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Old 05-20-2012, 01:31 AM
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Default . t o | z a n a r k a n d . [poem gallery]

So I've decided to set up some of my poetry, since I've improved in the past who-knows-how-many years I've made a gallery like this. Hope you all enjoy it and find it worth your time. Most of these were written after a break-up from two months ago (one that was not at all willing on either sides), when my emotions were about as stable as... well, let's just say that my emotions were very unstable. They were swinging more than a pole dancer.

Enjoy. Feel free to ask me any question you have, no matter how personal it may be. I'm sure by the end of reading this you will be curious about several things, so feel free to post here with any question you have.

. T A B L E / C H A I R | O F | C O N T E N T S .
. b l u e . | [click]
. g o l d . | [click]
. r e d . |[click]
. e p i p h a n i e s . | [click]
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[12:38:59 AM] GallantlyGlaceon: ...So how do we do this? XD
[12:39:20 AM] Sight of the Stars: it's nothing really big, just usually a note in your sig that's all like 'paired with soandso'
[12:39:44 AM] Sight of the Stars: just be like "SIGHT OF THE STARZ IS MAH BIZNITCH"
[12:39:57 AM] GallantlyGlaceon: XDDD
[12:39:59 AM] Sight of the Stars: and I'll be like "GALLANTLYGLACEON IS MAH HOE."

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Old 05-20-2012, 01:34 AM
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. b l u e .

I still love you, my beautiful, my dear,
and my heart still leaps when you are near.
My mind still races when your skin brushes mine,
and theyíre always moments I wish I could freeze in time.

At times your arm will curl around me
and I feel for a moment like Iím free.
Then itís like you remember what we had,
and when your arm drops, Iím left feeling sad.

Night after night, you haunt my dreams;
Kissing, flirting, and everything else, it seems.
I awake to find my hands gripping empty air,
where in my dreams they had been sweeping, from your face, your dark hair.

I cannot seem to get over you
no matter what I try to do.
I fake a smile, for your sake.
through every pleasant dream from which I wake.

I still love you, my beautiful, my dear,
though you are the reason for many a tear.
Even though I know that, without a doubt,
this whole thing is killing me, from the inside out.
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[12:38:59 AM] GallantlyGlaceon: ...So how do we do this? XD
[12:39:20 AM] Sight of the Stars: it's nothing really big, just usually a note in your sig that's all like 'paired with soandso'
[12:39:44 AM] Sight of the Stars: just be like "SIGHT OF THE STARZ IS MAH BIZNITCH"
[12:39:57 AM] GallantlyGlaceon: XDDD
[12:39:59 AM] Sight of the Stars: and I'll be like "GALLANTLYGLACEON IS MAH HOE."
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Old 05-20-2012, 01:36 AM
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. g o l d .

When I was younger, I was always told
I can be whatever I wanted, and on this idea I was sold.
A doctor, a lawyer, an artist, a vet.
Or even a missionary, to help those that I met.
Never once did I think of the path I am now set.

But it's not a career where I get paid
but a position in it and I would consider my life made.
Itís not a teacher, itís not President,
but such a duty would be god-sent.
It is toward this job, my mind is bent.

It is a laid-back occupation
thatís frowned up in some parts of the nation,
but that doesnít keep me from wishing
that I had back what Iíve been missing;
the flirting, the kissing.

One day, Iíll whisk you away to a different land;
Iíll take you away from this town, please understand.
Never to return,
and from our hardships we shall learn,
where for each other we shall not have to yearn.

Your wife, mídear,
I want to be it.
And I only wish for you to see it.

Iíll care for you when youíre sick,
and if you fall Iíll catch you quick.
Iíll always be here for you
no matter what you do;
just call and Iíll come to.

Just take my hand in marriage
and Iíll readily say ĎI doí.

Ďtil death do us part,
but Iíll always know from the start
that death wonít be enough
to sever from you, my heart.
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[12:38:59 AM] GallantlyGlaceon: ...So how do we do this? XD
[12:39:20 AM] Sight of the Stars: it's nothing really big, just usually a note in your sig that's all like 'paired with soandso'
[12:39:44 AM] Sight of the Stars: just be like "SIGHT OF THE STARZ IS MAH BIZNITCH"
[12:39:57 AM] GallantlyGlaceon: XDDD
[12:39:59 AM] Sight of the Stars: and I'll be like "GALLANTLYGLACEON IS MAH HOE."
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Old 05-20-2012, 01:37 AM
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. r e d .

How can you fall in love with a person such as I?
When everything I do results in a teary eye?
Why have you brought such a task upon yourself?
When your feelings will only be left to rot on a dusty shelf?

We both lust for what we cannot own,
And for our crippling mistakes we cannot atone.
You are so wonderful, so amazing
My heart, my dear, your words are razing.

But I’m so horrible, so complex;
Loving me is like loving a hex.
I’m neurotic, idiotic,
And maybe even psychotic.

Of all of the people you could have fallen for
Why did you fall for me, when someone else you could adore?
I wish you had never fallen in love with me
To prevent the troubles I will inevitably cause you, to some degree.

Are you reading this with a now-broken heart?
Or did I break it from the start?
You’ve gone through much more pain than I,
My beautiful, my sweet, my loving ally.
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[12:38:59 AM] GallantlyGlaceon: ...So how do we do this? XD
[12:39:20 AM] Sight of the Stars: it's nothing really big, just usually a note in your sig that's all like 'paired with soandso'
[12:39:44 AM] Sight of the Stars: just be like "SIGHT OF THE STARZ IS MAH BIZNITCH"
[12:39:57 AM] GallantlyGlaceon: XDDD
[12:39:59 AM] Sight of the Stars: and I'll be like "GALLANTLYGLACEON IS MAH HOE."
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Old 05-20-2012, 01:39 AM
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. e p i p h a n i e s .
a less personal variation of . g o l d .

When I was younger, I was always told
I could be whatever I wanted, and on this idea I was sold.
A doctor, a lawyer, an artist, a vet.
Or even a missionary, to help those that I met.
Not even thinking of the path I was really set.

Their empty promises left me dreaming
And with ideas of the future, my mind was teeming.
Do you remember the things they told you?
You drew your future, thinking you knew,
That what you were told was undoubtedly true.

As I grew older
My ideas began to smolder,
And my hopes began to dwindle.
They frayed and faltered, turning to kindle;
Turning to needles for which I had no thimble.

Think of the children that play on the streets,
The homeless that sit on the city park’s seats.
The first, for their future, have plenty of hope
The latter have reality, and with it they must cope,
Their dreams having stumbled on a slippery slope.

But you know, I’m quite tired of these rhymes.
These rants, these confessions, these depressing lines.
They’re raging infernos, spreading across the page;
Deadly poison, headed for the rib cage.
Leaving the mind cold and harsh like an ice age.

Look ahead, my enemies, my friends.
Keep in mind where youdr path bends,
And keep your future bright.
Grow older and roll in your delight
That to secure your future, you put up a fight.

Follow your dreams, and in them stand firm.
Stomp on them not like some disgusting worm.
Forget your past, your future is ahead;
It’s something to look forward to, not to dread.
Keep your hopes on something stronger than a thread.
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[12:38:59 AM] GallantlyGlaceon: ...So how do we do this? XD
[12:39:20 AM] Sight of the Stars: it's nothing really big, just usually a note in your sig that's all like 'paired with soandso'
[12:39:44 AM] Sight of the Stars: just be like "SIGHT OF THE STARZ IS MAH BIZNITCH"
[12:39:57 AM] GallantlyGlaceon: XDDD
[12:39:59 AM] Sight of the Stars: and I'll be like "GALLANTLYGLACEON IS MAH HOE."
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Old 05-28-2012, 02:55 AM
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Default Re: . t o | z a n a r k a n d . [poem gallery]

For the most part, I really like them, but sometimes the flow is a little hiccupped because there are too many words and it doesn't fit, and the syllables don't fit. D: I'll elaborate.

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When I was younger, I was always told
I can be whatever I wanted, and on this idea I was sold.
A doctor, a lawyer, an artist, a vet.
Or even a missionary, to help those that I met.
Never once did I think of the path I am now set.
So things like this, with lotsa syllables and varying lengths for each line, could be made smoother so they flowed better by altering the lines to have the same amount - or similar - syllables. Such as:
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When I was younger, I was always told
I could be what I wanted, and on this was sold.
A doctor, a lawyer, an artist, a vet.
Or even a missionary, to help those that I met.
Not once did I think of the path that's now set.
I dunno, something like that. xD I guess it's also how you say it that helps it flow.

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It is a laid-back occupation
that’s frowned up in some parts of the nation,
but that doesn’t keep me from wishing
that I had back what I’ve been missing;
the flirting, the kissing.
The second line of this really does seem out of place and far too long. D: But I can't think of a way to fix it. Dx

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‘til death do us part,
but I’ll always know from the start
that death won’t be enough
to sever from you, my heart.
The part comma doesn't need to be there. c:

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Think of the children that play on the streets,
The homeless that sit on the city park’s seats.
The first, for their future, have plenty of hope
The latter have reality, and with it they must cope,
Their dreams having stumbled on a slippery slope.
I like this one the most, I think. It's really nicely constructed and it flows well. I also like the wording! Only, on the third line, I would get rid of "they."

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Look ahead, my enemies, my friends.
Keep in mind where youdr path bends,
And keep your future bright.
Grow older and roll in your delight
That to secure your future, you put up a fight.
That should be your. xD

But yeah. Apart from that they're pretty good! I think the last one is my favourite. ^^ Following your dreams is certainly a good plan.

Good luck with future poems! 8D Keep writing 'em!

~GS.
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Old 05-28-2012, 04:43 AM
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Default Re: . t o | z a n a r k a n d . [poem gallery]

Thank you very much for the critiques. <3 I may do voice recordings of each one day, so everyone knows how the flow goes. It all sounds good to me when I write it, though I'll have to be careful!

I think what bothers me with poetry is the way it punches sentence structure in the face sometimes. XDDD

Thank you, love. <3
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[12:38:59 AM] GallantlyGlaceon: ...So how do we do this? XD
[12:39:20 AM] Sight of the Stars: it's nothing really big, just usually a note in your sig that's all like 'paired with soandso'
[12:39:44 AM] Sight of the Stars: just be like "SIGHT OF THE STARZ IS MAH BIZNITCH"
[12:39:57 AM] GallantlyGlaceon: XDDD
[12:39:59 AM] Sight of the Stars: and I'll be like "GALLANTLYGLACEON IS MAH HOE."
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Old 05-29-2012, 04:52 PM
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No worries! :D And yes, that will indeed be a good idea. I know how that feels. xD

Yep. xD Like songs too. It can be a pain.

No worries! 8D I'm glad I actually got around to doing it. xD

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