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Old 10-19-2009, 04:45 AM
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Definitely Dragonlance. That series is LONG, and they're constantly writing more and more books to tag onto the already MASSIVE load of books connected with that whole universe. They're still really good though.

As for the longest Pokemon Fan Fiction series... I don't know what holds that title. I would be pleasantly surprised if it was ToJ and I didn't even know about it.
Not length, retconning. The practice of altering the past in a series, either without mention or through a plot device to create a new situation (often for the sake of convenience).
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Not length, retconning. The practice of altering the past in a series, either without mention or through a plot device to create a new situation (often for the sake of convenience).
Ah, I get what you're saying now.

The Dawnbringer Star ended up being one of the major elements of ToJ III that made up the ending, and it if was allowed to exist forevermore, would have resulted in never-ending peace. ToJ III would have pretty much ended the series to be like this, so in ToJ IV, I knew I would have needed to have something happen to Dawnbringer so that the eternal peace that was created backfires. Its just that what Juno did with the Dawnbringer Star was ridiculously major, and because it backfires and damages the timestream, the pieces needed to be picked up and reassembled again. Of course, like a broken vase glued back together, it will still never be the same way again.

The only other way to go about doing it was to just have Dawnbringer fizzle away and have wars start up again while keeping all the past events in tact, but then that would be exactly the same way ToJ II started off, and it wouldn't make sense. However, now, there's a whole new dynamic on the storyline, as while Juno and the others still have their memories, things about their history will have changed, and while Juno still has his experiences, they only become memories in a new reality of parallels from what was to what is.

That's all I'll say, but it will make sense and be interesting without it being a cheesy way to dodge out of how ToJ III ended.
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Two chapters in, you've only set the scene, haven't really started on the main plot (unless it's something like they have to meet Sita in Kivistal again) and I'm already addicted. What will happen to Juno, Blazewing and Sita? Will they have to fight Dialga? And by the way, never completely put the idea of a new ToJ out of your mind because with something this good, you'll never be able to leave it as is. You may forget for a while but sooner or later you'll get a new ToJ idea and you'll start again. One thing though, during the time between ideas, have you ever considered trying to finish some of your countless other stories? I've read the beginnings of some and they all look like they could possibly shape up to be as good as this (And if you've read my comments, you know that's big). Either way, can't wait for the rest of this. ToJ forever!!!
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Wow, a ToJ 4? That came out of left field. XD Pretty awesome, so far. Its a bit confusing, just because the last time I read anything ToJ was months ago. But its still intriguing.

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I mean, House of M aside has there ever been such a massive retcon of fiction, fan or otherwise?
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Touché. I don't pay attention to DC though.
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Wow, a ToJ 4? That came out of left field. XD Pretty awesome, so far. Its a bit confusing, just because the last time I read anything ToJ was months ago. But its still intriguing.



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So... wow. I spent yesterday and today (yes, just those two days) reading ToJ I-III. Amazing. Once they got into Randy's dreamworld, I was hooked, and just couldn't stop - and, amazingly, it just kept getting better.

Now that I just finished ToJ III, though, I am curious how this whole thing is going to play out. I'm not sure how you can continue it.. how you can top ToJ III. But if anyone can, it's you. I'll edit this (or comment if you've posted more) once I read all you've put up of this. I salute you, Neo Pikachu. You are an inspiration and an amazing story-crafter. Not just a writer. No. It's not so much your writing skills (which are quite good) that made the saga so great, it was your ability to create a masterful and epic saga with a moving and compelling storyline of hope and dreams triumphing over the darkest of evils, driven by some wonderfully crafted characters. Really, I feel as if you truly captured the essence of those two extremes, both ultimate evil and ultimate hope/dreams. I'm astounded by this. My fan fiction writing isn't much, but I'm currently working on a novel outside of the fan fiction world and, although I am very proud of it and am close to publishing it, you've astounded and inspired me.

Got to say, though, as much as ToJ II and III were amazing, the whole part of ToJ I, up to the end of all of Randy's dreamworld stuff, holds a very special place for me. Don't know why... I guess the dreamworld was so ridiculous and creative and fun in a weird way, and then the final battle was really, really cool. It also kind of holds fond memories for me, since once that all ended, it seemed like Pokemon almost exclusively used conventional weaponry rather than their own abilities. And the fact that Juno's powers were pure epic-ness at their finest in that battle. It was the most epic Pokemon battle ever.

After that... it only got better. I promise. But that beginning section still is amazing to me. I don't know. I guess it just shows that, as much as the rest of the saga has been war and death and evil, that part shows that you can write something completely different and just as good lol.

Again, awesome job. Words can't describe how good the saga's been so far. I wouldn't have read it so fast (or possibly read it at all) if it wasn't THAT GOOD. Good luck with this, and no matter how crazy it seems to be able to continue the story, I know that this story is safe in your hands. Good luck, and can't wait to see what happens.

PS and sorry for the long post. I'm a little late to the party, I guess, so I didn't get to post on the other story's boards when they were in action. Glad I got to read them, though!
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Two chapters in, you've only set the scene, haven't really started on the main plot (unless it's something like they have to meet Sita in Kivistal again) and I'm already addicted. What will happen to Juno, Blazewing and Sita? Will they have to fight Dialga? And by the way, never completely put the idea of a new ToJ out of your mind because with something this good, you'll never be able to leave it as is. You may forget for a while but sooner or later you'll get a new ToJ idea and you'll start again. One thing though, during the time between ideas, have you ever considered trying to finish some of your countless other stories? I've read the beginnings of some and they all look like they could possibly shape up to be as good as this (And if you've read my comments, you know that's big). Either way, can't wait for the rest of this. ToJ forever!!!
Hey, we'll see. But honestly, whenever I feel like writing, adding more to ToJ always seems like a good idea.

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Wow, a ToJ 4? That came out of left field. XD Pretty awesome, so far. Its a bit confusing, just because the last time I read anything ToJ was months ago. But its still intriguing.
Well, hopefully this refreshes your memory. I tried my best not to make it too confusing.

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It pretty much started with the Pokemon Heroes movie :3
Yep... man that was an awesome movie. Best one of the bunch, I'd have to say.

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So... wow. I spent yesterday and today (yes, just those two days) reading ToJ I-III. Amazing. Once they got into Randy's dreamworld, I was hooked, and just couldn't stop - and, amazingly, it just kept getting better.
Dude, what you said was awesome, thanks. I don't know how you read ToJ I-III in just two days, because it took me six years to come up with all of the ideas and write all of that. Regardless, thanks for the kind words and I'm glad it inspired you.

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Chapter 3
The Sum of Memories

Regardless of whatever happened, I was glad that Sita, Blazewing, and I were still together. From what Dialga told us, it seemed he had just barely managed to find a way for us to stay united. But still, I could understand how I managed to still have Blazewing by my side, but how did Sita and I ultimately still find each other if I never even walked upon Kivistal?

“Dialga…” Sita spoke softly, “If that’s true…”

“You lived a normal, unmarried life, Sita.” Dialga told her, answering her question before she even asked it, “Instead, you met Juno while in Utopia. As foreseen, you two would be paired again, regardless of the different circumstances in life. There is a strong tie between the two of you that even I cannot see. In the end, you two bonded, and you showed Juno the ways of being an oracle of Utopia, assisting those in the living realm with your divination. You even gave Juno your greatest secret, the aspect of the Blood Summoner, once again. Juno, in turn, showed you how to draw upon the power of dreams and imagination. Both of you became White Guardians of Utopia, probably the best that would ever be in its ranks.”

I was relieved, knowing in the end, I never lost Sita. I was not surprised at this outcome, however. I think no matter how many alternate pasts or futures I could be thrown into, I would always find my way back to her, someway, somehow. Even as he said that, I could feel myself being able to draw upon these divination skills that I swore I never had before. Regardless, the question of Kivistal still lingered on my mind. What had become of that world?

“What happened to Kivistal then?” I asked Dialga.

“You weren’t there, but a different hero emerged to save them.” Dialga told me, “Like you, there was something distinctly special about him, but unlike you, he came directly from within the Southern Tempest, already born in Kivistal during the war.”

“…Landon Denathos.” I spoke, grabbing the name from a strange, already innate memory, “I know because…”

“You helped him.” Dialga revealed, “He never met you or Sita in Kivistal, but he trusted in you when he met with your otherworldly presence. You and Sita encouraged him through the messages and guidance you left in his dreams and visions, and he followed it the best he could regardless of the challenges that awaited him. The war upon Kivistal pushed the Silver Apex back, forcing them to join hands with forces in the Faraway Hills and the Azure Islands, while the Crimson Stars and the Black Onyx Kingdom warred with each other instead, ignoring what they thought was an already vanquished enemy. You were able to show Landon the path to victory… because you had already walked it once before in another life. And Landon Denathos fought bravely alongside his comrades… ultimately defeating both of the enemy armies and the Abyss’s invaders. Like you, he went through the Abyss and Utopia to accomplish his objectives. And unlike before, you finally met him in Utopia, just as he ascended to become the Paladin of Dragons. You bore witness to the entire ceremony he was destined to partake in.”

It was strange how these memories flashed in my mind. All of it felt like a second life that I had lived many years ago, even though I still retained all the memories and experiences I had from the previous journey. And the ceremony… I recalled seeing memories and images of it, even though it felt like I never consciously saw it myself. Rayquaza… the other dragon Pokémon… all urging Landon on. I saw it… once again. Even the image of Landon as a half-dragon, half-Pikachu still lingered in my memory…

I had realized how the wars upon Kivistal’s shores were ended. Landon was able to do what I had done. In a way, I always believed that he could do it, and here was undeniable proof that he could. I was not surprised that in an alternate past, he had proved himself, became the hero that the world needed for salvation from evil, and became his own legend.

“And the final piece of the past…” Dialga continued, regardless of how many thoughts were going through my mind, “Egatept.”

And suddenly my thinking totally switched gears, knowing what happened in the world of Kivistal may or may not have changed what happened in the world of Egatept. I remembered that in the beginning, the only way I discovered Egatept’s impending doom was through Diantus, one of the many forgotten Pokémon legends, bringing me to trial for believing my actions were for selfish gains. After losing his case, he revealed his distress for Egatept’s judgment before the already assembled court. However, I knew that could not have happened if Landon had won victory for the Silver Apex in my place. He would have had no reason to bring me before them.

“I know what you’re thinking, Juno, and you are correct about that.” Dialga told me, “You and Sita discovered Egatept’s judgment by yourselves, using your abilities of arcane channeling and foresight. As before, you elected to go to Egatept to prevent the harsh judgment. Like before, you three joined the NOS as double-agents, but unlike before, you three stayed inside long enough to instigate an uprising within the NOS itself. Leading members of the fascist organization were systematically assassinated, bringing the NOS to its knees as its members saw the error in their ways. And you had led them, along with the other Egatept factions that opposed the NOS. After an investigation, you managed to discover how the Abyss and Egatept were linked. But, instead of confronting Xov and his armies, you blocked off the link that Egatept had with the Abyss, destroyed the temple that opened the way, and managed to lead the Alliance to vanquish all the remaining fanatics and loyalists to the NOS. The legions of the Normal Operation Specialists came to a crashing end with their source of power cut off. With your help, the Alliance defeated the abominations the NOS had become, and you vowed to stay behind to ensure that you would leave Egatept as a cleaner world of promise and hope. One century later, Egatept had transformed, a newly cleansed world free of its vices and sins that even Arceus didn’t think was possible.”

I wasn’t sure exactly how much damage the dead Dawnbringer Star had done, but whatever Dialga did to correct it, I couldn’t thank him enough. I was sure that time had been so fragmented and corrupted that Dialga was forced to spend millennia to try and tie it back together, while making sure the outcomes were as positive as possible. I couldn’t fathom how much work, attention, and effort had to be sacrificed to make something like this happen.

“Dialga… thank you.” I told him, bowing down before him, “Thank you for making this possible, and ensuring we have a future.”

“We all do whatever we can, Juno.” Dialga told me, laying it before my eyes, “But through all the possible pasts, both enlightening and horrific, that I’ve had to piece together and reassemble, I find it remarkable that in all of them, you and Sita never, ever once separate or choose different mates. Never have I seen an instance of love so strong.”

Sita and I couldn’t help but just look at each other and smile. She and I knew that while Dialga might have been surprised, we weren’t. Time itself could change many things, but this was something that was purely untouchable.

And inside of myself, I could feel the kind of insightful power that Sita showed me. It was a perception like no other, an ability to see the things that were hidden to the naked eye. I knew I would always be a restless warrior, someone who would be willing to fight for the oppressed whenever I could. But out of everything we had learned from Dialga, the surprise that we had lived two lives in stark contrast to each other but retained the knowledge of both of them was something I never thought would be possible. But now, I knew that what happened in the first life would only be a memory and experience now. None of that actually happened, and the presence of Dawnbringer never existed in this newer realty.

When it all came down to truth… it was better this way…

I had learned the hard way never to interfere with time itself. In the end, the damage and repairs had been done and thankfully everyone was able to walk away from it. From now on, whatever happened before only existed as a memory to me, the kind that lingers like a dream we never forget but know it never happened. Instead, I accepted Dialga’s adjustments as the new past. And in the end, I vowed to never make another “Dawnbringer.”

And then Sita, Blazewing, and I walked away from the Adamant Sanctuary to live in the new realty that had been sown. There was no “Renaissance” anymore, but instead the Abyss was quarantined and kept in check like it should have been. The hopelessly damned Pokémon were still thrown into the nightmarish realm, never to learn from it, while some of them were strangely content with the state of unending madness. And as we watched the many years march on, I saw wars and struggles pass without any intervention from Utopia or the Abyss. Instead, Utopia accepted the dead Pokémon that were good in heart and fought for just causes, while the Abyss seized those that found pleasure in the suffering of others and killed for their own selfish greed.

Even as two of the most highly respected White Guardians of Utopia, Sita and I were strictly told not to get too involved with the affairs of the living, and to only provide guidance when it was truly necessarily. Many of the situations where I thought spiritual guidance was critical were overruled as we were always told to hold back and let those troubled Pokémon find the way on their own. There were times when I stepped back and saw the same Dawnbringer Star inside myself trying to come out again… struggling to create my own world without wars and suffering all over again. I couldn’t help but think that if the role of Arceus had been given to me… the worlds and all the realms of the afterlife would be very different. The Dawnbringer Star proved what kind of world I would have had instead, and in the end, it seemed like Dialga and Arceus both felt all of that was going too far. I suppose they were right in a way, seeing as how they felt the balance was truly necessary.

I already knew Utopia’s purpose was to reward those that found the light on their own, while the purpose of the Abyss was to punish and condemn those that had adamantly rejected all sense of peace and purity. There were times when it felt like Egatept all over again, like I was fighting alone for hope, even against my greatest allies. Sometimes… I wonder that if I allowed Egatept to be destroyed… would Arceus have regretted that decision later on? I didn’t know, but I still felt the need to pursue the faith that even the wicked could find some light in their hearts, and reject the evil they had done.

And in the end, I wished there was a way for something like Renaissance to exist, at least some realm of remediation, but I inherited the wisdom that only those that truly wanted a second chance would ever find some escape from that unending nightmare. However, the chances of that were incredibly small, and it seemed like forever more, it would be Utopia and the Abyss always locked in a fragile standstill, endlessly competing for the support of the living…

But… never once did I think two realms that were always enemies and in harsh contrast to each other… would need to align to fight a new enemy… one that we thought would never be possible…
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Incredible. You created an alternate timeline perfectly, something I have tried many times, but never succeeded in doing. (I swore off using too much time travel in fanfics long ago) This chapter is more than just an explanation chapter. It rewrites everything in ToJ and sets the scene for this part of the saga, giving you a clean slate to work with. (Is it just me or does that sound oddly poetic?) ToJ is the only fanfic to have me completely hooked by the early chapters and this is no exception. Keep on writing NP, and I'll keep the praise coming.
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Well, no idea where this is gonna go, but just like shuyin said, you set up the alternate timeline perfectly. I like the concept that wars are essentially necessary, and that a world without wars cannot exist... it sucks, but it does in a way make sense. Though I loved the ending of ToJ III and thought it was fantastic, this is a great way to start off a continuation of your saga. Great so far - I'm very interested to see what this "new enemy" is.
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Aaaaaand here comes Giratina the nay-sayer to point out corrections.

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“I don’t fully understand it myself, honestly,” I told her, not sure what had come out of this, “But… I think I know where we are.”
Should be a comma instead of a period after 'honestly', since 'I told her...' is still a part of that sentence.

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“You’re awake,” an ominous but suddenly familiar voice said to us. “Come, there is much I need to explain.”
Unless you meant it for the 'ominous but suddenly familiar voice' to be introduced after its initial speech, then the punctuation marks are in the wrong places. See the mini-lesson a few quotes down.

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As his deep red eyes looked at us intensely, the metallic wings on his back stood straight up while his long and powerful tail lightly waved back and forward.
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“I can see in your eyes that most of the answers are already in your head,” Dialga told me. “Yes, Dawnbringer is gone, never to return...
You seem fond of doing this. Whenever someone speaks and the speech is broken by an identifier, it should always hook up with the first part and not the second, like so:
"There's no way you could possibly do this." Said Doru to his rival, "It's practically impossible."

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"There's no way you could possibly do this," said Doru to his rival. "It's practically impossible."
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“You lived a normal, unmarried life, Sita.” Dialga told her, answering her question before she even asked it, “Instead, you met Juno while in Utopia.
...Okay, I'll stop now.

However, I find it interesting that with all of the (earned) thread traffic this story has made in three chapters alone that nobody realized the funky grammatial structure/pointed out the funky grammatical structure.

In any case, that little nagging thought that maybe an alternate continuity within the first one wasn't a particularly good idea still remains, but I haven't seen anyone else think up having all of their hero's epic deeds being lost in nowherestime and being replayed by a Pikachu named Landon. Of course, I have to wonder whether you had the whole 'past three stories never really happened' planned from the beginning (or at least ToJ II), because it seems rather strange to me that you would put in so much time and work to a trio of stories only to explain that no, it never really happened, this chapter-long summary is what happened instead. I probably wouldn't have thought it particularly logical to do something like that, but that's just me. And please don't think of me as someone insulting your work by pointing out grammar errors and unorthodox plot developments; The Trials of Juno - collective title, yay - are a truly epic piece of fanwork, and I can't imagine how grueling it must have been to do all of this.

...Archives above, this had more quotes than I expected.
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In any case, that little nagging thought that maybe an alternate continuity within the first one wasn't a particularly good idea still remains, but I haven't seen anyone else think up having all of their hero's epic deeds being lost in nowherestime and being replayed by a Pikachu named Landon.
That Pikachu, Landon Denathos, happens to be my creation, and basically one of my two Pokesonas. He is in fact one of the two main characters in my Trial of Juno AU fic, "United in Arms" (link is in my sig, attached to the banner). He was originally made for the ToJ RP that became my fic, actually, and so far, despite my slowness, it's working out well (I hope) ^^.

As for my opinions, Neo, so far, top notch, amigo. As I told you over XFire, I am incredibly grateful you gave Landon that little arc in the history of the ToJ universe with this rewrite of the history of the series. Wonderful storytelling as always, and yes, slight grammatical errors, but easily overlooked by the sheer EPIC this fic screams, dude x3

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Old 10-22-2009, 06:25 PM
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Incredible. You created an alternate timeline perfectly, something I have tried many times, but never succeeded in doing. (I swore off using too much time travel in fanfics long ago) This chapter is more than just an explanation chapter. It rewrites everything in ToJ and sets the scene for this part of the saga, giving you a clean slate to work with. (Is it just me or does that sound oddly poetic?) ToJ is the only fanfic to have me completely hooked by the early chapters and this is no exception. Keep on writing NP, and I'll keep the praise coming.
It won’t be totally clean, but its definitely workable to pave the path for the new installment. I know it probably seems drastic, but it gave me plenty of ideas to work with.

Anyway, thanks for the kind words, I appreciate it.

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Well, no idea where this is gonna go, but just like shuyin said, you set up the alternate timeline perfectly. I like the concept that wars are essentially necessary, and that a world without wars cannot exist... it sucks, but it does in a way make sense. Though I loved the ending of ToJ III and thought it was fantastic, this is a great way to start off a continuation of your saga. Great so far - I'm very interested to see what this "new enemy" is.
I liked the ending of ToJ III, but after thinking it out once again, something seemed flawed and unrealistic about it. So, I kind of wanted to have the events undone, but the memories still kept.

I think you’re going to like what I have planned for the many chapters ahead.

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Aaaaaand here comes Giratina the nay-sayer to point out corrections.
You were right about the tail, which was a slight careless error I didn’t pick up on. As for that other grammar rule, I guess I was a bit unfamiliar with that one. I won’t make that mistake again, thanks for pointing it out.

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In any case, that little nagging thought that maybe an alternate continuity within the first one wasn't a particularly good idea still remains, but I haven't seen anyone else think up having all of their hero's epic deeds being lost in nowherestime and being replayed by a Pikachu named Landon. Of course, I have to wonder whether you had the whole 'past three stories never really happened' planned from the beginning (or at least ToJ II), because it seems rather strange to me that you would put in so much time and work to a trio of stories only to explain that no, it never really happened, this chapter-long summary is what happened instead. I probably wouldn't have thought it particularly logical to do something like that, but that's just me. And please don't think of me as someone insulting your work by pointing out grammar errors and unorthodox plot developments; The Trials of Juno - collective title, yay - are a truly epic piece of fanwork, and I can't imagine how grueling it must have been to do all of this.
Don’t take this the wrong way, but I’m glad there are readers making the flawed assumption that what happened in ToJ I, II, and III no longer apply, because that’s at least telling me I’m not making this too predictable. If Sita, Blazewing, and Juno lost their memories of what happened in the previous past, I would totally agree with you. However, there’s a reason why I didn’t have that happen and why Sita, Blazewing, and Juno still remember it, but that’s all I’m going to say because I hate spoiling things. I think we can all agree that Harry Potter had plenty of its own unorthodox plot developments, but found a way to neatly tie everything together. In all truth, stories that can accomplish this go way beyond those that were foreseeable every step of the way.

Honestly, I think you’re judging this story way too early. Think about the title. What would you think “whispers of the forgotten angels” means?

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As for my opinions, Neo, so far, top notch, amigo. As I told you over XFire, I am incredibly grateful you gave Landon that little arc in the history of the ToJ universe with this rewrite of the history of the series. Wonderful storytelling as always, and yes, slight grammatical errors, but easily overlooked by the sheer EPIC this fic screams, dude x3

*thumbs-up*
It helps you and I both, because Landon is a good part of the plot device I have in mind. But I’m glad you like the story and the fact you continue to be an avid reader of this.
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Honestly, I think you’re judging this story way too early. Think about the title. What would you think “whispers of the forgotten angels” means?
[stares at title for a few seconds]

...

...Ohhhhhhhh.

I may be judging this story too early, but those are just my impressions as the chapters come out. They're definitely subject to change, because I'm going to keep reading this story because I know for a fact that the previous ones were very good and that it's probably all going to smooth over eventually.
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