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Old 07-20-2008, 05:12 PM
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Yus, people. I am posting this on Pe2k. My beloved fanfic. It has been posted on three boards so far excluding FF.net and (wierdly) I am not satisfied with the number of reviews.


Just to make it clear: I am teh 13 yeer ol ashyan kid hu don no how to rite teh fan ficcies. And this is my first fic, so don't expect this to be very good or anything,



Now, on with the show.



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Pokemon Infinity



Chapter List:



Arc 1: The Beginning of a the Journey

Prologue *

Chapter 1: Escape *

Chapter 2: Archie *

Chapter 3: Raven *

Chapter 4: Arrival **

Chapter 5: Revelation **

Chapter 6: Capture **/

Chapter 7: **//

Chapter 8: **//

Chapter 9: **//

Chapter 10: **//

Chapter 11: **//

Chapter 12: **//

Epilogue **//



Arc 2: The Race Against Time

Chapter 1: **//



Key:

* : Chapter completed

** : Chapter in progress

**/: Tentative name

**// : No name



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Prologue:





The battle field was quiet. Bodies lay eveywhere, dried blood near their lifeless forms, humans and pokemon alike. A charizard walked down the the field, body splattered with blood and limping. He strolled, absent-mindedly kicking a few bodies here and there. Then he stopped, as if he was convinced, and declared with a deafening roar,



'WE WON!'



The pokemon army roared back in triumph, their voices echoing around the mountains surrounding them.



In the future, there is a war going on between and pokemon.



It started in the year 2895, a time when pokemon were mistreated and used as slaves,and when a researcher in Hoenn created a bacterium which he thought would accelerate the growth of pokemon; an advanced form of PokeRus. He thought that with his new invention, he would become rich and famous. He believed that trainers would line up and buy samples of the virus for their pokemon. He thought that the virus was completely safe.



He was wrong.



The researcher tested some on certain pokemon, but he failed to realize that along with physical development the virus also accelerated mental growth. Pokemon became smarter. Unfortuneatly, many pokemon began to see their position in the world. They began to see themselves as pets or tools used to accomplish things which humans couldn’t, made to battle each other for their trainer’s entertainment. The researcher’s pokemon attacked him and his colleagues and escaped.



Unfortunately, the virus spread fast, faster than PokeRus. Soon many pokemon were infected. Another unseen side-effect was that they became stronger, much stronger than the had been. Ordinary pokeballs failed to hold them and the badge clause was broken. They all attacked their trainers and any other humans whom they saw or met. These attacks were small scale and since the researcher’s experiments were secret, the Hoenn government paid no attention to them. The attacks were passed off as mishandling of pokemon.



Oblivious to everyone, the pokemon were forming a secret society: The Resistance; aimed at eliminating humans and creating a world where pokemon could live freely. Most of the pokemon willingly joined the society but some were forced to.

In the beginning of 2896, the Resistance launched an attack from their base in Mt. Pyre. Not all pokemon were part of the revolt. Some were against it, but those that resisted were punished by the leaders who still thought that humans were evil. They took over Lilycove city. The attack was so sudden that people failed to realise what was going on. They took control of resources and readied themselves to attack the other cities. Most of the people were killed but a few escaped and managed to warn then others. By this time the number of pokemon affected by the virus had become about five-hundred thousand and as they moved on, the virus spread and their numbers increased. The Resistance moved quickly, mercilessly killing every human who stood before them. The Hoenn government, realizing how big the threat was, ordered an immediate evacuation. The people were taken to Johto and Kanto which were nearest. A part of the army stayed back hoping to intercept and defeat the resistance. But they were not prepared. The soldiers had no experience, as the last war took place over a milennia ago. They were easily defeated.



Meanwhile, in Kanto and Johto, a massive operation was taking place to kill all the pokemon. The people tried to protect them but Grizlo Mortenza, head of the government, was well known for his cruelty. All the pokemon were killed, and anyone who tried to intervene was kill also, during the month that came to be known as Bloody March.



The Resistance took over Sinnoh, Orre and Fiore in the year. A few of the people living there had been transported to Kanto and Johto but the majority perished. The humans sent peace treaties to negotiate with the pokemon but they were all rejected. And so the war began.



The war carried on for a long time. Unexpectedly, the virus evolved and became stronger over time. So, as the human technology got more advanced, pokemon grew stronger to match it.



The humans, eventually, created bombs so powerful that they could blow up an entire region. But these were not used because it was calculated that it would cause irreparable damage to the environment.



As the war went on society changed. Children were sent to schools when they were five years old to learn basic education, namely that pokemon were evil and had to be destroyed, until they were sixteen. Then the students were classified into groups. The smartest were sent to join the government training centers, and the fittest were sent to join the army. The rest were allowed to stay and took up other various other jobs.

The war raged on for another century and our story begins in the year 3005 in the city of Saffron in Kanto…



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Wait... you don't like the prologue? I can promise you that chapter one is much better.


Remember. Comnstructive comments are greatly appreciated. If you don't have the time or energy, please, at least, comment on whether the fic is good (or horrible).

I already have three chapters written and will post them on a weekly basis. However, if comments are lacking, I will post them early.
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Old 07-21-2008, 03:44 AM
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WHAT! Five views. FIVE views! Maybe I sould have changed the name to something cool like, The Chaos Shadows of Infinite Darkness.


Anyways, here's chapter 2.

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Chapter: 1

Escape:



Bedroom, Draven Residence. 200th floor, Platinum Plaza, 1:30


The city was quiet. Unnatural shadows of the skyscrapers fell onto the street far below, a few cars flying through the city. Only one building, one floor was illuminated. The building itself was comparatively larger then the rest, sleeked with slivery metal and glass glistening in the moonlight You could tell by looking at it that rich people lived there. The light in a windoow of the building flickered on and off, but the people slept on, unaware...

Ron hurriedly stuffed his clothes into his Fuld’s sphere, pausing once in a while to make sure his parents were asleep. He took out his shoes from his cupboard, held it in front of the mechanical eye of the sphere and waited as it was converted into data and stored in the 45000000 GB hard drive. He paused for a moment and admired it. It was a perfect sphere, as big as a base ball with an LCD touch screen at the center. It could be shrunken down to the size of a grape when one pressed a little button at the side. Pokeballs disappeared a hundred years ago, but a scientist named Jonathan Fuld took the concept of the pokeball and created this small wonder.

Ron sighed. Technology was an amazing thing. It was too bad that it was being used for the wrong reasons. He shook his head and returned to earth. He had to concentrate on what he was doing, running away. For the next day, he was being sent to join the army.

Ron was sixteen, the age of manhood. His father was the war minister. So even though Ron wasn’t good at sports or any other thing involving physical activity, he was being made to join the army. He was taught to believe that pokemon were evil but he didn’t. He had heard the old stories about pokemon and people living in harmony. He had often asked his parents about legendary pokemon, trainers and breeders but they refused to tell him. He was a bookish and his frequent visits to the library helped him to uncover what had happened 1000 years ago. Yes there were many books written by pro-pokemon groups. They uncovered the history of pokemon and recorded their findings even though the government declared it illiegal. Soon all the copies were deleted from the original folders in the library and stored in a special file which no one was allowed to access; but Ron knew his way around the codes very well. People called them crazy but Ron didn't. He read about many pokemon legends, stories of pokemon and their trainers, but one interested him the most…

He heard something behind him, something like grunting. He turned around to see the metal wall dividing his and his parent’s room. He frowned. Taking the Fuld’s sphere in his hand, he hastily began scrolling through the contents in it. When he had found what he wanted, he pointed the tip of the sphere towards his table. There was a flash of light and a pair of OptiXray sunglasses appeared on his table, one of the latest inventions of Silph Co. At the lowest range they could see through clothes and at the highest, through metals. He had received them as a gift on his 13th birthday. He had used them on many occasions but mainly on attractive females. He put them on and adjusted them to a high frequency. Then he turned to the wall again. He could see the figure of his father curled up in bed mouth wide open. Then grunting sound came again, softer than before. Ron’s body relaxed. His father was still sleeping. He put the OptiXray back into the Fuld’s sphere and looked around his room.

It was quite large by the normal standards. He was the son of one of the most important people in the government, after all. He glanced at his possessions, his hover bed, his table, the virtual screen built into the wall and his bathroom. All the remaining items were inside the Fuld’s sphere. He looked at his clothes; a fully black Gravi branded anti-tear shirt covered with a rayon cloak since it was November and a skintight pair of pants. His pale hand ran through his Flaming-red hair.

Well, he thought, I’d better go. No reason for me to stick around any longer.

But he didn’t move. Running away was harder than it looked on T.V.

After what seemed like hours, he realized that he had to get going. He went to his door and punched in a code onto the keypad next to it. He stepped out as the door opened and quietly moved through the corridor and, with all the delicacy and grace of a drunken man, knocked down a vase. Futuristic material had prevented the vase from breaking, but that didn’t stop it from making a hell of a noise.

CLANG CLANG CLANG, went the vase and instantly a loud and deep sound pierced the darkness.

‘RON? WHAT HAVE YOU DONE NOW YOU IDIOT?’

‘****…’Ron muttered. He ran down the corridor, past the living room and towards the main door. He could hear his father’s footsteps behind him. He typed in the code and stepped out into the hallway.

‘RON!’

He looked around for a quick exit. He scanned the long hallway, glanced at the synthetic, 28th century, and beautifully designed carpet, the hydro-lifts in the middle, and at the end of the hallway… a window. An idea popped into his head, an idiotic one. Hovwever, idiocy would have to be risked, for now. He decided that he had no choice but to his extreme dissatisfaction, his house was at the other end of the corridor. He ran, adrenalin pumping into his brain, past the numerous doors, opened the window and ran back. He took out the Fuld’s sphere and materialized a hover-bike. He got on it and hesitated for a second which gave enough time for his father to poke his bald head and toothbrush moustache out of the door.

‘What do you think you’re…?’

It was then that Ron’s adrenaline filled brain went into overdrive. Using all his strength, he stamped his foot on the accelerator and whether because of sheer luck or prodigious skill, he flew straight through the window.

‘RONALD!’ cried his father as Ron tried to straighten his hover-bike while zooming away from the apartment at an incredible speed. He slowed down and flew on past buildings with no idea to where he was going. He looked around and glanced at the gigantic Silph Co. at the heart of the city which cast shadows on all the smaller buildings close to it. Slowly, his brain began to work again and he thought about what had just happened.

He had performed the worst runaway in the history of runaways. He had woken up his father, a government official, who would have the police on his trail faster than the speed of light and he was out in the city at midnight with no clue as to where to go. He looked around at the few cars flying further away. Since he was just a kid on a hover-bike in the middle of the night he would arouse suspicion. He sighed and decided to head down to G-level.

Since the buildings were so tall in Saffron and other major cities, the whole city was divided into altitude levels: Ground level, Ruby level, Sapphire level, Emerald level, Pearl level, Diamond level and at the top with a height of 5000 meters, Azure level. Only a few of the most important buildings, like Silph Co. reached Azure level. The names were shortened to G-level, R-level, etcetera.

Ron pressed a button near the handlebars and a holographic screen popped up. It told him that he was in P-level, about 2500 meters above sea level. It would take him a while to get down to G-level. He flew next to a nearby building and descended parallel to its height with his chest pressed on the handlebars hoping that nobody would notice him. Now he needed a plan

His brain started criticizing him, you run away in the middle of the night while waking up the entire building you lived in, and you don't have a plan?

A smaller, squeekier part of his brain countered, Well he couldn't have possibly forseen what had happened now.

The argument in Ron's brain didn't last for long and soon subsided, only to be replaced by a growing worry.

He wondered what he would do in G-level. The place was very filthy and littered with beggars or people who had lost their families in the war and couldn’t afford to purchase a higher flat. There were many empty houses and Ron thought that he could stay in one of them for the night and decide what he was going to do the next day. But the thought had barely crossed his mind when he heard a magnified voice.

Ronald Draven. Stop the hover-bike and turn around.’

Ron turned around in panic. He saw five or six men in navy-blue uniforms and jetpacks. The police. He couldn’t believe that his father had called them so fast. He didn’t care about subtlety anymore. It was time to get the heck out of there. He jammed his foot on the accelerator again and flew with a burst of speed to the ground below. The sudden change in acceleration almost knocked him out of his seat. He steadied himself and tightly gripped the handle bars with his hair flying and his cloak flapping behind him. The ground was getting closer by the second.

‘Wait for it,’ he thought to himself.

He could hear the whooshing sounds of the jetpacks behind him. He checked the altitude meter. He was in S-level now, 500 meters and descending rapidly. He heard a high pitched ‘fheew’ sound and saw a beam of light narrowly missing him and proceeding to darken the surface of the ground below.

Ron yelled and almost lost control of his bike but straightened it just in time. ‘Great,’ he thought frantically, ‘now they’re shooting at me.’

He heard someone shouting behind him. ‘Don’t shoot you idiot. We’re not here to kill the boy.’

Ron checked the altitude meter again. 210 meters. 205 meters. 200 meters. He had entered G-level.

‘Almost there…’

He felt something his back. He turned around and saw one of the officers had gotten close to him and was trying to catch hold of him. Ron’s heart went up to his throat. He was a 100 meters from ground now.

‘Just a little more…’

He could feel the officer’s hand scraping his back. He raised his leg and aimed a kick at the officer but the officer caught it. Panicking, he started thrashing his leg about. The officer let go of the leg but caught his cloak instead.

‘You won’t get away that easily, kid.’

20 meters. 15 meters. 10 meters.

‘Now…’

Ron took of his cloak and straightened the hover-bike mere seconds before crashing. The officer who was holding his cloak smashed into the ground but the others were still behind him. He was flying parallel to the ground now, past the huge bases of the buildings. A smell like garbage filled the air and the whole street was a mess. Litter was strewn about everywhere. The lampposts and the buildings were covered with rust. Ron saw an open metallic door outside one of the buildings. He turned his hover-bike towards it and flew towards it.

One of the police shot again at the hover-bike. It missed but it startled Ron who lost control of the bike for a second and crashed into one of the corners of the door. The bike flew, into the building spinning wildly and throwing Ron off it. He fell hard onto the floor as the bike crashed into a corner of the room. He sat dazed for a second and then got up and observed the dark room.

It had a low ceiling and had four pillars in each of the four corners with a staircase in the center. His hover-bike was near one of the pillars apparently undamaged. He ran over to it, took out his Fuld’s sphere and returned the bike into it. He heard the whooshing sound of the jetpacks and ran towards the staircase. As he climbed up he heard a deep voice

‘Don’t run kid. We won’t hurt you; just take you back to your father.’

He reached the top of the staircase and entered a small floor with three door ways and a hydro-lift. He went to the lift but there was an ‘Out Of Order’ sign on it. The sounds of the police climbing the staircase could be heard as Ron started trying all the doors. They were all locked with codes. It was then that he became aware of a wet sensation at the back of his head. He ran his hand through his hair, looked at it and gasped. Blood. He became dizzy, maybe it was because of the sight of the blood or maybe it wasn’t. Then, Ron couldn’t tell whether it was a hallucination or not, a door appeared in front of him. Purely out of instinct, he jammed his hand on the button next to it. The door opened and he ran inside. As the door closed behind him, the pain in his head got to him. He gasped and fell down. The muffled voices of the police could be heard through the door. He lay slumped on the floor until…

‘This is rather an unpleasant intrusion.’

Ron looked up and saw a middle aged man, probably in his early forties, sitting on a chair in the centre of the room. He was wearing plain white pants and a shirt with a high collar that made him look younger. The room was really small, or at least small to Ron who had lived his life in large, magnificent rooms. There was a small V-tv in one of the walls and a few sofas around it, one of which the man was sitting on. The kitchen was in the same room with an old Omni-cooler, a worn out heater and a metallic dining table which hover-chairs around it. Behind the kitchen was a hallway that probably led to other rooms.

Ron groaned and stood up. He shook his head and walked towards the man.

‘Look, I’m sorry but…’

BOOM

The explosion knocked Ron of his feet. The police had apparently decided that blowing the door would be more appropriate to opening it manually. Three officers came through the doorway, still wearing backpacks, with Silph. X209 Blasters in their hands. The fourth officer was probably tending to the fifth who had crashed.

Ron got to his feet, stumbled, straightened himself and walked slowly towards the man, who had now gotten up.

‘Dismiss my earlier statement,’ he whispered in Ron’s ear. ‘This is a real intrusion.’

One of the officers stepped forward with a blaster in his hand and smug look on his face. ‘Alright kid. You’ve led us in a magnificent chase so far but you should have known you had no chance. Now come quietly and no one will get hurt.’

Ron whispered to the man. ‘Is there any other way out?’

‘Back entrance.’ the man replied.

The officer’s expression changed into irritation. ‘You planning to escape? If you try anything I’ll shoot.’ He turned the gun towards the man. ‘And if you try to help him, you both are screwed.’

Ron was moving backwards towards the miniature kitchen where the utensils were kept. He hurriedly whispered, ‘When I say now, run towards the back entrance.’

‘But he’ll shoot.’ the man replied in the same tone.

‘He won’t.’

The officer stepped forward. ‘You listening to me, kid? Come here now.’ When Ron still didn’t step forward, he grunted, ‘Hopeless. I have to get him myself.’

He started walking forward just when Ron’s hand closed around a steel glass. He picked it up and threw it with all his might. It ricocheted of the officer’s head with a dull clunk as Ron shouted, ‘NOW!’

Both Ron and the man ran past the kitchen and into the hallway as the two other officers leaped over their motionless comrade and pursued them.

‘This way.’ the man cried and ran into a smaller hallway with another door at the end of it.

‘The door?’ cried Ron running wildly ahead of the man

‘It’s open.’

Ron reached the door first and pressed the button to open it. They both rushed out of the door but the man stayed back, closed the door and entered a key code to lock it. The hallway outside was similar to the first one with three more doors, a hydro-lift and a staircase. They both headed down the staircase and when they reach the ground Ron stopped to catch his breath.

‘What do we do now?’ he asked the man while panting heavily.

‘I don’t know. You tell me.’ he replied, panting but still surprisingly calm.

A loud sound, like an explosion, came from somewhere above them. ‘They’ve blown the door.’ Ron said. He took out his Fuld’s sphere, fiddled with it, and materialized his hover-bike. He sat on it and beckoned the man to sit with him. The man sat behind him and gripped his back tightly.

‘Hang on.’ Ron said as the hover-bike levitated and flew through an open window at the same time that a voice yelled ‘HEY! COME BACK HERE!’

The familiar stench filled Ron’s nostrils as he flew away from the building. He heard high pitched sounds again and realized that the other two officers were shooting at him. He swerved around to dodge them. His head started pounding and he found it hard to concentrate.

‘Are you okay, son?’ asked the man. Ron didn’t have time to reply. One of the laser beams hit the motor of the bike. Ron shouted in pain as the searing heat of the burst engine burnt his leg. Teh pain shot through him, his nerve endings were frying. He tried to control the bike but to no avail. The pounding in his head became greater. He was losing consciousness.

‘Son…’

Ron slumped onto the handle bars unable to bear the pain. A strong arm grabbed his body and lifted him out of the bike. He opened his eyes and saw blearily as the hover-bike fell down, smoke rising from it. A bead of blood dripped from his hair and fell after the bike. He became dimly aware that he was flying. The pain in his head and legs was awesome.

‘Don’t worry.’ said a voice but Ron didn’t know who's it was or to whom it was talking to. The last thing he remembered before he passed out was the pain in his head and his leg and the wind whipping in his face.


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Old 07-22-2008, 04:03 PM
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28 views, huh. Well, at least it means people are reading. I don't mean to whine or anything but I'd really appreaciate some feedback.
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Hm. A war between Pokemon and humans isn't exactly an original concept, but certainly not a bad one. Your description, though sometimes a bit overdone and unneeded like with the hard drive near the beginning, was certainly good. No grammar problems that I could see. And big kudos to you for trying to do the near impossible feat of setting stories far in the future; it's coming out pretty realistically.

Now, the main thing I had a problem with was the police chase. It seemed extremely unrealistic that policemen, chasing after a kid barely turned adult by that century's standards, would immediately go for the lasers and blow up doors, especially considering he's the son of the war minister; if they screw that up and kill him, they're going to be unbelievably deep in political trash and horrendous press. It makes far more sense for them to use extreme caution and try and reconcile Ron instead of shooting at him. Overall, the police seemed far too trigger-happy, especially considering the delicate details of it.

Other than that problem, you have great writing talent and should keep going with this idea; I'm enjoying reading it.
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Old 07-24-2008, 07:41 PM
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I feel that the war between humans and pokemon isn't done very often. And when it is, it comes out very horribly. I've only read one fic in that category wich I've liked. I thougth giving it a futuristic approach would make it more interesting as well as providing the major plot point which will be revealed in the next chapter.

As for the description, a person at another forum told me that I should use more description than I already am. *Shrugs* You can't please everyone.

Well, they were aiming at the bike; not Ron. But I guess you're write. It's frustrating. I'll see what I can change.

All in all, thanks for reviewing.

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Old 07-25-2008, 02:07 PM
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Chapter: 2

Archie



Archie S. Residence, G-level, 14:30


A vortex of color surrounded Ron. Weird shapes floated around him. He looked around amazed for a long time. He tried to move, but however hard he flapped his arms or legs, he remained in the same place. He saw his hover-bike in materialise in below him. To his surprise, he managed to get on it easily and began to observe his new environment. He flew on, unaware of time, fascinated by the colorful swirls. They seemed to float around him, waving and blinking, dazzling him with their beauty. If allowed, he would have been floating there forever but suddenly he stopped. He saw a light a little far of. It was quite still, unnerved by the other swirls dancing around it. He decided to head over there. He pushed the accelerator and headed towards the light. After some time, Ron realized that something was wrong. The white light still seemed the same distance away from him. He looked around. Behind him was a black hole which seemed to be sucking the colors. Ron panicked and put all his might on the accelerator. It made no difference. He was still moving towards the black hole. He looked at the white light.

‘Help me.’ he murmured.

His voice echoed around the place, growing fainter, until it faded completely. The white light remained the same for a second and then grew in size, slowly at first, then rapidly. It grew so big that it entirely covered Ron’s range of vision. There was a flash of light and Ron closed his eyes tightly.

A voice spoke up,

‘Open your eyes.’

He did as he was told and found himself face to face with…

‘Aah, you’re awake.’

The man loomed over him, eyes wide open. Ron blinked stupidly.

‘Wait… where am I?’

‘Don’t you remember?’ The man got up and Ron found himself staring at a rusted ceiling. ‘You’re in my house, the house which you ran into uninvited, with the police behind you, who blew up both my doors and then made me run for my life. Remember now?

Ron’s pale face turned red. He remembered. He looked around. He was in the living room, lying on a mattress. He turned to the man who was now in the kitchen ‘Look… about that…’

‘Oh, no need to apologize. It was fun. Heaven knows, I needed some exercise.’ He came back with a cup in his hand. ‘Here, drink this,’ he said offering the cup to Ron, ‘You’ll feel better.’

‘Thanks, Mr.… er…’

‘Archie S.,’ said the man, sitting on the floor next to him. ‘But you can call me Archie.’

‘What does the S. stand for?’ asked Ron curiously.

‘Never you mind.’ replied Archie dismissively. ‘Now, drink up.’

Ron looked inside the mug. It was filled with a murky brown liquid. He took a sip, licked his lips and took another. ‘This is really good.’ he said, ‘What is it?’

‘My own little creation,’ he replied smiling, ‘A few choice ingredients blended together and you get,’ he waved his hand dramatically, ‘this. I called it Archie’s drink. Original, isn’t it?

Ron looked at him blankly ‘Uh… yeah, sure.’ he took another sip and turned to Archie again, ‘What happened after I passed out? To the police I mean.’

‘Oh,’ Archie’s smile disappeared, ‘Well… I took care of them.’

Ron raised an eyebrow, ‘In what way?’

‘You’re not the one to be asking questions; I am,’ Archie snapped suddenly, ‘I’m not the one who broke into your house, am I?’ He became calm again. ‘So what’s your story?’

After everything Archie had done for him how could he refuse? So Ron told him the whole story from the beginning. Archie listened patiently, nodding at times. After he was finished, Archie asked, ‘So, what are you planning to do now?’

Ron sipped the last of ‘Archie’s drink’ and looked down, ‘I want to find Jirachi.’ he said looking up again.

Archie raised his eyebrows. He stood up and started pacing around the room, ‘Jirachi, eh. The pokemon which grants wishes. It appears every thousand years and it is found in Hoenn, am I right?

Ron nodded, ‘Yeah. The millennium comet is going to appear in a few days and…,’ Ron suddenly stopped and stared at Archie suspiciously. ‘Wait a minute. How do you know so much about Jirachi?’

Archie stopped pacing, ‘I er… hear things. Wait… isn’t Jirachi found in Hoenn?’

‘Yeah.’

‘And isn’t Hoenn the base of The Resistance?’

‘Oh…,’ Ron was taken aback. He hadn’t thought of that. ‘well, erm... it cant be too hard , can it?' the words blurted of his mouth.

Archie walked towards the kitchen. 'Oh no, it can't be hard at all.' he muttered sarcastically. 'Well you’re optimistic and a little stupid too at that.’

‘Look who’s talking.’ said Ron quietly.

‘Pardon?’ Archie called.

‘Nothing, nothing,’ Ron called back. He then sniffed at the air as a pleasant smell reached his nose.

‘You must be starving,’ said Archie as he walked to the table near the kitchen holding a pot with steam coming out of it. ‘C’mon. I’ve made some soup.’

Ron got off the mattress. ‘Smells good.’ he said and started walking towards the table with an eager look on his face then suddenly stopped. He touched his hand all over his head and exclaimed, ‘My head!’

Archie, who was sitting on a hover-chair and eating the soup, looked up. ‘What’s happened to your head?’

‘Nothing,’ Ron replied passing his hand through his hair again and again. ‘That’s just it. I was bleeding before I passed out. Now there’s not even a scar or a lump.’ Ron stopped realizing something. He looked down and said, ‘My leg was burnt too.’

‘Calm down.’ said Archie unperturbed, ‘They’ve probably just healed.’

‘Healed? Even with the new pills there’s sure to be a scratch or something. I don’t believe it.’ Ron crossed his arms.

‘You don’t have to. It’s for the better isn’t it. Why are you complaining?’

Ron didn’t answer. He sat down and eyed Archie suspiciously. When he had a sip of the soup, Archie asked, ‘How is it?’

Ron swallowed, ‘Yeah, it’s good. Really good. Which brand is it?’

Archie snapped up, ‘What?’

‘Which brand of tablets?’

An irritated expression appeared on Archie’s face, ‘Tablets? You mean the ones to which we add water? I never use them.’ Archie’s expression changed to disgust, ‘They taste too… artificial. I make mine fresh. There are real vegetables in there. Not those genetic ones you see at stores.’

Ron’s eyes narrowed. ‘You live in G-level, right?’

‘Yes.’

‘And poor people live in G-level… no offense,’ he added hastily.

Archie stopped eating, ‘None taken, but what’s your point?’

‘Real vegetables are really rare and they cost a lot of money.’ Ron put his spoon down. ‘Where did you get them?’

‘I found them.’ Archie replied. His face was expressionless.

‘Found them, eh.’

‘Right. Found them. End of story. Eat.’ He picked up his spoon and resumed eating.

Ron was taken aback, ‘Fine.’ he said, making a mental note not to question Archie anymore

The meal was quiet. Occasionally, one of the two would attempt to start a conversation, the other would reply, they would talk for a few minutes and then sink back into an abrupt silence. Ron’s thoughts slowly drifted to Jirachi.

Yes, Ron really wanted to find Jirachi ever since he saw a reference on the cybernet. He had asked his father about it many times but he ha refused to tell him and threatened to punish him if he talked about it again. Ron thought that his father didn’t know either. However, he had found out about it soon enough through a pro-pokemon website. The thought of a wishmaker pokemon fascinated him. It was probably the main reason that he had run away.

But he hadn’t really considered the fact that Jirachi was in Hoenn, headquarters of the Resistance, until Archie mentioned it to him. He didn’t even know why he had mentioned to Archie that it couldn't be tooo hard. Perhaps it had been an involuntary reaction of his brain in an attempt to make him look cooler than he really was.

‘Would you like some more soup?’

‘Huh?’ said Ron looking up at Archie’s face. He realized that he had finished his soup a while ago and was staring at the empty soup bowl for some time. ‘Yes, please.’ he replied awkwardly, handing the soup bowl to Archie and almost knocking over the salt shakers in the process.

Archie refilled the bowl with the rich soup and placed it in front of Ron. Ron lifted the spoon to his mouth before realizing that Archie was staring at him.

‘Er…’ he said, ‘aren’t you going to eat?’

‘Oh no I’m full, thank you,’ he replied. Suddenly, realization crept up to his face, ‘Oh… well, I’ll just read a magazine then.’ He suddenly took out a mini-copy of Saffron Weekly out of nowhere and began to read the holographic text.

Ron turned back to his soup. Archie S. The name didn’t tell Ron anything about him. He looked at him. He was still wearing the clothes that he had worn yesterday. Ron realized that he hadn’t taken in Archie’s appearance fully. His hair was white in color. Not the white that you get when you grow older, but natural white. His face looked young, free of wrinkles, but you could still tell that he was old. He should have been forty, but had he been sixty, he probably would have looked the same. If you had met him randomly, you would have thought him a kind man who looked younger than he really was. But he was still full of mystery to Ron.

Where did he get the money to buy real vegetables? How did Ron’s wounds heal so fast? What had really happened last night? These questions and many more revolved around Ron’s head, nearly making him dizzy.

‘I think I’ve had enough, thank you,’ Ron said, pushing the soup bowl away from him. He looked up and realized that he was so immersed in his thoughts that he didn’t notice that Archie was gone. He got up and ventured into the hallway behind the kitchen.

There was a room to the side of it, smaller than the living room. It was perfectly circular and its contents were a bed and a desk. Archie was sitting on the floor, where clothes were strewn about, and was packing his own sphere.

‘What are you doing?’ asked Ron, stepping into the room hesitantly.

‘Are you blind?’ replied Archie fiddling with the sphere, ‘I’m packing.’

‘Are you going somewhere?’ Ron asked.

Archie looked at him as if he was the dumbest person on earth. ‘Well I’m going with you of course.’

Ron stared back, ‘What… to find Jirachi? But…’

Archie stood up, ‘Don’t say anything. I’m coming and that’s final. There’s not much to do around here anyways and you could use some help.’

Ron didn’t object to that. He was right after all. He waited around till Archie finished packing. When he finally got up they left the house and went down the staircase. The street was filled with bright sunlight which glared down at them. Ron screwed up his eyes and turned to Archie, ‘How are we going to get to the aerodrome?’

‘We’ll just take a taxi.’ he replied.

‘But taxi’s only come down to R-level.’

‘There is a public hydro lift here.’ Archie said leading Ron through an alleyway where a small rusted hydro-lift lay probably unused for generations.

They took the lift to R-level and walked to the taxi-stand of the building from where Archie summoned a taxi. The ride to the aerodrome was uneventful. The driver himself was a grumpy old man who didn’t talk much, and had an unusual habit of running his hand trough his beard every few minutes. As he quickly ascended to Azure level where the aerodrome stood, Ron stuck his head out of the window to see it.

It was a member of the few buildings that reached A-level and one of the tallest structures in Kanto. There were two main aerodromes in Kanto, one in Cinnibar Island and the one in Saffron. It looked magnificent. It was a huge dome on the top of a strong iron base. The dome was the main part of it and had many platforms, where the planes stood, sticking out of it.

Archie paid the driver who kept running his hand through his beard and muttering gibberish. When he left, they entered the aerodrome through the huge door. It had three floors. The bottom one was for incoming flights and the upper one was for the outgoing ones. In the idle of both of them was the dome. They took a lift to it and entered. It almost looked like another world, a world witth no ceiling and no end. They proceeded towards the center where the Information center was. Ron looked around the dome. He had been there twice with his father and still hadn’t got used to how huge it was. Many tourists came just to see the dome. Ron looked around, wide-eyed, at the people of all shapes and sizes. He then looked at the center where there was a large holographic screen, which showed all the flights coming and going and was so big that it was visible from any part of the aerodrome.

‘There are no flights to the center.’ he said to Archie.

‘No problem. We’ll just ask one of the people here.’ he replied.

They kept walking steadily but the holo-screen never seemed to get closer. After what seemed like hours, they reached the center. It consisted of a huge circular desk. Men from almost every nationality stood there to translate for foreigners. Robots were originally used for the purpose but they were stopped after a small incident where the robot, apparently, went crazy after a lady accidently poured a drink on it and tried to kill the poor lady aforemention. She was now in intensive care at the Saffron Hospital. At the center of the circle of people, there was a large emitter projecting the holograph, looming over all of them, a shadow less building. Archie and Ron went towards a men close to them who had just finished talking to an old man.

He was short and plump, looking diminutive in front of Archie’s tall figure. He was wearing a shirt that said HOW MAY I HELP? in bold letters. He was unshaven and when he talked, his breath smelled of drink.

‘Eh?’

‘Good morning,’ said Archie in a pleasant tone, ‘We want to know whether there are any flights to Hoenn.’

The man giggled. Slowly, his giggles turned into a high-pitched laughter that completely unsuited his face. Ron gaped at the man, mouth half open. He looked at Archie and found him smiling at the man pleasantly. Ron found himself hating the man with a firm, unreasoning hate.

After several moments, the man stopped laughing. 'Aah… never heard a joke like that in eternity,’ said the man, wiping a tear from his eye. ‘Now seriously, where do you want to go?’

‘Hoenn,’ replied Archie calmly.

‘Eh,’ the man looked as if he had just declared that he was going to chop his leg off. ‘You’re serious?’

Archie nodded.

‘You know that it’s the base of the Resistance, right?’

Archie nodded again

‘Well you’re not going to get any luck here,’ shaking his head as if Archie was the stupidest person on earth, ‘Flights to Hoenn only leave from Cinnibar. But those are only for the army.’

‘Thank you.’ said Archie, turning away.

‘Hey, is that your son?’ the man called as they were leaving pointing towards Ron.

‘Yes,’ replied Archie before Ron could say anything, ‘Why?’

‘Dunno, looks familiar somehow.’ said the man and returned to his work.

‘Any ideas to how to get to Cinnibar?’ Archie asked.

‘We’ll think of something,’ replied Ron.


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Office, Draven Residence, 200th Floor, Platinum Plaza, 15:00


Two police officers stood on the floor of the office floor watching Baldwin Draven. He walked from his desk to the V-tv more times than they had kept count. After a few seconds, he stopped and stared at them with murder in his eyes.

‘So, what you’re saying is that you failed to catch the boy because a man threw you to the ground?’

‘Well, yes sir,’ the first officer said, ‘It happened so quickly that…’

‘QUIET!’ roared Draven, ‘And you have no idea how?’

‘Well, no sir,’ said the second officer, ‘He sort of flew towards us and...’

‘SILENCE!’ roared Draven again, ‘I don’t have time to listen to your excuses. You two are highly trained police officers but you failed to rescue a sixteen year old boy from a forty year old man?’

‘Well, the man was probably helping him.’ said the first officer

‘That’s preposterous,’ spat Draven, ‘The man probably kidnapped him. Ronald had no reason to run away.’

‘I could think of a few.’ muttered the second officer silently.

‘SHUT UP!,’ he shouted, ‘GET OUT OF MY OFFICE! BOTH OF YOU!

The two officers ran towards the door as if their lives depended on it. Draven watched them leave with cold eyes. He turned around and smashed his hand with all his might on the desk. The police were useless. They probably couldn’t even catch a fly. He needed someone more efficient, a private detective of a sort. Yes, that was what he needed, a private detective.

He turned to the V-tv and accessed the cybernet function using a remote. Suddenly, the entire room transformed. At first, Draven could only see codes but them they rearranged themselves to the layout he was so familiar with. He touched the search symbol floating in front of him and typed in detective. However, instead of the search results, a single profile appeared in front of him. He hastily pressed the back button but nothing happened.

His face was blank and expressionless. He was clean shaven and his skin was a tanned brown. A black hat covered his hair. His eyes were so black that it looked like two holes in his skull. As Draven stared into those eyes, an urge filled up inside him, one that he could not understand. The eyes looked like…

He shook himself back to earth. Almost all the columns under his profile were absent, but under Jobs, it was written EAGER. That was when he noticed the blinking call button. As he looked at it, the urge filled inside him again.

Call me, the button seemed to say, Call me

Draven realised that he was sweating. He wiped his hand over his brow and turned to the button again.

He hesitated.

He called.

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So, howzit?

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Please for the love of all things cute and furry, REVIEW!!

I know I'm triple posting and bumbing and I know that my story is not the one which can be easily reviewed but I'd really appreciate some feedback.
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I do like your story. I think you describe the future very well...it would take me a while to come up with such things.
Over all, I dont see any problems with it other then some minor mispellings. Your story could easily hook some people into the futuristic world.
Alfred seems to be very mysterious...I wonder were he found those vegtables?
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Old 07-27-2008, 04:01 AM
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I do like your story. I think you describe the future very well...it would take me a while to come up with such things.
Over all, I dont see any problems with it other then some minor mispellings. Your story could easily hook some people into the futuristic world.
Alfred seems to be very mysterious...I wonder were he found those vegtables?
Um... it's Archie. But thanks for commenting anyway.
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Oh, and if anyone could make a banner for this fic, I'd be gratified.
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Old 07-29-2008, 05:29 AM
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REVIEW!!!

Now, that that's over...


Chapter: 3
Raven:



Hydro-lift, Platinum Plaza, 15:35

The lift moved up very slowly with a steady hum. The dim white lights revealed the outline of a tall, hulking man dressed in black.

An ordinary man would have turned crazy from the agonizing ten-minute ride from the bottom floor and would have resorted to kicking and punching the elevator in frustration… but this person was no ordinary man.

'Patience, patience…’ he told himself repeatedly

The lift was made of a richly polished metal, glowing in the darkness. He passed his hand over the cold surface of the metal and scoffed. Some people had all the money. He looked up at the holographic keypad with the numbers that also shoed the floor he was on. 198. 199. 200.

Finally.

He stepped out and looked around the long hallway. The flourescent lights made him wince. He pulled his hat over his eyes. He had never liked bright lights; the darkness suited him fine. He glanced at the numerous doors in the long hallway. Which number was it again? Ah yes,1098. He remembered it exactly. He had a very good memory, the teachers at school used to tell him. Too bad he dropped out. Yes, school had been too slow for him. He liked fast-paced action, the adrenalin rush, the thrill of the chase. A private detective was just the job for him.

He walked up to the door, admiring the carpet and the decorated walls, and rang the doorbell. A beeping sound echoed throughout the hallway.

He waited patiently for the door to open, arms behind his back. His blank face hid his satisfaction. The assignment he had been waiting for all this time…

As the door opened, an old man with appeared. His face was covered with wrinkles and pimples as if it was broken. He had a glum look on his face but when he looked up, his expression lightened

Baldwin Draven.

Fool.

A flicker of a smile appeared on the tall man’s lips.




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Draven Residence, 200th floor, Platinum Plaza, 15:37


Draven smiled. The man looked exactly like he imagined him. He was wearing a long billowing cloak that covered his body. A worn out hat lay at the top of his head. His face wore the same empty expression as the picture online.

‘You’re earlier than expected. Come in, come in.’ Draven said showing the man through the door.

The man grunted in reply and entered the house. He looked at Draven enquiringly.

‘Lets go to my office.’ Draven said and led the man into the living room.

The living room was of astonishing size. It was completely white, lit by an unnatural source less glow. There were enough plush sofas to seat around fifty people. In the center was an enormous V-tv. The walls were bent and folded in a ripple pattern and the whole room had a rather unreal effect. He eyed the man as they walked hoping to find astonishment in the man’s face at the size of his house but the man only glared at the living room sofas and the V-tv fiercely.

Draven then veered to the left and led him into a hallway ending in a door. He hurriedly typed the password and entered beckoning the man inside.

Raven’s office, though no match for the living room, was undoubtedly magnificent. The walls were covered with thick brown wallpaper and the polished floor shined before the ornate 21st century chandelier. Rows of shelves were filled with numerous holo-books and old printed books too. A single, oddly-shaped desk was in the middle, floating silently. Draven sat behind it and the man did the same.

‘Well, yes. We’d better get on with it.’ said Draven taking out a register from his desk. ‘What’s your name?’

The man had not spoken till now. ‘I am called, Raven.’ he said quietly in a hissing voice that was surprisingly deep.

‘You are called, eh?’ Draven had taken out his reading glasses and was surveying the register. ‘So I guess that means that it is not your real name.’ He looked at Raven questioningly.

Raven didn’t answer.

‘Well, real or not, you’re not on the register.’ said Draven pointing towards the register.

‘I’m new. I moved in from Johto.’ Raven said indifferently.

‘Well, that’s not a problem.’ Draven put the register away. He started rubbing his fingers on his bald head the way he did when he was nervous or worried. There were now several pink marks on it from the constant rubbing, ‘You see, it’s my son, he’s…’

‘…run away and now you want me to get him back.’ Raven finished his sentence for him.

Draven gaped at him, ‘How did you know?’

‘I have… experience in this sort of things’ he replied. ‘Do you have any idea of where he might be?’

‘Well… um…,’ the rubbing became fiercer. ‘er…’

‘No? I didn’t think so.’ Raven got up ‘Well, Mr. Draven, I’ll get you’re son back for you….’

‘Oh thank you, thank you, if there was…’

‘But,’ Raven interrupted, ‘we must talk about payment.’

‘Yes, yes,’ Draven turned red, ‘How much?’

‘Well… my price is 100,000 dollars.’

‘WHAT!’ Draven stood up and shouted. ‘THAT’S PREPOSTEROUS! THAT’S UH… uh…’ he suddenly stopped as if he realized what he was doing and took several deep breaths. ‘Fine. You’ll get your money if you bring back my son.’ he said, looking red in the face.

‘Sounds reasonable.’ replied Raven. ‘Well, I’ll be taking your leave.’ He turned towards the door.

‘Wait.’ said Draven suddenly. ‘When will you bring him back?’

Raven stopped. ‘You’ll get him back. I’ll see to that.’ He walked out of the door. Draven sat down and started rubbing his fingers to his head while coldly watching Raven leave the room.


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Main Dome, Saffron Aerodrome, 15:50


‘We could always take a taxi from here?’ said Archie.

‘No,’ replied Ron, ‘you said that already. Besides, it’ll take too much time.

Archie and Ron were debating the best way to get to Hoenn. They walked away from the center and were now going towards it again, past an inferno of people. They were now near the food court. Their argument continued for some time until both of them ran out of ideas.

Ron’s mouth was dry from talking. He licked his lips as they passed by a shop selling drinks.

‘Wait here for a minute,’ he said to Archie, ‘I’ll get us something to drink.’

Archie nodded and Ron made his way towards the shop. It was quite crowded. People were sitting and chatting pleasantly on floating chairs, while drinking coffee. The shop was smaller in comparison to the other restaurants but it had many customers. Ron stood in front of the counter before a beautiful woman. She had dazzling green eyes and gorgeous black hair with she tied up into a bun. She was unnaturally tall but it could have been because of her raised shoes. She wore a blue and white apron with STARBUCKS written in bold letters across her breast. As she looked down, she smiled at Ron with a smile that seemed all too fake. Ron smiled back uncomfortably.

‘Hello and welcome to Starbuck’s coffee. My name is Elisha. How may I help you?’ She said this too fast, as if she had memorized it all, her plastic grin never fading.

‘Er… I’ll just have two black coffees.’ he replied. He always had affection for coffee. Perhaps, it was because of his father’s constant overdoses and persistent hyper activeness which made him curious to try it at a young age.

‘Right away, sir.’ After Ron paid the money, she disappeared into the kitchen and Ron saw her through the translucent window pouring a steaming mug of coffee into two cups. She came to the counter again and gave the two cups to Ron. ‘Thank you for choosing Starbucks. Have a nice day.

Ron had a last look at her shining, wrinkle-free face before taking the cups of coffee and departing the shop. He saw Archie wave to him standing near a bookstand. Ron nodded and walked towards him. Archie took the coffee and thanked him. As they stood drinking the coffee, Ron glanced at all the magazines and books. Not finding anything interesting, he walked over to the notice board. I was currently showing a HELP WANTED sign for a cleaner. Reading it, he finished his coffee.

‘Ron, we’d better get going!’ called Archie.

‘Coming!’ Ron called back. He threw the coffee cup in a garbage bin near the notice board and had a quick glance at the next sign that appeared before walking towards Archie. After a second, he suddenly stopped, ran back and stared in horror at the notice board.

Smiling pleasantly back at him was a 3-D image of himself and Archie. The picture of himself looked original. But the one of Archie looked as if it had been created out of bits and pieces. Some of the body parts were smaller or larger then normal and the color of the skin varied. Ron read the text below.


MISSING.

Ronald Draven, son of war minister Baldwin Draven has been kidnapped by a middle-aged man. An image of both of them has is given above. Any sighting of either of them must be reported to the police or any other security official. There is large reward for the person who helps or succeeds in finding the boy and his kidnapper.

‘What are you doing?’ said Archie coming up to Ron and staring frustratingly at Ron’s wide-open mouth. ‘You could at least try to put on a more dignified expression you know. There are many people… oh….’ Archie’s expression turned similar to Ron’s as he too noticed the message on the board. When the messaged flashed, erased and was replaced by an advertisement for Coca-Cola, a recent memory arose from within Ron’s consciousness.

Dunno, looks familiar somehow.

The man at the information counter, he had recognized them!

The thought burned in Ron’s mind as he turned towards the center again. He could see the short stocky figure and even tough there was a distance, he had a feeling he knew who it was talking to.

‘Oh ****. Oh **** **** shit…’ muttered Archie next to him. The same thought had probably occurred to him and he stared as the man pointed a chubby finger towards them.

‘Run.’ Archie said

Ron didn’t need the warning; he was already running.

‘Hey you! Stop!’ Ron heard the voices behind him as he ran past the many crowded stalls, Archie close behind him. A magnified digital voice was heard.

Calling all passengers. Last call for flight 716 headed towards Cinnabar Island. All passengers please make your way towards Gate 47. Departure time is 16:15.

Archie stopped. Ron stopped. Archie looked at Ron and Ron looked back. There was an immediate understanding. They ran, rushing through the crowds and heading towards the hydro-lifts to the next floor. Ron checked his watch. It was 4:00 o clock. They would make it.

‘Oh no!’ cried Ron as the reached the lifts. A large crowd of people stood in front of the lifts and he could see no way through.

‘Lose yourself in the crowd,’ said Archie over the hustle-and-bustle of the people. He ran towards the crowd first and then Ron followed. He squirmed his way through the people, apologizing at every breath, until he saw the metallic rim of the lifts.

‘Archie,’ he called as the lifts opened, ‘Archie!’ But Archie was nowhere to be seen and Ron was pushed into the lift by the onslaught of rushing people.

Once inside, an electronic voice spoke,

This lift is headed towards the departure bay, and the lift began its slow ascent. Ron looked around the lift. It was larger than the standard size. The design of the airport lift was drawn up in 2989 after one of the lift disasters which killed 33 people. It was larger so it could hold more people, and sturdier. It’s maximum weight was 13 tons.

Ron shook his head. Why was he remembering all this now? He glanced at the numerous faces in the lift looking for a familiar one.

‘Looking for me?’ said a voice behind him. Ron turned around and saw the grinning face of Archie.

‘Where were you?’ he asked.

His smile became wider. ‘I was getting us these,’ he took an identical pair of tickets from his pocket.

Ron took the tickets and examined them.

‘These are tickets to Cinnabar,’ he said looking up again, ‘Did you buy them?’

‘No, took them off a fat tourist and his wife taking pictures. They didn’t notice in the slightest. It’ll be quite a shock for him when he finds out, eh?’ he nudged Ron’s ribs playfully as the lift stopped and the door opened.

‘But… but…,’ Ron stammered, ‘you stole them! You stole the tickets!’ He glanced disbelievingly at the tickets and then at Archie in turns.

‘Oh, really,’ said Archie in a mocking tone. He snatched the ticket away from Ron as they followed the others out of the lift. ‘Well maybe I should give them back?’

‘No, no,’ said Ron, once outside the lift, ‘we’ll keep them’

Archie smiled, 'That works.'

The familiar electronic voice was heard again, The boarding gate for flight 716 to Cinnabar has now closed.

Ron looked at his watch. 4:15!

‘Run!’ he cried. He ran through the large hallway. It had several doors heading off in different directions. He spotted the one with the sign [GATE 40 – 49]. He ran through it and entered a large dome filled with shops.

At one of the corners, there were several escalators heading towards the different gates. Ron sprinted across it, heading towards one of the escalators, nearly knocking over many people in the process. If he had looked closer, he would have noticed the people walking backwards and other strange phenomenon, but Ron was in too much of a hurry.

He ran up the escalator frantically clutching his side, beads of sweat pouring down his face. When he reached the top, he saw chairs on which people were sitting on. A bit further he saw a metallic extension going outside the room. In front of was a pretty air-hostess who was chewing gum and collecting the tickets of passengers. She was wearing a neat white shirt and matching pants with her name and the aerodrome logo emblazoned across the front. The flexible, rectangular structure of a holo-book could be seen tucked under her arm. Outside the window, the streamlined, white design of the plane could be seen

Ron was surprised. Weren’t the gates closed? After the passengers had been ushered into the plane he walked up to the air-hostess.

‘Excuse me, didn’t the flight to Cinnabar Island leave already?’ he asked.

She checked her watch, ‘No, sweetie,’ she replied in a sugary voice, ‘There are still ten minutes before the gates close.’

Ron raised an eyebrow and consulted his own watch. 4:05? Was his watch broken? Or was it something else?

‘Would you like to get on the plane?’ asked the hostess interrupting Ron’s thoughts.

‘Uh… yes,’ Ron replied and walked towards the connection to the plane.

‘Wait! Your ticket!’ she called after him.

Ron stopped and came back. Blushing from embarrassment, he searched his pocket for the tickets before he realized that they were with Archie.

‘Hey,’ said a voice. Ron turned around to see Archie walking slowly, at his own pace as if he hadn’t a care in the world.

‘Why’d you rush?’ he asked when he reached Ron.

‘Because the gate was closed.’

‘If the gate was closed then why’d you run?’

Ron thought for a moment, blushed deeper and then replied, ‘Point taken. Now, where are the tickets?’

Archie handed over both the tickets to the sir-hostess who led them into the flight.

It was a pretty beg plane consisting of four rows with two seats each. The illumination came from orange lights on the ceiling. It was divided into four sections: First class and Business class on the bottom of the plane while Economy and Donor classes were at the top. Ron’s and Archie’s seats were unfortunately in…

‘Donor class?!’ said Ron disapprovingly, felling the hard chair in which he was sitting on, ‘If you stole the tickets, why didn’t you try to get us a higher class.’

‘Fine,’ replied Archie, who was no too overly concerned, ‘next time, you steal the tickets.'

‘Ron leaned his head backwards, ‘You know… it’s weird.’

‘What?’ Archie asked.

‘The announcement said that the gate was closed, but when I reach it the passengers are still boarding.’

‘Maybe the flight was delayed for a few minutes or something?’ Archie suggested

‘Yeah, or maybe we just went back in time.’

Archie snorted, ‘That’s unbelievable.’

‘You’re probably right. But there’s another thing. The security guards stopped following us halfway.’

Archie’s face became serious, ‘That is weird. Maybe they lost us or something? Good for us right?’

‘Yeah, maybe…’ muttered Ron. But he didn’t believe it and from the expression on Archie’s face, neither did he.




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Men's Bathroom, Main Dome, Saffron Aerodrome, 16:15


The boarding gate for flight 716 to Cinnabar has now closed.

Raven heard the electronic voice again and swore loudly. He threw the last of the security guards into the bathroom and locked the door. He had noticed the time-shift of course but he was powerless to do anything against it. He had to spend an extra ten minutes getting rid of the guards again.

He spared another glance at the door. Nobody would find them for a few hours. Even if they did they’d have a hard time opening the door.

He took out a circular mirror from his pocket and spoke into it, ‘Stop it from leaving.’

A hiss arose from the mirror and echoed in Raven’s head, ‘Done.’

He put the mirror back in his pocket and in a fraction of a second, he was gone.

He re-appeared a moment later near gate 47. Nobody noticed him appearing suddenly. He hadn’t expected anybody to anyway. He walked towards the air-hostess who was just about to retract the extension and close the door.

‘Excuse me, could I go into the flight please?’ he looked into her eyes firmly as he said this.

‘Where’s your ticket sir.’ She asked normally.

‘Here.’ He said, holding up his empty hand.

She took his imaginary ticket from his hand and examined it.

‘Here is your ticket sir,’ she said handing it back to him as if nothing was wrong, ‘Have a nice flight.’

‘Thank you,’ he said. Hypnotising her was easier than he expected. He entered the plane. An electronic beep sounded followed by a voice.

The engine problem has been fixed we are now ready for take-off. The estimated flight duration will be five minutes.

He searched the flight for the boy and soon found him in Donor class. The boy gave him a small glance but didn’t spare him a second thought. Stupid kid. It was because of Raven that he didn’t get caught… but it was part of the plan anyway.

He took an empty seat behind him. If he hadn’t looked out of the window, he wouldn’t have known that ship was flying. Saffron city had become a mass of glowing lights already.

He closed the window, turned of the lights to his seat, leaned backwards and pulled his hat over his face.

Now, all he had to do was wait.
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WOW i love the story, I cant describe how but its amazing. Its the best poke-people war fan-fic.
There was a few mis-spellings but Ill put them down to typo's, Im subscribing to this thread.
Keep up the good work.
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i love it i only just finished reading it i was so ingrosed im going to subscribe straight away keep up the good work cant wait for more saw some typos but thats easy to fix if you need anybody to proof read just send me a pm.
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Wow! Two new readers! Cool!

Thank you for replying. It means a lot to me.

Thanks for the offer heoto, but I already have a proof-reader on another forum.

As for the typos, I know all about them. I'm just too lazy to fix them =P
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Wow! Two new readers! Cool!

Thank you for replying. It means a lot to me.

Thanks for the offer heoto, but I already have a proof-reader on another forum.

As for the typos, I know all about them. I'm just too lazy to fix them =P
lol got my hopes up then, i thought you posted the next part of the story
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