Sorry about lateness, a bunch of my grades were deleted so I had to restart them. Excuse the length of this as well please.
: This story begins with the salesman yelling out to the crowd. I like this introduction, it drew me into the story definitely. It starts strong as well, and I like that. A strong introduction makes me think that the rest of the story will be great, and that's a good thought.
It works the other way around, if the introduction sucks, then we think the rest will. That's what makes this section one of the most important. Keep that in mind.
I'm also looking for one more thing in this section though: did it open up to the rest of the story? Well let's see. He yells at the crowd, they yell back, but then he shows the video, the main part. I'd say yes, it does meet this as well, meaning you did well here.
: This plot is about a salesman trying to sell his product. Of course, the product is none other than Magikarp! To be honest, selling Magikarp is a common thing in the series. Remember the salesman from the anime, or the guy in Red/Blue/Green/Yellow/LeafGreen/FireRed, who reappears in Black/White? Apparently, it's what they use to scam most of the time. I wouldn't call this plot necessarily original, but let's remember, we're going for an Easiest category 'mon. Even if that fact is not counted, at least you strayed from a plot centered around fishing, or going into a forest and finding one.
Anyway, it then shows a video about Magikarp going up against a Garchomp. I have to say, this is definitely my favorite part of the story. It strays from the usual selling Magikarp thing, and goes toward a selling tactic you'd see in the real world. I like it when plots that are seemingly unoriginal take this sort of spin. I like it even better when the original part is the main part of the story, which this is. As a result, I'd say you did well on this part.
The final part, the salesman tries to get Mizuiro to buy it. He's who I called the James in this situation, or the guy that he attempts to scam. His success though is unknown, or at least until this grade's end. From here, the story ends.
This story as a whole appealed to me a lot, and I like how you put thought to stray away from a totally unoriginal story, like I stated earlier. To conclude, you did well here.
: I don't see any repeated errors, so good job here. I'll just note some other things that I did see though. I'll show these now:
Some people stopped and stared as he said this, then they started to laugh.
However the Magikarp had a sash tied around its waist, it blended in so well with its scales that no one seemed to know that it was around it.
In both of these cases, you're missing a conjunction. They are needed to connect the sentence, because if the sentences aren't connected, then the story doesn't connect, and the story connecting is big for ease of reading.
Something I'd like to note, though, is that in the second, you used the word 'it' as a sort of conjunction. The reason this doesn't work is because its an article, a completely different part of speech that a conjunction.
Now for the next:
This was probably a typo, but there's an 'h' missing in Garchomp.
Either way, these errors weren't really repeated often, so you did a good job in this category.
: Like I noted earlier, selling Magikarp is practically the only way they scam in this series. It's happened so often, so I don't doubt its plausibility. The video gave me some doubts, but it's a video used for advertising; the validity of videos in this particular category are very debatable, so I can't take it seriously that a Magikarp can beat Garchomp, or at least, not entirely. Bottom line, you did a good job here.
: This story is mostly based on the description of sight due to being told from a third-person point of view. That's okay though, because you did put enough description in the right places, without putting too much. I'd say you did well here.
: This story was pretty good as far as dialogue goes, so you're good here.
: As far as requirements, I'd say you're good here. Is this length appropriate as far as pacing and spacing though? Well, this story did move at a pace that wasn't very fast, and there were few gaps between the events, so I'd say you did well here. Great job!
Inclusion of Target
: It's the product of the salesman, and appears in the video. I'd say Magikarp is pretty major here, so you're good here as well.
: Magikarp is captured
. You did a very great job here, just make sure about originality plot-wise if you go for a higher ranking, and using conjunctions. Congrats on the godfish, and I hope to see you writing again.