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Old 01-30-2007, 08:04 PM
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Default pokemon the adventure through terow

"honey wake up!"delia shouted upstairs

"five more minutes!"ash sad exahsted.

"no ash now!"delia screached

"coming!"ash said
a boy with messy black hair roose up from his bed and started to get dressed.he put on his white long sleeved shirt with a collar,his baggy blue jeans,and his red vest with a yellow stripe going across it.
the boy walked down stairs to see a woman in her late thirtys with a pink dress shirt,blue jean skirt, and her red hair in a pony tail.

"awwwwwwwwww my little boy is going on another journey with his girl friend again1"delia said with delight.

"mom May is not my girl friend!"ash said angrily.

"i never said May was your girl friend."delia said with a giggle.

about 8:30 am they were on the porch.

"by mom!"ash said waving his hand.

"pika pi!"pikachu said waving his hand too.

"by son by pikachu!"delia said sadly.

"Come on pikachu let's race!"ash said happily.

"pika pikachu!"pikachu said delighted.
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im going to wait till i get a replie and then ill start the new chapter
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Old 01-30-2007, 08:44 PM
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I'm sorry to say this is not even really long enough for a chapter, many things need work, but first, for the love of pika, use Caplock!:) Please? Also, this is your same story after I ran it though spell check which took only a moment to do. Fics written it the reply box are looked down upon...
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"Honey wake up!"Delia shouted upstairs

"Five more minutes!"Ash said exhausted.

"No ash now!"Delia stretched

"Coming!"Ash said
A boy with messy black hair rose up from his bed and started to get dressed. he put on his white long sleeved shirt with a collar,his baggy blue jeans,and his red vest with a yellow stripe going across it.The boy walked down stairs to see a woman in her late thirties with a pink dress shirt,blue jean skirt, and her red hair in a pony tail.

"Awwwwwwwwww my little boy is going on another journey with his girl friend again1"Delia said with delight.

"Mom May is not my girl friend!"Ash said angrily.

"I never said May was your girl friend."Delia said with a giggle.
Around 8:30 am they were on the porch.

"Bye mom!"Ash said waving his hand.

"Pika pi!"Pikachu said waving his hand too.

"Bye son bye Pikachu!"Delia said sadly.

"Come on pikachu let's race!"Ash said happily.

"Pika pikachu!"Pikachu said delighted.
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Old 01-30-2007, 09:14 PM
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i'll take that and leave
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Old 01-30-2007, 09:53 PM
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There is no reason to give up, just keep working on writing :)
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Old 01-30-2007, 10:21 PM
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well i think im going to ask people for ideas so if you have a character in your head ill be glad to put it in.
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well i think im going to ask people for ideas so if you have a character in your head ill be glad to put it in.
That's okay, one of the best parts of writing a fic is making up your own characters :)
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Old 02-02-2007, 09:34 PM
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part 2!yYAYAYAYAY

BEEP!BEEP!BEEP!THE ALARM RANG SAYING IT WAS 7:30

"Not now!"a young black hair girl mouned.

"Madison get up!"a woman in her 20s yelled up stairs.

"Ok mom im coming!"madison replied with a yell.so she put on her blue dress shirt.blue and balck shirt,and the put on her pink vest with a pokeball design on it.

"Honey your going to be late!"her mom yelled.

"Coming!"madison yelled sarcasticly.she ran down stairs grabbed her breakfast and ate it quickly.

"Bye mom!"madison yelled puting her black belt with a cell phone case on it,she put her white bogun with a blue and pink pokeball design on it.

"Honey here is your backpack."madison's mom said handing her the yellow and orange fany pack.

"Thanks mom bye!"madison said running out the door.

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"Um is this professor.maple's lab?"madison asked the assistant.

"Yes im joe prof.maple's assistant.

"Hi i'm madison i'm here to get my first pokemon."she replied.

"Im sorry but prof.maple is out in the field doing work so you can go find her to get your first pokemon.

"Ok thanks bye!"madison said.

so she got on her bike and started to search in the woods.suddenly a boy jumped out of the woods chasing after a pikachu.

"Pikachu what are you doing?"the boy said with his rough and childish voice.the pikachu came up to madison and jumped on to her shoulder.

"Um sorry about that im ash!"the boy said pulling out his hand.

"Hi im madison you can call me madi."she said shacking ash's hand.

"Do you know were prof. maple is?"madison asked ash.

"No I was just looking for her."ash said.

"hello!"a woman with dark green hair said."Im professor maple and it is nice to meet you.

"Hi im Ash from Pallet town!" ash said.

"Hi im Madison from Tona town!"madison said.

"Oh madison so your getting your first pokemon today?"prof.maple asked.

"Yes that would be me."madison replied.

"wow your getting you first pokemon!"ash said with delight.






to be continued......................................... ...
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Old 02-03-2007, 01:54 AM
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dang it double post any way here are some episode titles


3.the choice!fireball vs. pikachu

4.the ever lasting brock

5.the bird that sees all!little bird
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"Madison get up!"a woman in her 20s yelled up stairs.
I think that you should specify that she's at least in her late twenties. Becase if she was 20, she would have been 10 when Madison was born. 26 at the earliest, so be a bit more specific so you don't conjure up disturbing images such as a pregnant ten year old.

Also, try to work on correct punctuation for you dialogue.

Let's take a simple phrase:

"Wow" Ash said.

It should be this:

"Wow," Ash said.
"Wow!" Ash exclaimed.
"Wow?" Ash questioned.
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Old 02-04-2007, 05:22 AM
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but does any one like it?





and i'll work on it i was never good at writing
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Old 02-04-2007, 03:13 PM
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Default Re: pokemon the adventure through terow

Hey, that's okay that your not good now. I wasn't good at all a year ago, and now I'm one of the better writers on this forum. It just takes practice.

Just think before you post if everything makes logical sense.
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