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Old 06-27-2008, 12:19 AM
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Default Re: Pokemon: Team StormRiders

I repeat:

I am the only fan of Sonic's that was happy when he died at the hands of Mephiles in the 2006 game.

And then the course of events was erased, so he never technically died. So, my lust has not been quenched.

I'm not going to stop with Sonic either...

Eep...

I'm immortal. You can't kill me.

*eye roll* Let's see...Beheading, loss of blood, crushed to death, incinerated, drowning (brain dead), heart attack, hmm...Need I go on?

Not necessary. *Faints*
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Old 06-27-2008, 04:26 AM
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*Looks at writing and issue. Realises that she doesn't have a character. D=*
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*Pokes Sonic anyway just to join in xD*
You should make a character, GS. Just like Kris did. ^_^

Why do you have to kill everyone off Grassy? *sighs*
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Old 06-27-2008, 07:47 AM
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I just discovered your fic! Well, I haven't read it all but from the few chapters I read, I can see that it's interesting and original. It might take me a while to catch up but fortunately I can read pretty fast. Good job!
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Old 06-27-2008, 11:16 AM
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You should make a character, GS. Just like Kris did. ^_^
No need, I already have one! ^^ (Just not on this forum, so nobody knows about her)
I wrote a story about how Shadow didn't die at the end of SA2B, three years ago, and my friend loved it, and she wanted her own copy for her birthday. So I redid the whole thing basically and it takes up 42 pages on Word. (I have been told it isn't that long, but I think it is ^^;)
Anyway, this is her: Zeta, formally known or otherwise known as Zarro:
http://i284.photobucket.com/albums/l...areon/Zeta.jpg
(Sorry if this is counted as spam! ^^;)

But anyway, I have just read another two chapters! You have done such a good job with the storyline and characters, and the battle with Aggron sent shivers down my spine several times! It was intense and very well written!

I have a question..how you do pronounce Jarre? xD

Also, you and I have a few things in common! I always make up names for characters like yours! :O :D And also, when I write Pokemon being plurals, I don't write "Pikachus", or "Gallades", instead I use "Pikachu" and "Gallade" as the plural! I am not 100% sure that you do that, but you did when the Aggron made lots of copies of itself and you mentioned something about them.

Also, just a reminder that the only word in the English language that doesn't have an apostrophe before the "s" when used as a possessive word, is "its". When it is possessive, it is written "its". Only when it is abbreviated as "it is", you write it as "it's". Just to let you know. ;D I picked it up a few times while reading, and again, very few errors with spelling. You must have missed a letter, or you accidentally do a typo. Probably both.

But yesh, I can't wait to read more, even though it is up to me to read it! =3
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Old 06-27-2008, 07:22 PM
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Ranger: Whee! *Jumps after Sonic and pokes him more*

Blaire: He doesn't quit...

Tippi:

I always thought Jarre was pronounced "Jare" (rhyming with 'bare')
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I thought it was prounounced, Jarre, like Jar.
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I thought it was prounounced, Jarre, like Jar.
Same! Or maybe it's pronounced (Jar-'a'), with the 'a' sounding like the a in aim...
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Old 06-27-2008, 11:38 PM
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Same! Or maybe it's pronounced (Jar-'a'), with the 'a' sounding like the a in aim...
I thought maybe Jar, but at one stage I thought maybe Jar-A, like Azurai Wolf said.
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Old 06-28-2008, 04:53 AM
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I thought it was like jar too. jarra sounds kinda feminine.

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No need, I already have one! ^^ (Just not on this forum, so nobody knows about her)
I wrote a story about how Shadow didn't die at the end of SA2B, three years ago, and my friend loved it, and she wanted her own copy for her birthday. So I redid the whole thing basically and it takes up 42 pages on Word. (I have been told it isn't that long, but I think it is ^^;)
Anyway, this is her: Zeta, formally known or otherwise known as Zarro:
http://i284.photobucket.com/albums/l...areon/Zeta.jpg
(Sorry if this is counted as spam! ^^;)
Have you read Grassy_Aggron's fic in the Other Fanfic section?
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Old 06-28-2008, 05:57 AM
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I thought it was like jar too. jarra sounds kinda feminine.



Have you read Grassy_Aggron's fic in the Other Fanfic section?
No....^_^; I kinda got destracted and when I came back it was much longer. I should go back and read it, shouldn't I?
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No....^_^; I kinda got destracted and when I came back it was much longer. I should go back and read it, shouldn't I?
Definetly. I have hardly a clue about Sonic and I love it! ^-^
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Old 06-28-2008, 07:41 PM
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I feel a blush coming on.

STOP POKING ME! *Growls*

Ooh...Snippy!

Yeah, may I suggest that Zeta/Zarro stay away from Shadow? Cami would appreciate it.

I feel loved.

We know.

Yeah, there are only about seven chapters in my story...About to be eight. The rest is just chatspeak and theories (only two of them right now...)

I always pronounced Jarre as jar. Rhymes with yarr!
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Old 06-29-2008, 01:36 AM
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I feel a blush coming on.

STOP POKING ME! *Growls*

Ooh...Snippy!

Yeah, may I suggest that Zeta/Zarro stay away from Shadow? Cami would appreciate it.

I feel loved.

We know.

Yeah, there are only about eight chapters in my story...About to be nine. The rest is just chatspeak and theories (only two of them right now...)

I always pronounced Jarre as jar. Rhymes with yarr!
Haha! It's okay, I am not single anyway! But, my sister Zadow is the one you should keep away from Shadow! xD

Yes, you don't have to worry about her.
I just finished the chapters, Latias_Rider! Your story is FANTASTIC! It is the best Pokemon Fan Fic I have ever read. I read ten whole chapters yesterday, and the last one just then.

I love the fact that you change to different character's perspectives throughout the story. It is an effective element.

But...was Jarre going to try and kill Zanna (or injure her) when he entered the room as she was having a fit because she was looking into Jarre's past? Because it mentions in Rye's point of view that Jarre was walking towards her, and he raised a talon in attack. Unless I missed something (xD I do that a lot!) I thought he was going to try to injure her. But I wouldn't think that Jarre was like that! Well, at least, not now.

But anyways, suspicions about Balian! He's one of Deoxys' followers, right? Cause at one stage, I thought he was Deoxys.

I also love your italics along the way, and the battle with Scythe was tougher than ever. I couldn't stop reading; it's like I was under some sort of spell! xD

And with Jarre killing that Sneasel, well, that was terrifying! I was shaking! xD

You tend to repeat words a lot, which is okay but it would be better if you didn't. Things like "snout" you tend to use a lot. Maybe try out "muzzle". ^_^
And you use the expression "tore away" quite a bit, too. I mean, it is a great expression, but remember to use a variety of words...even though you do anyway! xD

Who am I kidding, you are high quality writer, and you have an impressive vocabulary.
If nobody wants to object, you could call me Team StormRiders' biggest fan!

....When's the next chapter?! And I have another question. Have you read a book called "The Sight"? It is about wolves, and it seems somehow related to this story.

Keep it up, please do! I will probably get all of my friends to read it! Haha.
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Old 06-29-2008, 04:13 AM
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Haha! It's okay, I am not single anyway! But, my sister Zadow is the one you should keep away from Shadow! xD

Yes, you don't have to worry about her.

And with Jarre killing that Sneasel, well, that was terrifying! I was shaking! xD

And you use the expression "tore away" quite a bit, too. I mean, it is a great expression, but remember to use a variety of words...even though you do anyway! xD

....When's the next chapter?! And I have another question. Have you read a book called "The Sight"? It is about wolves, and it seems somehow related to this story.
Stay away from him Zadow! *Hisses*

I was frightened by Jarre actually...I felt pity for the sneasel. Of course, you described it in such detail...Maybe I can help with the "tore away" problem? I like using "[Name] jerked away in horror". That's a staple favorite.

Oh my lord! You read that book too? I was shaking and crying...But I loved it!
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Old 06-29-2008, 10:00 AM
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I just discovered your fic! Well, I haven't read it all but from the few chapters I read, I can see that it's interesting and original. It might take me a while to catch up but fortunately I can read pretty fast. Good job!
Thanks so much Golden_Ray! I love reading your fic. ^_^
Only I'm a bit behind at the moment.

~It's not spam, GS. ^_^
And I really didn't know that thing about 'its'. Thanks for telling me. :D
And my Pokemon plurals are like that, too.
And awesome pic!

And no, you're right about the room part with Jarre. But he was only going to attack her, not kill her.
Ah, Balian...he is revealed within the next few chapters. ^_^

Wow. I have so much gratitude to express right now. ^_^
And I know I repeat words, but I do try not to.

And I've never heard of that story unfortunately.

~Also, for everyone, Jarre's name is pronounce as 'Jar'.
I thought that would have been clear though, as there are two 'r's instead of one. ^_^

Thanks so much for all your comments! I'll put them to good use.

Chapter 17 will be up this week for sure!


(Oh, I like using 'and' a lot, don't I? xD)
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