I'll review this because I'm in a reviewing mood. Okay, it's more like suggesting something quickly.
Spelling, grammar, quotation marks, description!
Although you provide descriptions of the trainers beforehand, it would be best to lengthen your story if you added them into it. The worst thing about it right now is quotation marks and spacing. When someone speaks, it should be surrounded by "quotations". And, when another person speaks, it's a whole new line. For instance:
Hey guys! shouted Dash. It's time to go!!! Okay...replied Monica and Ben. hehe..It's the twerps! said Jessie
This should be like this. Notice the difference; it's a lot more readable.
"Hey guys!" shouted Dash. "It's time to go!!!"
"Okay..." replied Monica and Ben.
"Hehe..It's the twerps!" said Jessie.
Now, from there out I couldn't understand who was speaking. Also, you need to describe more about what's happening...after you check your story in Microsoft Word for errors. For instance, why
are they going? It doesn't explain it.
Most importantly, you need to use the quotations and use another line when someone new speaks. This may work if you're writing it as a script, but not an all-out story. First impressions are very important, and if it's more readable, more people will be willing to read it. ^_^