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Old 04-19-2004, 07:14 PM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Evanna
This is rather short... But it means everything to me ;p

You kept me blind with one word:
Friend
I liked you so bad it hurt
But my friends opened my eyes
They unmasked all of your lies...
Now it's over, it passed
The good thing about friends is...

The memory that forever lasts.
Special, not really a poem but more special, very nice ^-^ !!! *sticks thumb up*
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Old 04-28-2004, 06:49 AM
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meh, just something ive been working on

Icarian Dreams

swoon to the divine beat
waxy wings can hold you now
above the indignities
flighty feet unbound

eyes alight
her presence flashes within them
rustic gateways give way
to flights of fancy

a proud indignation
glory days
waft away

prosperity, wealth all but an illusion
fading as spirits do
no reconcilition
no requiem sung for the beloved

now boast of pridefulness
sins of the hypocrisy
are of no condemnation
as you may fly to the sun
and nary a wing will you burn

rest
rest has come at last
and of what once was dreamt now dreams
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Old 05-04-2004, 03:42 PM
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Okay, i never have writed a poem before, this one just 'slipped' in to my mind... suddenly, so i REALLY need comment, thx :)

An existence to read…

If your existence would be a book,
Your eyes would be the pages
And your soul the eager letters
The cover your beauty and shine
Then the description would be your thoughts
And if the life that you live would be
Somebody that reads you
Then just imagine if nobody opens your mind
And if nobody ever took care
Then we would just be nothing more
Be nothing more then a book…

- Ruben V.


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Old 05-04-2004, 09:12 PM
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"If your existence would be a book,"

-hmm, try not to be so direct, take this part out and change the second line to something like this:
Your eyes, the pages...

see what im thinking is be less direct in your metaphor, make the reader think about what he/she is reading and leave it for intepretation

I did some editing on my last poem , tell me which you think is better..

Oh, to soar unbound
beyond the problems that plague the earth
on waxen wings...
to reach the heavens; to touch the sun;
survive to soar again

eyes alight,
for gaea burns strong within them;
the glare, the rusts
that held me fast, give way
to flights of fancy....

a proud indignation,
glory days,
waft away.

prosperity, wealth all but an illusion,
fading as spirits do;
no reconciliation, no requiem sung for the beloved.

Now boast of pridefulness;
sins of the hypocrisy do not condemn.
rest.
rest has come at last;
and what was once dreamt, now dreams.
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Old 05-07-2004, 08:46 PM
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Finglonger- Thank you for your help, i like your poems very much and that is why i followed your advice, here is my 'new' version, but i dont have a tittle yet...

You would be nothing more

Your eyes are the pages
That holds letters of the soul
As your beauty shines, the cover appears
And thoughts equalise description
Living once they open deep secrets
Revealing all that is hidden inside
Then if it happens, they never do
Your fall will conquer, just wait and see
How the dust as abominable rust
Takes over love and mind
Then the time breaks and points out that,
You would be nothing more
Nothing more as a dusty old book…


PS: Pleas give me your comment, thank you !

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Old 05-26-2004, 07:51 PM
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Sorry for the bump, but:



The Chalk Figure.


Tires squeal in the night
The wind tells of a deadly plight.
The victim’s feet pound the ground
He jumps and gasps at every sound.

The car stops.

The unfortunate man he hides behind,
An abandoned pickup rusted with time.
The gravel crunching step by step
The culprit with his killer pet.
The truck doors open.
He tries to run
But his life ends at the hands of a gun.

Why?

It is a terrifying tale of crime,
That is expressed inside this rhyme
It’s a disturbing thing to come to mind,
And the worse part is its real.

Authors note: This is a poem describing the ghastly deed that is murder. It is also a warning. These things happen every minute.
Its a scary thought.
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