path of the legandarys (pg/adventure)

[most duded]

(SOME ONE MUST HAVE HACKED ME. i DIDN'T DO THIS, SWEAR)

[Giratina]

We don't care about the character sheets right now; you can add them on as you go along, but we only need to know about Ray right now.

And then there's the chapter itself. Even if it is a WP (work in progress), you should write it all down on a word editor - even Notepad would do - so that you can save it and come back to it later. There is absolutely no description, no background, no action, no anything. Who is Ray? Is he a fledgling Trainer? Is he a new Champion of the Pokémon League? Is he a shiny Magmar? As a guideline, all chapters should be at least three pages long - this chapter isn't even three sentences. Also, there should be a space after ' going,"' and "Ray," so that it looks more like this:

"We better get going," said Ray, "it is starting to rain."

[most duded]

!!!! I didn't post this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!what the crapin crap of crapingness?!?!

[Lusankya]

Try changing your password, or PMing a Gmod if that doesn't work.