[Other] My word is only as good as the ink that supports it (tust's random poetry)

[Judge Dredd]

I’ve never considered myself a poet. However I love writing short stories and working on ideas for screen plays. I’ve always looked at poets the same way I look at the freestyle rappers. They both have the power to manipulate words and make them flow together in such a way that you can’t help but be impressed.
At my job , I work around a lot of young poets. I believe that one’s environment influences them sometimes in ways that they didn’t expect. On this page I’m going to post some of the poems that I’ve written over the last couple of years. I’d like to thank Temporal Diamond because your thread gave me the inspiration to finally post some of my stuff.

I'm going to be adding more peoms as time goes on.


Poetry Index
V
Know your name
Track 1 (Part 1)





V

Your something that has grown on me
But at first I couldn’t see
Its the little moments here and there
A smile, a look, long brown hair
It make me smile, it makes me think
For that instance I will not blink,
I hold that image in my head
Until it is replaced again

It’s a place in my heart
A laugh, a smile, a sweet remark
Even if she could replace
She hardly has your heart or grace,
Wrapped inside blue so bright, it inspires the sun to fight the night
Although the whole world can see,
Only your smile matters to me.
Chains that sparkle and watchs that glow
Attract a certain kind of so and so
Your intention is good and very sweet
For that reason blue patterned shoes line my feet
I guess what im trying to say,
As long as you’re here, I will stay

To the number count of ones and twos
You sway to beat the from your hips to your shoes
I try to keep up, I try to dance
But with half the experience, I don’t stand half the chance
I use my own weapons of choice
To win your heart and hear your voice
Like a Roman archer with a Lance
I throw words, and smiles, to fake romance
If one thing should pierce your heart
And something shall one day
It won't be smile I have on display
It won't be the pocket monster that I command
It won't even be the fancy watch I wear on my hand
It won't be my eventul masterey of dance
It won't be a Spanish word spoke in romance
It will be the real me, and not my fool
The real me, and hes pretty cool





Know Your Name

Never will I know your name
But in my heart you will remain.
Like the imprint on a silhouette
image and thoughts are tattooed to my chest
I think of you both day and night,
Things went wrong, we weren't right
You're never going to be to blame
For our actions which were insane
All day long I stare in space
Even in the dark nothingness I see a face
A face to me that is unclear
A face to me that won't be near
I chase the images through my mind
Traces of you is all I find
You never were, you never will
Or at least that was the promise from the pill
It messed this up and so did we
Because of this I can’t be free.

[Gem N Ems]

Originally Posted by The Unreal Shadow Tracker

V

Your (You're) something that has grown on me
But at first I couldn’t see
Its (It's) the little moments here and there
A smile, a look, long brown hair
It make (makes) me smile, it makes me think
For that instance I will not blink,
I hold that image in my head
Until it is replaced again

It’s a place in my heart
A laugh, a smile, a sweet remark
Even if she could replace
She hardly has your heart or your (would be better left out) grace,
Wrapped inside blue so bright, it inspires the sun to fight the night
Although the whole world can see,
Only your smile matters to me.
Chains that sparkle and watchs (watches) that glow
Attract a certain kind of so and so
Your intention (intentions, or change 'are' to 'is') are good and very sweet
For that reason blue patterned shoes line my feet
I guess what im (I'm) trying to say,
As long as you’re here, I will stay.

To the number count of ones and twos
You sway to beat the from your hips to your shoes
I try to keep up, I try to dance
But with half the experience, I don’t stand half the chance
I use my own weapons of choice
To win your heart and hear your voice
Like a roman (Roman - nouns are capitalised) archer with a lance
I throw words, and smiles, to fake romance
If one thing should pierce your heart
And something shall one day
It wont (won't) be smile I have on display
It wont (won't) be the pocket monster that I command
It wont (won't) even be the fancy watch I wear on my hand
It wont (won't) be my eventul (eventful) masterey (mastery) of dance
It wont (won't) be a Spanish word spoke (spoken) in romance
It will be the real me, and not my fool
The real me, and hes (he's) pretty cool

Originally Posted by The Unreal Shadow Tracker

Know Your Name

Never will I know your name
But in my heart you will remain.
Like the imprint on a silhouette
image and thoughts are tattooed to my chest
I think of you both day and night,
Things went wrong, we were’nt (weren't) right
Your (You're)never going to be to blame
For our actions which were insane
All day long I stare in space
Even in the dark nothingniss (nothingness) I see a face
A face to me that is unclear
A face to me that wont (won't) be near
I chase the images through my mind
Traces of you is all I find
You never were, you never will
Or at least that was the promise from the pill
It messed this up and so did we
Because of this I can’t be free.

Typo catching time! 8D

I bolded the parts that need changing for you. Apart from that, not too shabby. Do you use Word? That should pick up basic grammatical errors, but make sure you know the differences between your and you're!
It makes me terribly mad and foaming at the mouth when people get them mixed up. xD ALWAYS use you're when saying "you are". Otherwise it is simply "your".

Keep writing, TUST!

[Judge Dredd]

Originally Posted by Gem N Ems

Typo catching time! 8D

I bolded the parts that need changing for you. Apart from that, not too shabby. Do you use Word? That should pick up basic grammatical errors, but make sure you know the differences between your and you're!
It makes me terribly mad and foaming at the mouth when people get them mixed up. xD ALWAYS use you're when saying "you are". Otherwise it is simply "your".

Keep writing, TUST!

lol to be honest, the printed out copies were edited but i forgot to change the word copy..lol i know the difference between you are and you're LOL. in the future can you send me a pm.

[Lusankya]

Is this is the first poetry since the boards were merged? >_>

[Gem N Ems]

Originally Posted by Lusankya

Is this is the first poetry since the boards were merged? >_>

No, there's been others. Some Mod you are! :P

[Judge Dredd]

Originally Posted by Lusankya

Is this is the first poetry since the boards were merged? >_>

well thanks for the comment ....i guess lol

[Lusankya]

Sorry, I don't really care much for poetry, I wouldn't be able to offer much commentary anyways xD

[Judge Dredd]

Track 1 (part 1)

My music was erased today
The songs I love, have gone away
They were tall and strong and very brave
Through there words, I was enslaved
There intentions now, are still unclear
They made me happy, they made me scared
With a smile in the night, seconds later there be a fight
How could Aventura like The Fray
It didn’t work and they couldn’t stay
I tried to beg, I tried to plea, maybe these words were not meant for me
Will I forget these words in time? Will these words escape my mind ?
I asked them to go, and stay away, for a month until this day.
Until the moon fills the sky, neither will their tempo rise
Their thoughts and feelings will remain, an unheard track inside my brain
Silence now, is all that’s left, like a heavy pressure inside my chest
I know my heart is beating still, its just that life is half the trill
Maybe it was her who took my songs, To this day I can not say.