Member List
Calendar
F.A.Q.
Search
Log Out
Pokemon Forum - Pokemon Elite 2000  
 

Go Back   Pokemon Forum - Pokemon Elite 2000 Interactive Boards Creative Writing Author's Corner

Author's Corner Share your ideas with other members and come here for helpful writing tips.


Reply
 
Thread Tools
  #1  
Old 02-20-2007, 04:41 PM
TheStoneRegisteel Offline
 
Join Date: Feb 2007
Location: New Bark Town
Posts: 205
Default Review Please! - Also an idea in the first post!

Cool, i'm creating the first Review topic in the history of this thread. Maybe we should sticky a Review main area, and there all the review areas could be linked, if someone's searching for a certain review area for a fic.

I would like to get my Eternity Bound reviwed please. It's a Pokemon Fan-fic about Shadow Pokemon.
Reply With Quote
  #2  
Old 02-20-2007, 05:02 PM
Hoshika's Avatar
Hoshika Offline
 
Join Date: Jul 2006
Location: '»\(ಠ_ಠ)/»'
Posts: 6,618
Default Re: Review Please! - Also an idea in the first post!

Quote:
Originally Posted by TheStoneRegisteel View Post
Cool, i'm creating the first Review topic in the history of this thread. Maybe we should sticky a Review main area, and there all the review areas could be linked, if someone's searching for a certain review area for a fic.

I would like to get my Eternity Bound reviwed please. It's a Pokemon Fan-fic about Shadow Pokemon.
Mmm. I read through it a little quickly, but I caught a few things you might want to fix:

1. Double space after each person/PokÚmon's/whatever's phrase when they are talking.
2. That intro about the Shadow PokÚmon situation thing seemed kinda terse. I wish there was more to it. =|

I'll say more stuff when there's more chapters.
__________________
Spoiler:
Quote:
Originally Posted by Ridley View Post
I suffer from some desease where I just don't feel like catching a pokemon unless it's rare, which ends in me never catching com mons.

I finished Gold with a pokedex of 6.

Oak's Rating: "Congratulations! Looks like you've learned how to use a pokeball!"
Quote:
Originally Posted by Charbok View Post

Haagen-Daz is an ice cream company, dumbass.

Reply With Quote
  #3  
Old 02-20-2007, 05:26 PM
TheStoneRegisteel Offline
 
Join Date: Feb 2007
Location: New Bark Town
Posts: 205
Default Re: Review Please! - Also an idea in the first post!

It becomes more tense as the story progress'....
Reply With Quote
  #4  
Old 02-20-2007, 05:38 PM
Hoshika's Avatar
Hoshika Offline
 
Join Date: Jul 2006
Location: '»\(ಠ_ಠ)/»'
Posts: 6,618
Default Re: Review Please! - Also an idea in the first post!

Quote:
Originally Posted by TheStoneRegisteel View Post
It becomes more tense as the story progress'....
I said "terse", not "tense". Terse is when something goes along too shortly.
__________________
Spoiler:
Quote:
Originally Posted by Ridley View Post
I suffer from some desease where I just don't feel like catching a pokemon unless it's rare, which ends in me never catching com mons.

I finished Gold with a pokedex of 6.

Oak's Rating: "Congratulations! Looks like you've learned how to use a pokeball!"
Quote:
Originally Posted by Charbok View Post

Haagen-Daz is an ice cream company, dumbass.

Reply With Quote
  #5  
Old 02-21-2007, 10:10 AM
Kaze's Avatar
Kaze Offline
Elite Trainer (Level 1)
 
Join Date: Sep 2006
Location: Indiana
Posts: 1,596
Send a message via AIM to Kaze Send a message via Yahoo to Kaze
Default Re: Review Please! - Also an idea in the first post!

I skimmed it; I'll give a good, long review later. So far, it seems interesting. It's similar to mine, which also involves Shadow Pokemon (including a Shadow Zangoose that everyone loves <3). XD

Anyway, I'll either post again or edit this post with a review added.
__________________
Reply With Quote
  #6  
Old 02-21-2007, 05:51 PM
TheStoneRegisteel Offline
 
Join Date: Feb 2007
Location: New Bark Town
Posts: 205
Default Re: Review Please! - Also an idea in the first post!

Quote:
Originally Posted by Hoshika View Post
I said "terse", not "tense". Terse is when something goes along too shortly.
Did you? I know what terse means, BTW.

Glad you like it, KM. I'll finish the first chapter today or tomorrow...
Reply With Quote
Reply


Thread Tools

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off

Forum Jump


All times are GMT. The time now is 08:22 AM.


Powered by vBulletin® Version 3.8.7
Copyright ©2000 - 2014, vBulletin Solutions, Inc.
Style Design: AlienSector.com