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Old 07-08-2007, 05:16 PM
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Default Darkness Within

Sorry to have two threads open at once, but anyways...

I'm not sure where to put this; it isn't a story, but it could make an excellent prologue. So yeah, I'm not really into dark stuff, but here it is. Btw I guess I could make it PG 13, but it's not like that makes a difference, it like it's almost a requirement now (people seem to put PG 13 for no reason)

Anyway, what are your thoughts on this? I had an idea of a robot/thing (maybe just a computer program) waking up in a dump, and somebody stumbling upon it. This person would not know what the program was designed to do, and may somehow give the robot/thing an opportunity to be a physical object (able to kill stuff and do its thing without the restraints of a computer). So, if that makes any sense at all, whadaya think?


Darkness Within

Do it.

Yes, Master.

What are you hesitating for?

The blood… it’s warm…

Get used to it.

Yes, Master.

Kill the boy.

But he’s so young.

Do it now, or I will not hesitate to kill you.

I will.

Very good, now return to the base.

His skin… it was so soft… it split so easily…

Humans are soft. You will come to find that out soon enough.

He was crying. He begged for his life.

Are you caring for the boy?

No, Master.

Good. Now return to the base before they find you.

They have already come.

Are you saying they have found you!?

Yes… Oh God! Their bullets hurt so much! Master! Help me!

Get out of there! We can’t afford to lose you!

Are you still there!?

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Old 07-15-2007, 01:39 PM
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Default Re: Darkness Within

That's a cool story idea. Try and make it into a fanfic.
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Old 07-16-2007, 01:16 AM
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Default Re: Darkness Within

Cool. Now see, that's the sort of thing they use for good video game and movie trailers. Go ahead and give it a shot, you never know.
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Old 07-18-2007, 03:36 AM
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Default Re: Darkness Within

Wow, I didn't notice these posts, thought this thread was dead.

Anyway, I don't have a good solid plot yet, so I'll put this in the vault for now. I don't think this would do very well as a fanfiction, but as an original sci-fi. But I'm glad you like it
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