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Old 10-14-2008, 01:56 PM
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Default (short story) pokemon comedy adventures 1 ash is anyoing!

can some body please lock this!

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Old 10-14-2008, 04:05 PM
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hye missssssssssssssssssty. shut up ash! your sooo anyoing! You know what rhyms with misty, what! hit me! errrrrrrrrr! fine i"ll hit you! smack! owwww! That heart! fine i'll go pick on some one else! i know i'll go pick on paul! hey paullllllll! what do you what DIRTBAG! i prefer to be called ASH! whatever muter muter... leave me alone im trying to catch some pokemon here! dont you already have a team of sixs? so! it doesnt mean i cant catch more pokemon isnt the main saying for pokemon gotta catch em all?! .......okay fine i'll go.... okay im done anyoing todayyy yah.. being anoyying isnt very fun...so to u readers i suggest u stop anyoing anyone if you are,, or you will end up like me a dirtbag wh has ono faith.... ( readers were are not makeing fun of u its a joke) the end, for now...
uhm.
that was.... confusing...
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Old 10-14-2008, 10:52 PM
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Default Re: (short story) pokemon comedy adventures 1 ash is anyoing!

O_O
Um...
ummm...
..wow?
It was..uh *attempts to find nice thing to say as she is too nice*
It was interesting??

*ahem*
*help attempt*
First off.
Welcome to PE2K!
You will shortly be getting a annoying, very colorful, PM from me welcoming you :)

NOW!
Im not going to be mean but, there are several things wrong with this.

One: The Grammar
This would not be classified as a story.
Because there is nothing seperating speach, from actions.
AKA Quotation Marks ("" < Those little guys)
You put them around the words the Character's speak. (like your 1st grade teacher taught you)
Also, this is all speach. A story is not all speach. It has action and descritpion.
This is just a bunch of random speaking parts, which are, sorry to say Poorly written *stabs self in the heart for being mean*

Two: This is not a story
A story has a plot, no matter how short it may be.
This is just Ash walking about annoying people.
A story needs a introduction, middle and ending.
In the introduction, most of the main characters are described and given a history.
In the middle, the base of the action and everything else is written.
At the end is a conclusion of the story.

Now while your enthusiasm is wonderful! yea for fanfic lubbers!
You might want to work on this.
A Fanfic dosent have to be posted all at once. it can be posted Chapter by Chapter.
NOW!
Move on with ya life homie! *owned*
...why am iz so weird??
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Old 10-15-2008, 04:16 PM
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Default Re: (short story) pokemon comedy adventures 1 ash is anyoing!

What?

This is not a story.

This is an incomprehensible mishmash of sentences. If it had any sort of plot whatsoever, it would be about Ask Ketchup annoying people. I lost interest by...*counts* the sixth painfully short sentence.

I'm going to give you a choice. If you want to get the un-sugar coated facts, send me a PM and I'll give it to you. If you don't, okay. Keep on doing what you do and get people annoyed at you.

Giratina, out.
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Old 10-16-2008, 02:51 PM
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O.k
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Old 10-16-2008, 02:51 PM
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odd.
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Old 10-16-2008, 02:52 PM
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make some sense my sista!
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Old 10-16-2008, 02:52 PM
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actually write a story.
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Old 10-16-2008, 02:53 PM
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this doesn't qualify as a fan fic................ZILCH!
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Old 10-16-2008, 03:26 PM
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Default Re: (short story) pokemon comedy adventures 1 ash is anyoing!

... Rogue_Arceus, i am serious, EDIT YOUR BLOODY POST!!!!!!!
you have like 5 one-liners!
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Old 10-17-2008, 05:59 PM
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... Rogue_Arceus, i am serious, EDIT YOUR BLOODY POST!!!!!!!
you have like 5 one-liners!
Quoting for truthfullness. EDIT YOUR ARCEUS-FORSAKEN POSTS!
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