could have caught me—unless I wanted a change from four to two legs.

The scyther had at least flurried to the treetops and pursued the annoying two purple jesters, but they’d given him quite a challenge as they weaved between branches and played tricks on him. I thought it’d never end until I threatened to burn their homes down, and proved I wasn’t bluffing by setting a tree on fire. They panicked and ran off, but clearly they didn’t know that a fire pokémon’s flames burn out quite easily. They began to smoulder, but to be sure Zhol cooled and muffled them with one of her ice moves. After that experience I’d be happy not to hunt for at least a week.

***

“...Am I better yet?” I questioned, and the floating dual type glanced at me once more, nearing my body. She inspected my covered wounds and asked me to stand up. I did, and she got me to lift my paws and jog on the spot. My bones ached, but weren’t too bad. I assumed they were freezing up, being in this joint, and I was afraid that if I tried to blow any fire, it’d disintegrate and fail to do anything but look pretty. Therefore I deemed getting up and doing chores as more desirable than staying in this...oddly clean, medicine-scented place. Though I was secretly relieved to have my wounds treated, my face buzzed and the many rock shard-inflicted wounds thudded as ice melted inside them. That was apparently the froslass’ way of treating exposed sores, and needless to say, if she was a flareon, she’d use anything but water based medicine.

She’d also smeared my face and every other open wound with a type of oil that she obtained by crushing and mashing leaves from a certain tree, and although I was told it would help disinfect them, it stung! On top of that, I was practically sealed off from the others; there were removable panels between us on either side, and I was in an end cell.

“You seem fully functional,” she replied softly, “and you won’t need any more bandages unless you really want them.”

“Yippee!” I cheered, inspecting the one piece of white material hugging my right front leg. I glanced to my right after exiting my cubicle, spying a dark figure lying inert, her belly rising and falling faintly. “Is she...okay?” I wondered, my concern getting the better of me. A wave of dread washed over me as I recalled my friend’s state before we arrived. “Her wounds weren’t...fatal or anything, were they?”

The froslass – Aemara – looked shocked. “N-not at all,” she quickly responded, and I sighed, feeling considerably thankful. “However,” she started, and I jerked my head to her immediately. She looked lost for the correct words. “She will not be out for a few more hours.”

I nodded after feeling my shoulders drop and I popped my head around to see Shard sitting on a hay-covered bench in the section next to Zhol, his legs hanging over the side. He looked up. “And him?”

“Shardclaw will be fine,” she told me, a weak smile brushing her face.

“Looks like getting to that river was a good idea,” he admitted, giving me a graced nod.

“Y-yes, indeed.” The froslass set down the object she’d been holding. “The cold slows the wound’s developing process.”

“Oh...and that’s why your clinic is all...icy and freezing?” I questioned, not thinking of that till now. She nodded happily, and I copied her motion. “Anyway...can I go now?”

“Yes, you may go,” she affirmed, and I was more than happy to begin my walk towards the exit. Thankfully the clinic had its own entrance (or exit, in my case) so I wasn’t forced to cross her adjoined living area to escape. I came to a halt before entering the sunnier realm, and threw my head over my shoulders. From the angle I was at, only Zhol’s feet and some of her arms and head could be seen. I felt my eyebrows fall. ‘Sheesh... That left foot looks terrible... I really hope her injuries aren’t too bad...’

After wandering the premises for something to do and coming across Mynk, I strode to Habib’s home by her recommendation. Only the slowqueen was home, and I sighed, wondering what she would issue me to do next. “Excuse me,” I began after poking my head in. “I need something to do.”

She pulled away from her bench, which Larse was on the other side of, and stated, “Oh! Hello, there. Would you like to come in?”

I wondered myself if I wanted to. “...Nah, I’m good here.” I was about to repeat myself as she seemed to realise why I was there.

“Oh, the hunting trip... How unfortunate.” She looked as if she was searching her mind when Mynk appeared beside me.

“Oh, hey again.”

“Hi, Dusty.” She turned to Ikari. “We will set out immediately.”

“W...where are you going?” I wondered, hoping not to be left alone.

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Default Re: Through the Eyes of a Flareon ~ [PG]

Ikari answered my question as she got my attention. “They will be going hunting as a replacement for your group.”

“Ahh...” I answered, hoping Ikari wasn’t mad with us. After all...it’s not like it was our fault.

“I’m also ready,” mentioned someone from behind, and I turned to see none other than Azure. I flinched at the sight of her, but she didn’t, as she’d have seen me from behind.

“Good,” Ikari replied happily with a nod.

“But, Dame Slowqueen,” the linoone started, shuffling through the door. She continued as I looked to Azure.

“...What happened...to your group?” she asked awkwardly, and I wasn’t sure how to reply. Was she being patronising after seeing my battle wounds, or was she actually interested in what happened to us? I decided the most likely answer was that she wanted to know the reason she was being sent out in our place.

“Well...a random group of wild pokémon decided we were their enemies,” I mumbled, avoiding eye contact. “It was weird. They attacked us out of the blue.”

Before Azure had a chance to reply and right before I remembered that there was something important I had to ask her, I was addressed, and responded with the turn of my head. “There is a very important task I can give you,” the pink pokémon told me. I felt a smile poke me in the mouth, and I wondered what kind of special mission I was going to be assigned to. “Do you have experience with young pokémon?”

***

A body thudded against the wet ground, and a whimper emitted from the brown pokémon’s mouth. It was a question if anyone could really take him seriously though, since the large buck teeth he possessed were often classed as comical. “I-I’m sorry! I don’t know!”

A tiny rounded body stood firmly at his feet, overlooking the bibarel. “Not good enough,” he tormented, his eyes lighting up and a purple outline beginning to border the cowering dual type.

The Mr. Mime rolled his eyes, sighing placidly and making a clicking sound with his cheeks. “You’ll have to do better than that,” he shrugged while pacing. He moved his head. “‘Cause otherwise it’ll show up on that lovely lardy body of yours.”

“Dontcha mean there’ll be no body left for anything to show up on?” questioned the togepi, a malicious laugh making its way from his tiny mouth. The psychic type nearby chuckled in response.

“Yes...” He gave a sigh and turned to exit. He appeared outside, glancing to the transparent box of helpless captives as they squirmed for freedom. His eyes fell to the ivysaur standing guard, and asked, “Anything?”

The grass and poison type shook his head. “No, Shaz. Nothing.” He looked to his right as if it was to pretend he was distracted.

“Oh?” Shaz scanned his near-invisible walls. “Nothing...at all?”

“N-no. Apart from what we already know—that they came through here.” The ivysaur looked down, muttering, “S-sorry,” unsure if that was an appropriate response or not.

“It’s not your fault, kid,” replied the psychic type, placing a hand on his accomplice’s head. He was about to disappear through the entrance to the leader’s lodge when he stopped. “...I want you to investigate something for me,” he requested, sinking as his knees bent. The ivysaur was wondering and curious as he held a small mouth. “I want you to find out who else talked with them. And...use any means necessary of making them talk.”

He nodded hesitantly, exposing his vines as if for confidence. “Y-yes, Shaz.”

The Mr. Mime’s eyes fogged over with malicious intent, and he smiled, patting the ivysaur’s head. “Good boy.”

***

I’ve been a trainer pokémon my whole life. From the moment I could fight, I participated in battle after battle, striving for greatness to impress my master and weave into the spot of her favourite. On occasion she and I travelled through rough plains, Izante and her trainer there to keep us company, and I would fight off wild pokémon and harsh weather. I was a qualified warrior with high endurance and a sturdy work ethic.

Regarding that... In all honesty I had not expected to be assigned...to this. After being sent on a dangerous hunting mission, it was my duty to do something I’d never conquered before. It was the second task of my stay at the colony...and it was to babysit?

“Play with us, Miss Flareon!” droned a small child—Mynk’s daughter. She tugged on my mane with her stubby paws, and I pulled away, grimacing at her.

“Watch the fur!” I growled, and she stopped to stare. I nearly felt bad before she recoiled and came straight back.

“Mosst is hogging the climbing tree!” whined a small orange pokémon with blue fins on his forearms.

“N-no, I’m not,” protested a little heracross, shyly keeping her distance and stepping away from the trunk.

“Uh oh,” uttered a meditite, “I did an oopsie...” His face looked as if it had caught on fire as he blushed, and I didn’t even want to KNOW what an ‘oopsie’ was.

One spinarak stared intrusively at my tuft and asked, “Why is it so floppy?”

“You smell funny,” pointed out a rude aipom.

“Why are you so fat?” I was poked by that same buizel.

“IT’S FUR!” I shouted, causing the little one to hide behind a stump.

“Were you the one on the ship?” inquired a shuppet, and with an effort I ignored him.

I flung my head to a, “Can you teach us kung fu?”

“I don’t know kung fu!” I shouted, sending the offspring floating away in a river of tears. “Ugh...”

“Help me clean my toes!” yelled another, shoving a foot in my face.

“NO!” I rumbled, finding the very thought disgusting as I swatted the limb from my view.

“What happened to your tail?” wondered an oddish, and I almost fried him, but he ran off before I could.

“Did you have to go to the healing clinic?”

“I WANT TO BURY YOU!” exclaimed an excited gligar, clinging to a stump.

“What’s wrong with your ear?” a plusle questioned, and when she stood on her friend’s head to touch my bullet wound, I happened to realise and spun around, scaring her from her place.

Someone from the other side of me asked, “Where’s Uncle Luck?”

My face became a wrinkled mess as I hissed my reply. “Leave me...a—”

“I made you a mud pie!” someone else sung, presenting a glob of mud in their filthy paws.

“I falled over and hurted my tail!” complained a random azurill.

“My wing hurts more,” insisted an attention-seeking taillow, and I roared, explaining – rather loudly – that a scratch is nothing, and she should be thankful that I wasn’t eating her at the present moment... She flew to the other end of the daycare grounds.

“Excuse me,” interrupted yet another brat, and I began to wonder if they were ever going to SHUT UP, “can you help me make a sandcastle?”

I drilled my violent glare into the yellow pokémon’s seemingly closed eyes and watched him become shocked. “MAKE YOUR OWN BLOOMIN’ SANDCASTLE,” I began, feeling flames lick my throat. “Aren’t abra supposed to sleep for eighteen hours of the day?”

That one scurried off too, so I was only left with only...oh, TWENTY BA-JILLION. Realising this, I upped and fled, darting to the end of the grounds—the end Mynk and I had shared our discussion near. Glancing over my shoulder, I saw, thankfully, too many obstacles obscuring my vision for a sight of the frustrating kids...

“Excuse me,” asked the pokémon I could see coming towards me, and I was relieved to finally come across another non-child. “Need some help?” It was the heracross...Yuka?

“YES,” I responded dramatically, and he gave a chuckle.

“The name’s Yukra,” he added, and I shrugged. Nearly remembered it right.

“Dusty.”

“Yeah, I know. You’re the new kid on the block!” he teased, and I narrowed my eyes. But he chuckled once more, passing me with a playful nudge. I heaved a sigh, and if I had a FULL TAIL I’d have flicked its end in agitation.

He plodded in front of me as I dragged myself behind him, appearing before the lot of partially confused – but otherwise absent-minded – small pokémon. “Not again...”

The heracross turned to me, giving a warm smile. “Come on. They’re not hard to manage.”

I dug my paws into the soil. “They’re little horrors! And they won’t leave me alone.”

He chuckled and navigated his way through the bunch. I noticed as some stared timidly as I followed, and I just sighed, focusing my gaze somewhere else. We walked between structures and random sections before coming to a large tree whose branches stretched widely above and reached unexpected lengths throughout the grounds. “Mosst! Come here; I want to introduce you to someone,” Yukra explained, and a heracross crawled out from behind a tree, a shred of bark between her paws. She timidly shielded herself with Yukra’s sturdy legs, and he tossed a glance down his side, her eyes meeting his. “This is our new friend.” He raised a claw at me. “Say hello.”

With what I could see was courage, the dark blue pokémon first contemplated her stance, and secondly she began, “H...hello.” Once that was over she took cover behind the safety of his legs again, and honesly I didn’t know how to react. Clearly if I made too big of a movement she’d probably scurry away and never talk to me again, and I wasn’t sure if I thought she was a bit overdramatic for reacting how she did or not. Perhaps she’s just shy?

“Nice to meet you,” I replied, nodding and staying put. If I created distance between us, she wouldn’t feel like I’m intruding. There was no change about her, however.

“Okay, you can go now,” Yukra offered innocently, and the smaller heracross seemed hesitant at first, but then decided that her feet were to remain firmly planted. I wasn’t surprised: Yukra seemed like a very hardy pokémon and an appropriate protector. “Or...stay here.”

It nearly made me smile, the sight of father and daughter. “...Your kid’s cute.”

Yukra was nearly taken aback by my statement, and in response I eyed him strangely. “No, she’s not my daughter,” he stated, shaking his horn.

“Then...whose is she?”

“My sister’s,” he told me, and my immediate thoughts were questions about how many of these colony members had adopted smaller pokémon—from relatives or not.

Very softly the small bug type spoke up. “Mummy and Daddy are on holidays in the forest.” She stole an avoidant glance from her uncle, and I cocked my head.

“So you’re looking after...Mosst until they return?” I asked, realising it made sense.

He gave a mixed expression. “It’s...a bit complicated.” He met his niece’s eyes and added, “Yeah. That’s basically it.”

***

I’d very quickly accepted Yukra’s offer to join me for the rest of the day, since it meant I wasn’t left alone with a thousand crazy brats, and it actually hadn’t been too bad. He’d shown me around and told me a few things about it. “They were so jumpy and persistent because they haven’t been able to warm to a care taker in a while.”

“What about Wynore?” I had asked as we padded between little pokémon swinging and playing, chatting and running. Mosst was latched onto Yukra’s back, her arms hooked around his shoulders and her legs hugging his shell.

“I assume you noticed that she’s been acting...not herself lately.”

“Well, I’ve never met her before this, so I wouldn’t know how she is...as herself.”

The heracross had given me a look, and then he’d withdrawn it again. “She’s only this way because ol’ Lucky isn’t around.” A nearby rock took flight as his foot slammed into its middle, and I’d nearly flinched. “It means she sometimes has breakdowns, and for a short time the kids have nobody to look after them.”

At that stage I’d been surprised by how much bitterness stained his words, and I wondered what it was directed at. I figured it must have been the general fact of things going wrong, or it was possible he resented Wynore for her apparent uncontrollable action. Whatever it was he didn’t reveal.

By the time every parent turned up to retrieve their young it was sunset, and that too hadn’t lasted long. Currently I sat outside the healing clinic, waiting for Aemara to emerge and let me in. For some reason she had told me to wait until I was granted permission, and although that made me feel like I was taking orders from a stranger who didn’t have the right, I obliged and took a seat on the soil.

At least ten minutes had passed, and I sat twiddling my toes as several thoughts crossed my mind. Before taking on the unwanted mission of babysitting, Ikari had mentioned some kind of ‘colony meeting’ which apparently took place in a section of their land I’d seen before. It was before Den Row and between the lake and the fruit shed, and it was basically a clearing with logs centred around a campfire (which hadn’t been lit), so I assumed we were supposed to sit on the logs and have a discussion around the fire. I couldn’t say I was looking forward to it, but it sounded better than babysitting!

My wait dragged on until my ears pricked to a series of thuds, and it took me not long to determine that somebody was approaching. I whirled around to have my view obstructed by Shardclaw, who came to a halt behind me. Uncomfortably he took his place opposite me and we sat in silence.

I looked up after a while and caught his eyes darting from mine. I let a sigh warm my paws and he seemed to notice. “...Here to see Zhol?”

He appeared surprised to find that I was speaking to him, and made a hesitant nodding gesture. “Y-yeah...”

We kept silent for moments longer before I finally asked, “Were your injuries bad?”

“...Not really,” he muttered, avoiding my gaze. “A-a few scratches...burns along my back...”

“Guess your armour prevents serious injuries,” I mentioned, figuring that to be the reason he was practically unscathed by the boulders. I recognised the shallow gashes left by the two nutzo sandslash and I knew of the burns that were spread up his back and at the start of his wings. Apart from that all that seemed apparent was the collection of ancient scars which clearly weren’t fresh.

“Not all...but most,” he replied, glancing down his right – well, his left and my right – side where the scarring was most visible. It almost looked as if someone had attempted to fry him once before, rather than rip him to pieces. There were claw and tooth marks, however, yet I couldn’t help but suspect that fire had seared his armour long ago.

“So, do you know why those pokémon just decided to show up and ambush us?” I questioned. It was likely he didn’t but anything would be better than no answer at all.

“I’m afraid I cannot give you an answer,” the scyther replied solemnly, and I rolled my eyes, figuring that was typical. “Yet I find it extremely odd,” he mused, eying the ground before looking to me, then to a rock, then back to me.

“Aren’t you friends with your neighbours?” I asked with a shrug.

“They...aren’t exactly neighbouring pokémon...” he mumbled. “Some of the pokémon here might know the ones living in that area.” He drew a long breath as if to settling himself, and added, “Though I can’t be sure.”

I never knew much about neighbours myself, being a traveller my entire life, but I figured them to be friends of some sort. Going ahead and doing some sort of research would be beneficial and after my visit to my sneasel friend, I decided that, avoiding any other unwanted tasks, I could interview some of the colony’s pokémon to find answers.

“What strikes me as strange,” Shard began, and I turned to him again, not realising he had more to say. He seemed hesitant as he met my eyes. “Is that...after Zhol and I were attacked by a numel and a sandshrew, they had an advantage. Zhol’s foot had become wedged between the two sections in the ground, and my burns were fresh. Yet they...left.”

At first I had no idea what he meant by that, and I tilted my head. “...Waddaya mean?”

“The sandshrew was headed directly towards Zhol, and although I was too distracted to see everything, I caught enough to know he didn’t attack her while she was stuck. Then he sped past her curled as a ball and made his way to the rock ledge. He bowled some light rocks from the cliff edge, and they were easy to dodge, but by the time he stopped I noticed the numel beside him.” I titled my head as he continued, his face etched with concern and perplexity. “The rocks were a distraction for the numel to climb the ledges and get to where the sandshrew was, and then...they left. Not long after that you met up with us.”

As much as this puzzled me as well, I wasn’t exactly interested in sifting through details of the unknown. “Weird...” I left it at that and bother not to ponder it further. Changing the subject after a minute of no conversation, I queried, “How long have you known her?” At first he looked a little lost, at which point I decided to add, “Zhol,” and he gave a nod of recognition.

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“It’s been...years now. Ever since she began living here as a young sneasel,” he answered, the awkward feeling slowly slipping from between us.

“Oh...okay.” As much as I was yearning to ask him how Zhol wound up at the colony, somehow I picked it as something that I would need to ask the sneasel herself. “Well...” I sighed, figuring I should save it for Zhol. I switched to a new question instead. “Care to...tell me your story?”

The scyther visibly flinched and I watched his wings sink. I came to wonder if I had asked the wrong thing, but it was wiped away as Aemara suddenly floated from her ice den after removing the thick, nicely fitting door with presumable psychic powers. I wasn’t aware she was part psychic type, and I came to the conclusion that she was also an ice type.

“O-oh, Shardclaw,” she began, clearly surprised to see him.

“Hello, Aemara,” he replied respectfully, bopping his head to her.

“And you.” She smiled and turned to me, and I stood up.

“Can I see Zhol now?” I stared at her, the anticipation killing me as the opposing pokémon said nothing. “...Can I?”

“Y-yes. However...” She trailed off and I nearly went in, but a blade suddenly appeared and I followed it back to Shard’s wary and disapproving face. He flicked his eyes to the ice and psychic type, leading me to do the same, and I exhaled. “She will need an escort everywhere she walks.”

To this news I lowered an eyebrow, wondering for what possible reason that would need to happen. “Why?”

“Her injuries are too great for her to rely only on her own strength. She will need others to support her.”

I gasped, remembering the state of that foot after I had returned from my encounter with the hoity-toity houndoom and his haughty heroics. No wonder she would have trouble walking... Her foot had looked ruined and completely unfit for using for support, and now that I thought about it, it had definitely affected her gait on our way to the colony.

Suddenly I felt worried. She couldn’t be seriously injured...could she? “L-let me in.”

The froslass complied and allowed me passage into her clinic, the chill that spiked every section of the air catching me off guard. However, it was nothing compared to the sight of an incapacitated Zhol lying feebly on an elevated mat of hay. “Zhol!” I squeaked, not expecting to see her in such a state. I padded, my head level with my shoulders, to her table and couldn’t help but sniff wearily. I closed the distance between us and swallowed. “Zhol?”

“Y-you shouldn’t wake her!” insisted Aemara as she floated in alongside Shard, but I clenched my jaws and pretended I knew better.

With a moan and a flicker of her eyelids, the sneasel came to life and edged her head towards me. Much to my surprise, she gave a somewhat soft smile. It almost seemed as if she was relieved to see me.

“Are you feeling alright?” I asked, trying to reflect her expression.

She gripped the edge of the bench with her right paw and pressed against the hay, her whole body rising. The other arm extended to her left foot as she seemed to inspect it, her claws touching the well-wrapped bandages. By this time her smile had thinned out, and her expression was that of conscientiousness and uncertainty. Her eyes fell to her torso, where the other pieces of cloth had been tied in the spot shallow gashes had previously scattered her skin. A thousand thoughts looked to be zipping back and forth through her mind, and honestly I hadn’t a clue of what her opinion on the material was. “Thank you, Aemara,” she finally mentioned, though not making eye contact with the floating pokémon. She didn’t sound too enthused, however, and I wondered if she really meant it.

“I-it’s my duty,” Aemara replied with a bit of a smile. “Please don’t overwork yourself. I suggest staying with the colony for the next week or two.”

At this Zhol almost jumped; clearly she hadn’t expected such a piece of news. Her brow furrowed as Shard stepped closer. “Your wounds are too great for you to be up and participating in something such as hunting or battling. It...would be foolish to expose yourself to more danger and risk an infection of some sort, or to have your wounds struggle to heal.” The scyther seemed to droop as he explained, and I could only guess he was disappointed or empathetic. My eyes scanned his left side quickly before averting to Zhol.

The sneasel stiffened as she absorbed what flew to her ears, and I continued to stare as I took it upon myself to add something else she would need to be aware of. “...Also, uhh...” I searched for the right words as she waited expectantly, all cheer ridden from her solemn eyes. “Well, you won’t be able to walk...without help.” I signalled to her crumpled foot as she followed, then met me at my spot again. I averted my accusing stare to Aemara, and she perked up, ready to listen. “Hey, can’t we give her crutches or something?” At first the other three stared at me blankly, and it was then that I realised that was a human term. “You know...a piece of wood like a walking stick that she can lean on for support?”

Aemara pondered before saying, “I’m afraid that will be difficult for Zhol to hold.” She looked to the sneasel’s paws. “Given she does not have thumbs...”

“Well then...secure her paw to it with something. Or put a hole in the wood somewhere where her paw can rest.”

“...I’m afraid it’s not that simple,” Aemara replied, trailing off. I knew she was resistant to create an argument of any sort, so I left it at that and merely rolled my eyes.

“Well...” Zhol looked to me. “I...I know it’s a l—”

“It’s fine,” she intervened, staring back at her foot. I could tell she was avoiding tension between us as she kept her eyes fixed, and she must have found it easier to suppress her feelings if she wasn’t connecting with someone at that moment. “It was foolish of me to be so reckless.”

Suddenly I felt myself relax and tense up immediately after. I raised my cheeks, but I was not smiling. “You’re...blaming yourself?” I questioned, finding the thought rather absurd. Especially when she had no control over the pokémon that did this to her, and it wasn’t her who attacked first!

Her hardened expression slipped from her grasp as she looked back to me. It was as if she was at a loss for words. Whether she realised it or not was uncertain, and I had to wonder why she was so shocked that I would point it out. My question hung in the air as she returned to her foot and asked, “Is the colony meeting soon?”

Having ignored my question, I ignored hers and let Shard answer. “Yes. As a hunter, you’ll need to attend.”

“As a member of the colony, you have to attend,” someone corrected rather matter-of-factly, and all four of us turned to the entrance. “Hey, Aemara.”

“Tarla,” the froslass beamed, her mood immediately brightening as she identified her visitor.

“Oh,” I grumbled inaudibly, “you.” The altaria’s appearance certainly didn’t excite me, and frankly I would have preferred not to have seen her.

“Yes, I’m aware,” Zhol responded without particular hostility; it sounded as if the sneasel had enough respect for the flying and dragon type to address her without attitude. For some reason I’d assumed she wouldn’t have liked her, but I supposed that was my job.

“Here to tell you that the colony meet will be held after nightmeal.” She nodded her head to Aemara, the froslass repeating the motion politely in return, and the intruder was out in a flash.

The silence returned to prod us in the backs before we looked to one another, and Shard focused his gaze on Zhol. “Would you like me to assist you?”

Zhol remained focused on her foot before she released her frown and nodded. The scyther made a swift movement to the side of the bench, seemingly unfazed by the burns stretched up his back, and held his scythes normally out in front of him as Zhol swung her legs over the side. She dropped to the floor and kept one foot off the ground, bending her left paw’s claws over the top of his scythe as a means of gripping it. She showed a weak smile before they began walking, her paw pressing down as her available foot hopped forward. The bug and flying type was clearly dealing without a problem as the added pressure to his supported scythe did him no disservice, and the duo made it to the exit without a hiccup. Shard pushed the door open with his shoulder, making his way out first, and held open the door while supporting the smaller sneasel at the same time.

Aemara smiled and turned to me as I strode forwards, slightly confused. I hadn’t helped her at all, and she seemed too occupied to see if I was following... I shook my head and paced forward, a timid voice catching my attention before I was within a metre of the doorway.

“E-excuse me,” Aemara began, moving around to my left, “but... Your hollow wound.” She moved her sleeve-like hand to point it at my thigh. “...May I ask how you got it?”

It took me no longer than a moment to figure she was referring to my bullet wound, and I knew she must have realised it was less than fresh, and therefore it couldn’t have happened during today’s fight. She flashed her eyes to my ear and it was obvious she knew of my ear’s problem as well.

“Uhh... I’ll explain...later,” I answered, feeling as if I was in the wrong position to talk about the ship and the events that took place. I figured I’d tell everyone at once, perhaps even at the colony meet if it was convenient.

The froslass wasn’t overly thrilled with my answer, as she was presumably concerned, but she could wait. As could everyone else I’d briefly told about the ship and why their colony members were missing.

The question I wanted to ask was why. Why was I the one to tell everyone and blabber on about the awful things that happened to us? ‘I guess I took on the responsibility the moment I decided to take matters into my own paws...’ I scowled and turned away. ‘It’s unfair...’

Strutting from the icy den, I stepped into the fresh air once more. Night was swelling and would soon engulf us all; everything had changed colour and the atmosphere was beginning to quieten. This would mean fewer distractions for when I relayed the anecdote...

I froze. I blinked. I felt a terrible pain extend through my stomach. ‘Oh, crap. Oh, crap. Oh, sh**.’ I heard Aemara ask me if I was alright before I bit down and tensed my paws.

Not only would I have to tell the colony that their members were captured and about to be shipped off to some Team Rocket Headquarters, but...I’d have to tell them that one of them was murdered. That Luck was murdered.

‘How the HELL am I going to do that...?’
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Yeah, I was going to have more, but I wanted to post it, and it was long enough. o:

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First of all...BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! THAT CHAPTER PICTURE!

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She toppled over, her face beginning pulse with beats of pain.
Beginning to pulse.

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It slipped and she scraped her ankle as her a sharp rock gashed her its top,
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“Why didn’t you want it? It was your catch, after all,” Shard had asked/mentioned, and I had given a sheepish smile.

“I...uh...dropped it in the river, and it...got...slimy?”
No, Shard! Don't eat it! GERMS!

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And it’s not like Shard could have caught me—unless I wanted a change from four to two legs.
But according to other stories, scythers can hold things! =B And chop wood.

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“There is a very important task I can give you,” the pink pokémon told me. I felt a smile poke me in the mouth, and I wondered what kind of special mission I was going to be assigned to. “Do you have experience with young pokémon?”
Dun dun DUN!

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“Mosst is hogging the climbing tree!” whined a small orange pokémon with blue fins on his forearms.

“N-no, I’m not,” protested a little heracross, shyly keeping her distance and stepping away from the trunk.
How cute! I love that little heracross!

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“Uh oh,” uttered a meditite, “I did an oopsie...” His face looked as if it had caught on fire as he blushed, and I didn’t even want to KNOW what an ‘oopsie’ was.
XDDDDDD

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“Why are you so fat?” I was poked by that same buizel.
I love the random questions the little kids ask! XD

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“I WANT TO BURY YOU!” exclaimed an excited gligar, clinging to a stump.
How random! XD

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“My wing hurts more,” insisted an attention-seeking taillow, and I roared, explaining – rather loudly – that a scratch is nothing, and she should be thankful that I wasn’t eating her at the present moment... She flew to the other end of the daycare grounds.
Haha, 'attention-seeking taillow'. xD

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“Mosst! Come here; I want to introduce you to someone,” Yukra explained, and a heracross crawled out from behind a tree, a shred of bark between her paws. She timidly shielded herself with Yukra’s sturdy legs, and he tossed a glance down his side, her eyes meeting his. “This is our new friend.” He raised a claw at me. “Say hello.”
I love all the parts with Mosst!

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It nearly made me smile, the sight of son and daughter. “...Your kid’s cute.”
Son?

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Mosst was latched onto Yukra’s back, her arms hooked around his shoulders and her legs hugging his shell.
That's such a cute image!

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“Guess your armour prevents most injuries,” I mentioned, figuring that to be the reason he was practically unscathed by the boulders. I recognised the shallow gashes left by the two nutzo sandslash and I knew of the burns that were spread up his back and at the start of his wings. Apart from that all that seemed apparent was the collection of ancient scars which clearly weren’t fresh.

“Not all...but most,” he replied, glancing down his right – well, his left and my right – side where the scarring was most visible.
It seems odd that Shard would reply "not all...but most" in response to what Dusty said. I really like that statement but I think Dusty should have said something like "guess your armor prevents serious injuries" so that he could reply with that and it would make a bit more sense, because the way it is now she wasn't implying that it prevented all injuries. Either that, or Shard could just say, "not all...but yes, most," or something like that.

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To settle?



I'm so excited about the new chapter! (Yes, even still after I read it. XD) First of all, I really liked the part with Shard in the battle at the beginning. I liked how it seemed like he wasn't going to help at first, and then it switched to his thoughts. I especially liked this sentence, "He couldn’t just leave her there. He was a protector; a warrior. He was not prey; he was a predator." I really love that and it reminds me a lot of how I see scythers. AND THEN HE SAVED HER. *v* I love, love, LOVE when characters sacrifice themselves to save others (well, not when they DIE, but you know what I mean xD). It's just so awesome and it really shows what a good friend Shard is. I mean, he had to have been REALLY brave at that moment to take two fire attacks for his friend! That was epic! (Speaking of which, I thought it was interesting that there was a second attack immediately after the first. It was realistic yet really unexpected. It surprised me. XD)

And yay for a good, helpful houndoom! I'm kinda curious about what his personality's like though, since it didn't show much of him. o: I sorta doubt he really just came there to show off to Dusty though. Maybe that was just his excuse. XD Now I'm really curious as to why those wild pokemon attacked. There must be more to it, but at the moment I can't really think of what that would be. MYSTERY!

The part with Shaz was interesting too....it made me want to know who those pokemon captives were, and what he and the others were planning on doing with them. More mysteries!

And the Daykcare part! I loved all the random little kid questions! XDDD I wonder why they didn't see Libbi there, though. o: Was she not there at the time, or just somewhere off to the side not drawing much attention to herself? And good think Yukra came in! I think all the little pokemon would have ended up escaping and running wild into the forest or the rest of the colony if he hadn't. XD I loved his interactions with Mosst and how shy she was around Dusty. XD His comment was interesting, though...I do wonder how many pokemon there are adopted. o: I wonder when Dusty will find out more about them.

I also really loved the part with Shard and Dusty talking. I like how he wasn't so uneasy to be around her anymore. I really liked that comment I quoted before about Shard's armor not quite being protective against injuries all the time. I kinda wonder what Dusty thought about that, but I don't think it said much about what she thought. I also wanted him to actually tell Dusty his story, and I was sad when she got interrupted. I hope he does soon, or at least at some point in the story. Then things will make more sense to her.

Also I love how Shard was the one to help Zohl in the end, even though he was injured himself. It was so nice! I wonder why he didn't seem that bothered by his wounds, though. I'm guessing he's just pretty tough or used to worse pain or something, which would make sense, being a warrior pokemon.

I really liked this chapter as it was really eventful and gave me a lot to think about it. I'm really interested to see how that meeting goes, and, especially, how Shard and the others react to the news about Luck's death. I'm also really curious about how the plot's going to develop, because I'm really not sure where it's going to go now. o: More mystery! Looking forward to the next chapters! =D
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First of all...BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! THAT CHAPTER PICTURE!

Beginning to pulse.

Huh?

No, Shard! Don't eat it! GERMS!

But according to other stories, scythers can hold things! =B And chop wood.

Dun dun DUN!

How cute! I love that little heracross!

XDDDDDD
xDDDD THANK YOU I WANTED THEM TO LOOK CREEPY. xD

NO IT'S BEGINNING PULSE! (Not really... I changed it. xD)

xDDDDDDDDD I don't think he cares much about germs. xDD

xDD True, true. Though mine isn't full of anti-sense. xDDD

O___O IT'S SO INTENTS.

xDD Yay, I'm glad you think she is! I was going for cute. xD

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I love the random questions the little kids ask! XD

How random! XD

Haha, 'attention-seeking taillow'. xD

I love all the parts with Mosst!

Son?

That's such a cute image!
xDDD I was trying to think of all these random ones, and for some reason I love the I WANT TO BURY YOU one, since it reminds me of you and me when we're being random AND TALKING IN CAPITALS. xDDD

Haha, yep, apparently. x)

Yay! 8D Hehe, I'm happy you like her. xD

YES THAT'S THE TWIST! THEY'RE ACTUALLY BROTHER AND SISTER. O______O (Okay, not really... xD)

Yeah, haha, I actually forgot I'd written that and I saw it last night and loved the image. xDD

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It seems odd that Shard would reply "not all...but most" in response to what Dusty said. I really like that statement but I think Dusty should have said something like "guess your armor prevents serious injuries" so that he could reply with that and it would make a bit more sense, because the way it is now she wasn't implying that it prevented all injuries. Either that, or Shard could just say, "not all...but yes, most," or something like that.

To settle?
Hmm...you're actually right. xDDD I think your suggestion for what Dusty should say sounds better. xD I think I initially intended (too many i words!) for him to be like how you suggested secondly, all like "yeah, you're right--not all, but most," type of thing, but I think what you suggested makes more sense. xDD *changes*

NO IT'S TO SETTLING. (...Sorry. xDD *changes*)

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I'm so excited about the new chapter! (Yes, even still after I read it. XD) First of all, I really liked the part with Shard in the battle at the beginning. I liked how it seemed like he wasn't going to help at first, and then it switched to his thoughts. I especially liked this sentence, "He couldn’t just leave her there. He was a protector; a warrior. He was not prey; he was a predator." I really love that and it reminds me a lot of how I see scythers. AND THEN HE SAVED HER. *v* I love, love, LOVE when characters sacrifice themselves to save others (well, not when they DIE, but you know what I mean xD). It's just so awesome and it really shows what a good friend Shard is. I mean, he had to have been REALLY brave at that moment to take two fire attacks for his friend! That was epic! (Speaking of which, I thought it was interesting that there was a second attack immediately after the first. It was realistic yet really unexpected. It surprised me. XD)
Yay for being excitement! 8D (xDDDD Awesome! That makes me happy. xD) Cool! 8D Hehehe, yay! Yeah, I knew he realistically wouldn't have stood back, even though he was petrified of that numel. xD And yeah, it's kinda like him convincing himself, because he sees scythers like that too! 8D YES HE DID. c: (xDDD Yeah, haha, I know what you mean! I love it too! You get all warm and fuzzy inside. xDD) Yeah, I was really happy that he would do something like that, because I would have hated to write about Zhol getting really injured while she was already helpless. Dx And since she's part ice, that would be another reason Shard would want to protect her--and yeah, I like the idea of their relationship, in that they're really good friends and they're willing to do a lot for each other. I guess they're hunting buddies, and since they both have sharp claws/scythes, hate fire, and are really fast species, then they'd naturally get along! 8D Oh, really? xDD Well I just imagined the numel would have been really surprised that he took the attack for Zhol and so he fired another attack to get an advantage over them, BUT NO. SHARD IS TOO STRONG. c: Both physically and mentally! 8D I see him as a really strong and hardy character, and I think Dusty does too. xD

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And yay for a good, helpful houndoom! I'm kinda curious about what his personality's like though, since it didn't show much of him. o: I sorta doubt he really just came there to show off to Dusty though. Maybe that was just his excuse. XD Now I'm really curious as to why those wild pokemon attacked. There must be more to it, but at the moment I can't really think of what that would be. MYSTERY!

The part with Shaz was interesting too....it made me want to know who those pokemon captives were, and what he and the others were planning on doing with them. More mysteries!
Yay! 8D Yeah, haha, a good, helpful and pride-struck one. xDD Hahaha, yeah, it'll be fun to write about him! I mean...no...he won't become a frequent character... *shifts eyes* xDDD Hahaha, yay for in-depth thoughts! 8D Well it was an excuse, but also partly true. XDDDD Getting on her good side. Although she got really angry at him because she thinks he stole her thunder in a way, and--


Dusty: He did! But it's not just that... He acted like I couldn't handle it! T^T

Well you weren't exactly winning... *moves on* Yeah, it's not clear why they attacked as of yet. o: It's kind of a simple reason, but it'll be explained...one day. xDD

Yeah, Shaz and his gang. :3 ALSO. Oh, haha, I thought I made it clear, but I'm glad I didn't! xDDD Haha, you'll find out who those pokemon were in the next chapter. They were only their captives while they were there. xD MYSTERIES WOOO!!!!

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And the Daykcare part! I loved all the random little kid questions! XDDD I wonder why they didn't see Libbi there, though. o: Was she not there at the time, or just somewhere off to the side not drawing much attention to herself? And good think Yukra came in! I think all the little pokemon would have ended up escaping and running wild into the forest or the rest of the colony if he hadn't. XD I loved his interactions with Mosst and how shy she was around Dusty. XD His comment was interesting, though...I do wonder how many pokemon there are adopted. o: I wonder when Dusty will find out more about them.
xDDDDDDD YES! 8D I had so much fun writing that bit. xD Haha, I'm glad! They were fun to write. xD No, she was there, but she, yeah, would have been away from the crowd. :( I really hope I can include her properly...I mean, honestly her and Mynk were only there because I wanted to have characters from the one-shots involved, and since it was an available place to have them in, it seemed appropriate. Mynk's definitely an important character though...I mean, not that important to the plot, but she's an important character to me, and yeah... :3 xDD Yeah, he saved her big time. xD She couldn't handle those kids at all. And yeah, that probably would have happened. xDD Hehe, yeah, he loves Mosst a lot. :D o: Well I think it's actually just those two who have adopted, but yeah. xDD I Yukra technically didn't adopt if the parents are just 'on holiday'. c:

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I also really loved the part with Shard and Dusty talking. I like how he wasn't so uneasy to be around her anymore. I really liked that comment I quoted before about Shard's armor not quite being protective against injuries all the time. I kinda wonder what Dusty thought about that, but I don't think it said much about what she thought. I also wanted him to actually tell Dusty his story, and I was sad when she got interrupted. I hope he does soon, or at least at some point in the story. Then things will make more sense to her.
Cool! :D I hoped it wasn't boring or anything. o: But maybe it would make for a good voice acting scene. ^^ Yeah, I was wondering whether it was too soon or not, but I think he trusts her after the hunting trip, and also since Zhol and Dusty are friends. Yeah, she didn't really think too much into it. o: xD Well he's hesitant to tell her also because they're not great friends, but yeah, and because he doesn't feel comfortable about it anyway. Hehe, I wonder too. x)

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Also I love how Shard was the one to help Zohl in the end, even though he was injured himself. It was so nice! I wonder why he didn't seem that bothered by his wounds, though. I'm guessing he's just pretty tough or used to worse pain or something, which would make sense, being a warrior pokemon.

I really liked this chapter as it was really eventful and gave me a lot to think about it. I'm really interested to see how that meeting goes, and, especially, how Shard and the others react to the news about Luck's death. I'm also really curious about how the plot's going to develop, because I'm really not sure where it's going to go now. o: More mystery! Looking forward to the next chapters! =D
Yay! 8D YOU MEAN ZHOL. Yeah, I really wanted to show how much of a good pokemon he is and that he cares a lot for his friends. And yeah, pretty much--I didn't really want two simple fire moves to burn him severely as well, and getting to that river/being treated helped. Obviously he's not cured, but yeah, it reduced the pain and the badness. c:

Thank you! 8D I'm actually relieved it wasn't boring. xDD It did? Oh, cool! 8D I hope it gave you inspiration for your stories! 8D Cool. :3 Yeah... I'm really not looking forward to writing it, and Dusty isn't looking forward to telling it. D: Hehehe, well in the next chapter hopefully things will start to heat up! Yay for mystery! And yeah--nothing's really been revealed about the plot apart from tiny things that will tie in with other things, but so far you're not really supposed to know anything. xD W00T! Thanks for reading, and thanks for the awesome review! 8D I'm so excitement for your story too!
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xDDDD THANK YOU I WANTED THEM TO LOOK CREEPY. xD

NO IT'S BEGINNING PULSE! (Not really... I changed it. xD)

xDDDDDDDDD I don't think he cares much about germs. xDD

xDD True, true. Though mine isn't full of anti-sense. xDDD

O___O IT'S SO INTENTS.

xDD Yay, I'm glad you think she is! I was going for cute. xD
WELL YOU SUCCEEDED.

OKAY GOOD.

But it's so unsanitary! Doesn't he know he could get sick? DDD=

And that's one thing I love about it!

IT IS!

Well it worked!



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xDDD I was trying to think of all these random ones, and for some reason I love the I WANT TO BURY YOU one, since it reminds me of you and me when we're being random AND TALKING IN CAPITALS. xDDD

Haha, yep, apparently. x)

Yay! 8D Hehe, I'm happy you like her. xD

YES THAT'S THE TWIST! THEY'RE ACTUALLY BROTHER AND SISTER. O______O (Okay, not really... xD)

Yeah, haha, I actually forgot I'd written that and I saw it last night and loved the image. xDD
XDDD It is pretty random!

THEY ARE? *GAPS*

Yeah, it's really awesome!


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Hmm...you're actually right. xDDD I think your suggestion for what Dusty should say sounds better. xD I think I initially intended (too many i words!) for him to be like how you suggested secondly, all like "yeah, you're right--not all, but most," type of thing, but I think what you suggested makes more sense. xDD *changes*

NO IT'S TO SETTLING. (...Sorry. xDD *changes*)
Oh, okay! I liked Dusty's change better too. XD Well now it makes sense. Yay!

YES YOU BETTER CHANGE IT!



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Yay for being excitement! 8D (xDDDD Awesome! That makes me happy. xD) Cool! 8D Hehehe, yay! Yeah, I knew he realistically wouldn't have stood back, even though he was petrified of that numel. xD And yeah, it's kinda like him convincing himself, because he sees scythers like that too! 8D YES HE DID. c: (xDDD Yeah, haha, I know what you mean! I love it too! You get all warm and fuzzy inside. xDD) Yeah, I was really happy that he would do something like that, because I would have hated to write about Zhol getting really injured while she was already helpless. Dx And since she's part ice, that would be another reason Shard would want to protect her--and yeah, I like the idea of their relationship, in that they're really good friends and they're willing to do a lot for each other. I guess they're hunting buddies, and since they both have sharp claws/scythes, hate fire, and are really fast species, then they'd naturally get along! 8D Oh, really? xDD Well I just imagined the numel would have been really surprised that he took the attack for Zhol and so he fired another attack to get an advantage over them, BUT NO. SHARD IS TOO STRONG. c: Both physically and mentally! 8D I see him as a really strong and hardy character, and I think Dusty does too. xD
I'm glad it does! Yeah, I thought that was pretty cool! That he was afraid but he chose to help anyway! (Yay! I'm glad I'm not alone on that! *relieved*) Yeah, that would have been bad. D= I was actually thinking about that too, that her being an ice type would have made him want to protect her more. Yeah, they DO have a lot in common! And I'm guessing Zhol knows a lot about him too. Haha, well usually when those things happen there's not a second attack, which isn't too realistic so yours was better. XD YAY STRONGNESS! Yeah, that's how I see him too!


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Yay! 8D Yeah, haha, a good, helpful and pride-struck one. xDD Hahaha, yeah, it'll be fun to write about him! I mean...no...he won't become a frequent character... *shifts eyes* xDDD Hahaha, yay for in-depth thoughts! 8D Well it was an excuse, but also partly true. XDDDD Getting on her good side. Although she got really angry at him because she thinks he stole her thunder in a way, and--[/COLOR]

Dusty: He did! But it's not just that... He acted like I couldn't handle it! T^T

Well you weren't exactly winning... *moves on* Yeah, it's not clear why they attacked as of yet. o: It's kind of a simple reason, but it'll be explained...one day. xDD

Yeah, Shaz and his gang. :3 ALSO. Oh, haha, I thought I made it clear, but I'm glad I didn't! xDDD Haha, you'll find out who those pokemon were in the next chapter. They were only their captives while they were there. xD MYSTERIES WOOO!!!!
BUT A NON-VILLAINBOT! *GAPS* More mysteries!

Spark: That would never have happened to a jolteon!

Shut up! *pushes away* Oh, okay. Yay explanations!

Hm...okay. Guess I'll have to find out. o:



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xDDDDDDD YES! 8D I had so much fun writing that bit. xD Haha, I'm glad! They were fun to write. xD No, she was there, but she, yeah, would have been away from the crowd. :( I really hope I can include her properly...I mean, honestly her and Mynk were only there because I wanted to have characters from the one-shots involved, and since it was an available place to have them in, it seemed appropriate. Mynk's definitely an important character though...I mean, not that important to the plot, but she's an important character to me, and yeah... :3 xDD Yeah, he saved her big time. xD She couldn't handle those kids at all. And yeah, that probably would have happened. xDD Hehe, yeah, he loves Mosst a lot. :D o: Well I think it's actually just those two who have adopted, but yeah. xDD I Yukra technically didn't adopt if the parents are just 'on holiday'. c:
I bet you did! I love funny parts like that. XD Oh, okay. I was wondering why you didn't mention her. o: I hope you can too! Yeah, I thought so! I really like Mynk! Oh, really? I thought there would be more. XD Guess not. Yes...'on holiday'. D=


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Cool! :D I hoped it wasn't boring or anything. o: But maybe it would make for a good voice acting scene. ^^ Yeah, I was wondering whether it was too soon or not, but I think he trusts her after the hunting trip, and also since Zhol and Dusty are friends. Yeah, she didn't really think too much into it. o: xD Well he's hesitant to tell her also because they're not great friends, but yeah, and because he doesn't feel comfortable about it anyway. Hehe, I wonder too. x)
No, it wasn't boring! YOU SHOULD MAKE IT A VOICE ACTING SCENE! REQUEST SOMEONE TO DO SHARD'S VOICE IN THE THREAD! Well, I didn't think it was too soon, since after all, they saved each other and just went through something dangerous. Maybe too soon to tell his story (though I hope he does soon, for whatever reason) but not to talk to her or be less afraid or anything. =D



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Yay! 8D YOU MEAN ZHOL. Yeah, I really wanted to show how much of a good pokemon he is and that he cares a lot for his friends. And yeah, pretty much--I didn't really want two simple fire moves to burn him severely as well, and getting to that river/being treated helped. Obviously he's not cured, but yeah, it reduced the pain and the badness. c:
I R A GUD SPELLLUR!!! Yeah, well you showed that really well. I love characters like that! Yeah, a numel flamethrower isn't Shadowflare! And yay for acknowledging the scythers-like-water thing!

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Thank you! 8D I'm actually relieved it wasn't boring. xDD It did? Oh, cool! 8D I hope it gave you inspiration for your stories! 8D Cool. :3 Yeah... I'm really not looking forward to writing it, and Dusty isn't looking forward to telling it. D: Hehehe, well in the next chapter hopefully things will start to heat up! Yay for mystery! And yeah--nothing's really been revealed about the plot apart from tiny things that will tie in with other things, but so far you're not really supposed to know anything. xD W00T! Thanks for reading, and thanks for the awesome review! 8D I'm so excitement for your story too!
Nope, it wasn't boring at all! Me too! It actually did, I just haven't got around to writing (mainly because of being worried. >.<) Yeah...I wouldn't be either! Stupid bad parts of stories we don't want to write! I have some of those that will happen in mine. DX Oh, really? Yay plottiness! I'm excited for it! And you're welcome! I hope I can get it done soonish! XD I'm excited for you to review it!
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WELL YOU SUCCEEDED.

OKAY GOOD.

But it's so unsanitary! Doesn't he know he could get sick? DDD=

And that's one thing I love about it!

IT IS!

Well it worked!
xDDDDDDDDD Unsanitary! Well true, but he lives in the wild, so I'm sure he's eaten something river-soaked and possibly slimy before. xDDD Well if he does, Aemara can help! 8D ...Possibly. xD Or he'll just throw it up... Eew. Dx

Oh, good. xDD Well having anti-sense isn't very appealing, is it? xD

Yay, thanks!

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XDDD It is pretty random!

THEY ARE? *GAPS*

Yeah, it's really awesome!

Oh, okay! I liked Dusty's change better too. XD Well now it makes sense. Yay!

YES YOU BETTER CHANGE IT!
xDDD Yeah, haha, a lot of them were supposed to be random and things little kids would blurt out. xD

YES. O_O No. xD

xDD Me too. ^^

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I'm glad it does! Yeah, I thought that was pretty cool! That he was afraid but he chose to help anyway! (Yay! I'm glad I'm not alone on that! *relieved*) Yeah, that would have been bad. D= I was actually thinking about that too, that her being an ice type would have made him want to protect her more. Yeah, they DO have a lot in common! And I'm guessing Zhol knows a lot about him too. Haha, well usually when those things happen there's not a second attack, which isn't too realistic so yours was better. XD YAY STRONGNESS! Yeah, that's how I see him too!

BUT A NON-VILLAINBOT! *GAPS* More mysteries!

Spark: That would never have happened to a jolteon!

Shut up! *pushes away* Oh, okay. Yay explanations!

Hm...okay. Guess I'll have to find out. o:
Woo! 8D Yeah, haha, it shows a good person (pokemon xD) I reckon. Sacrifice! Involving non-deathiness! (xD Of course not!) It would have. D: Yeah, and since he'd know what it's like to have a weakness to fire. Yeah, they do! I always thought zangose, sandslash, scyther and sneasel/weavile have a lot in common, which is why I like all of them. ^^ Yeah, she does.Oh, really? xD Well I figured the numel would think to attack straight after, since he was so surprised that Shard jumped in front of Zhol.

YES! 8D


Dusty: I was fighting a ground type, which means you would have had much less of an advantage! So yes, it would happen to a jolteon. *pokes tongue out*

Dusty, Chill! Stop arguing with Spark. xD

Yush.

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I bet you did! I love funny parts like that. XD Oh, okay. I was wondering why you didn't mention her. o: I hope you can too! Yeah, I thought so! I really like Mynk! Oh, really? I thought there would be more. XD Guess not. Yes...'on holiday'. D=

No, it wasn't boring! YOU SHOULD MAKE IT A VOICE ACTING SCENE! REQUEST SOMEONE TO DO SHARD'S VOICE IN THE THREAD! Well, I didn't think it was too soon, since after all, they saved each other and just went through something dangerous. Maybe too soon to tell his story (though I hope he does soon, for whatever reason) but not to talk to her or be less afraid or anything. =D
Hahah, yeah. x) Yeah. That'd be it. I doubt she would want to contribute to discussions like that. Yay! Yeah, I actually grew attached to her during Beyond the Bush. xD Yeah. Well...I don't think so, anyway. You'll find out soon why there are so many kids there though. xD Yeah...'cause I talked to you about her parents, didn't I? o:

Oh, good! xDD OH YES I SHOULD. Because there's a lot there. Awesome! I was thinking I could get Shen to do it, but he's done Stormblade, so he'll be the scyther guy. xDD Oh, really? That's good. Yeah, I guess they'd bond even a fraction by going through something like an attack and saving each other and whatnot. xD I think he's also realised by this stage that she's not as dangerous as she would have first seemed. Contrary to her thoughts. xD Yeah. :3

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I R A GUD SPELLLUR!!! Yeah, well you showed that really well. I love characters like that! Yeah, a numel flamethrower isn't Shadowflare! And yay for acknowledging the scythers-like-water thing!

Nope, it wasn't boring at all! Me too! It actually did, I just haven't got around to writing (mainly because of being worried. >.<) Yeah...I wouldn't be either! Stupid bad parts of stories we don't want to write! I have some of those that will happen in mine. DX Oh, really? Yay plottiness! I'm excited for it! And you're welcome! I hope I can get it done soonish! XD I'm excited for you to review it!
WOO GUD SPELIING1!!!1!!11!!ONE!1 Yay! 8D I'm glad. Oh, well actually it was heat wave or something like that, since it kinda washed over him, rather than being proper flames. That's also why I thought it wouldn't have injured him too badly, because for some reason I think of heat wave as more like heat... xDD Or fire energy as opposed to actual flames. Yay! Yeah, I liked that part too, that I could write him in a river. xD
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xDDDDDDDDD Unsanitary! Well true, but he lives in the wild, so I'm sure he's eaten something river-soaked and possibly slimy before. xDDD Well if he does, Aemara can help! 8D ...Possibly. xD Or he'll just throw it up... Eew. Dx

Oh, good. xDD Well having anti-sense isn't very appealing, is it? xD

Yay, thanks!
Well it is! I'm more concerned about what was on it before she washed it off, though. xD Yeah, but I'm sure wild pokemon DO get sick just like any other pokemon. SO HE SHOULD BE CAREFUL! Yeah, that's true! Yeah, gross. D:

No it is not! DX

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xDDD Yeah, haha, a lot of them were supposed to be random and things little kids would blurt out. xD

YES. O_O No. xD

xDD Me too. ^^
Yeah, it was really funny! XD

I'M CONFUSED BY YOUR OTHER TWO RESPONSES. *doesn't see how they relate to what I said*


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Woo! 8D Yeah, haha, it shows a good person (pokemon xD) I reckon. Sacrifice! Involving non-deathiness! (xD Of course not!) It would have. D: Yeah, and since he'd know what it's like to have a weakness to fire. Yeah, they do! I always thought zangose, sandslash, scyther and sneasel/weavile have a lot in common, which is why I like all of them. ^^ Yeah, she does.Oh, really? xD Well I figured the numel would think to attack straight after, since he was so surprised that Shard jumped in front of Zhol.

YES! 8D

Dusty: I was fighting a ground type, which means you would have had much less of an advantage! So yes, it would happen to a jolteon. *pokes tongue out*

Dusty, Chill! Stop arguing with Spark. xD

Yush.
Yeah it does! I just love that sort of thing in stories. It makes me so happy! I'm glad you understand. (Yay!) Yeah, that's true! LIKE TEAM RAZOR WIND! Yeah, that makes sense, that's why I said yours was more logical. XD

Spark: Jolteons are too strong to worry about silly weaknesses. We- *knocked over by all 9 of Rosie's tails*

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Hahah, yeah. x) Yeah. That'd be it. I doubt she would want to contribute to discussions like that. Yay! Yeah, I actually grew attached to her during Beyond the Bush. xD Yeah. Well...I don't think so, anyway. You'll find out soon why there are so many kids there though. xD Yeah...'cause I talked to you about her parents, didn't I? o:

Oh, good! xDD OH YES I SHOULD. Because there's a lot there. Awesome! I was thinking I could get Shen to do it, but he's done Stormblade, so he'll be the scyther guy. xDD Oh, really? That's good. Yeah, I guess they'd bond even a fraction by going through something like an attack and saving each other and whatnot. xD I think he's also realised by this stage that she's not as dangerous as she would have first seemed. Contrary to her thoughts. xD Yeah. :3
Yeah, I can see why you would! Oh, really? o: *curious* And yeah, you did. D=

YES YOU SHOULD! And it would be cool if you and him could do a Thunder and Stormblade scene or something! (Haha, scyther guy! XD) Yeah, I would think so! Yep, that too.


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WOO GUD SPELIING1!!!1!!11!!ONE!1 Yay! 8D I'm glad. Oh, well actually it was heat wave or something like that, since it kinda washed over him, rather than being proper flames. That's also why I thought it wouldn't have injured him too badly, because for some reason I think of heat wave as more like heat... xDD Or fire energy as opposed to actual flames. Yay! Yeah, I liked that part too, that I could write him in a river. xD
BECUZ I IS A GUD RITER!!!!!111!!!!1!! Oh, really? I probably forgot. D= Yeah, that makes sense! Yeah, I thought that was pretty cool.
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Well it is! I'm more concerned about what was on it before she washed it off, though. xD Yeah, but I'm sure wild pokemon DO get sick just like any other pokemon. SO HE SHOULD BE CAREFUL! Yeah, that's true! Yeah, gross. D:

No it is not! DX

Yeah, it was really funny! XD

I'M CONFUSED BY YOUR OTHER TWO RESPONSES. *doesn't see how they relate to what I said*
Oh, well fine. xD Oh, okay. xDD True, true. xDD I'LL LET HIM KNOW. c: Yeah. xD

Yeah. x3

xD

xDDD I said "YES. O_O No" to your "THEY ARE?" and "Me too" to "I like Dusty's change better". xD

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Yeah it does! I just love that sort of thing in stories. It makes me so happy! I'm glad you understand. (Yay!) Yeah, that's true! LIKE TEAM RAZOR WIND! Yeah, that makes sense, that's why I said yours was more logical. XD

Spark: Jolteons are too strong to worry about silly weaknesses. We- *knocked over by all 9 of Rosie's tails*

Rosie: That's better.

Yeah, I can see why you would! Oh, really? o: *curious* And yeah, you did. D=
x) Haha, which is why you love all the Snap saving Rudy episodes of ChalkZone. xD Yay for happiness! xD Yeah. Woo! YES LIKE THEM. c: I always thought they were cool. xD Yeah, haha. Usually I'm not too good with logic, but this time I am! :D


Dusty: Hah! Take that, "strong" jol--

Tarla: *bats with wings* Enough already. -.-

Dusty: D:< WHERE DID YOU COME FROM?!

Yeah, hehe, she's nice to write about. :D Yep. Mm... D: Don't know when I'll reveal any of that though.

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YES YOU SHOULD! And it would be cool if you and him could do a Thunder and Stormblade scene or something! (Haha, scyther guy! XD) Yeah, I would think so! Yep, that too.

BECUZ I IS A GUD RITER!!!!!111!!!!1!! Oh, really? I probably forgot. D= Yeah, that makes sense! Yeah, I thought that was pretty cool.
YAY I WILL. Yeah, haha, that would be awesome! 8D (xDDD Yes!) Awesome.

AND SO IS I!1!!! Yup. Oh, okay. xDD Nah, I don't think I made it clear. xDD I didn't state the attack at any time, and I only gave a brief description anyway. x) But I guess it doesn't matter too much anyway. :3
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Name: Rikki
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Any added features: He is... awesome :P He also will be in a fic I'm currently writing; if this bugs you, alert me.
History and past: His forest was burned down by Team Rocket when he was young. Ever since then, he's been distrustful of humans. He sneaks around cities, snatching Pokeballs and releasing Pokemon back into the wild.
Likes/Dislikes: Pine woods, snow, heights, darkness/humans, cages, cities, loud noise
Fears: Being caught by a human!
Level: 34
Attacks: Night Burst, Extrasensory, Night Slash, Flamethrower
Alliance: Good? A bit bad, too, he's an extremist and will attack people to free Pokemon, even innocents.

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Cool chapter! Sad, but Zhol hurt her foot. Nice to see Shardclaw and Azure warming up to others though.

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I don't think that's a word XD

Also, you stated that the Froslass was an Ice and Psychic type; this is incorrect - Froslass are Ice and Ghost types, but are capable of learning the move Psychic (I have one with that). :)
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~Have I begged for a guest star yet, Xanthe???~

Name: Rikki
Pokémon species: Zoroark
Gender: Male
Age: 19
Any added features: He is... awesome :P He also will be in a fic I'm currently writing; if this bugs you, alert me.
History and past: His forest was burned down by Team Rocket when he was young. Ever since then, he's been distrustful of humans. He sneaks around cities, snatching Pokeballs and releasing Pokemon back into the wild.
Likes/Dislikes: Pine woods, snow, heights, darkness/humans, cages, cities, loud noise
Fears: Being caught by a human!
Level: 34
Attacks: Night Burst, Extrasensory, Night Slash, Flamethrower
Alliance: Good? A bit bad, too, he's an extremist and will attack people to free Pokemon, even innocents.

I lovelovelove the story. It's creative, it's funnerfull, and it has ownsome characters~! I love reading this while I work; it makes me want to do better! Keep up the loveliness!
Yes, you have. xDD I think it was an aerodactyl...unless it was someone else. xD ANYWAY HE'S AWESOME. I love that he gets pokemon and releases them from their poke balls and into the wild. xDD I actually have "Sorry, guys, no more guest stars" on the first post, but I think I can include him. o: And you're awesome, of course. xD Also, I see he only has four moves. o: I accept up to eight, so if you want more you're welcome. :3

xDD Aww, you do? Thank you so much. xD xDDDD Really? Do you have a favourite character? xDD Aw, I'm really happy it makes you want to do better. xDD Thank you so much for reading. ^v^ It means a lot that you did, and that you left me a comment! 8D *glomps*

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Cool chapter! Sad, but Zhol hurt her foot. Nice to see Shardclaw and Azure warming up to others though.

I don't think that's a word XD

Also, you stated that the Froslass was an Ice and Psychic type; this is incorrect - Froslass are Ice and Ghost types, but are capable of learning the move Psychic (I have one with that). :)
Thanks! 8D Yeah, she did. Dx It was annoying to write that, but it's important... Poor Zhol. Dx Yeah, haha, those are things I did enjoy writing. xDD Especially the conversation with Shard and Dusty. o: And the houndoom and Dusty. xD Fun.

xD It is! It didn't have a red jaggedy underline in Word, and it's in the dictionary. xD I think it's just Australian/UK/NZ word. It just means to be quiet, basically. xD

xDDD I was wondering if someone - and by 'someone' I mean you since I told Scy already - was going to notice! xDDD The thing is, I didn't state that at all. Dusty did. xDD She has never seen a froslass before, and therefore she has no idea what types they are, either. xDD If I had to guess without knowing, I'd have picked ice and psychic too. xD She'll have to wait to be corrected before she realises she was wrong. So it was an intentional 'mistake'. xDDD But it's cool you picked up on it. xD

THANK YOU FOR READING. c:
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Ooh... Oops... heheh, if you don't want to include him or can't, you don't have to. And the moves, you can just leave them as is. I don't care. :P

And as for my favorite character... well, I'm not all caught up yet, so I don't know. I really like Rayis, that Quilava. But like I said: not caught up. XD

As for the reading, no problem! Like I said, I read it when I write; I need something to read at all times~!
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Default Re: Through the Eyes of a Flareon ~ [PG] ~ Chapter 19. o:

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Ooh... Oops... heheh, if you don't want to include him or can't, you don't have to. And the moves, you can just leave them as is. I don't care. :P

And as for my favorite character... well, I'm not all caught up yet, so I don't know. I really like Rayis, that Quilava. But like I said: not caught up. XD

As for the reading, no problem! Like I said, I read it when I write; I need something to read at all times~!
Oh no, I do want to include him. ^^ And I've been waiting to include a 5th gen pokemon! 8D Okay, as long as you're happy with them. :3

Oh, what chapter are you on? o: Yay, Raiys! xD Yeah, hehe. x) Okay, well I'll look forward to hearing from you again when you have! 8D

:D Haha, well I'm happy I can entertain you! :D In fact, I'm really excited that I can inspire you. xD And motivational material does help, and I'm flattered that TtEoaF is yours. xDD Yay! 8D
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I'm on Rough and Tough XD
I'm reading really hard. And Rayis is awesome.
I don't trust Izante for some reason...
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