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Old 07-24-2008, 03:16 AM
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Default A Galactic Search

Chapter One

*currently being rewritten*
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Old 07-24-2008, 03:30 AM
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Lets give three cheers, and one cheer more,
For the hardy captain of the Pinafore!
-H.M.S. Pinafore

YAYZ!
I'm insanly happy for you, JE.

Anyways...you did really good for a first begginer, and you will improve. I can't wait to see whats next!
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Old 07-24-2008, 07:30 PM
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You want to make it better. I'll give you the most important writing advice that anyone can ever give.

DESCRIBE!

Your fic was nothing other than speech. The only things you've described are what Jeni's wearing and Umbreon and Espeon. Nothing else.

Edit the chapter. Describe some more. I'll give you more tips.
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Old 07-24-2008, 08:26 PM
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You want to make it better. I'll give you the most important writing advice that anyone can ever give.

DESCRIBE!

Your fic was nothing other than speech. The only things you've described are what Jeni's wearing and Umbreon and Espeon. Nothing else.

Edit the chapter. Describe some more. I'll give you more tips.
Okay. I'll work on that. Thanks.
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Old 07-26-2008, 04:20 PM
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yeah it could be longer but its a good start
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Old 08-14-2008, 05:15 AM
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You want to make it better. I'll give you the most important writing advice that anyone can ever give.

DESCRIBE!

Your fic was nothing other than speech. The only things you've described are what Jeni's wearing and Umbreon and Espeon. Nothing else.

Edit the chapter. Describe some more. I'll give you more tips.
jinxed eevee, you do need to describe more, ex: Umbreon has rings around the tail and ears, and rings on the outside of all four legs. It's okay though, and what happened? No more Chapters?
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Old 08-30-2008, 03:31 AM
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please post more chapters... this is starting to be a good story..
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Old 08-30-2008, 04:21 AM
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please post more chapters... this is starting to be a good story..
And it's getting replies and views. Just work at it, and it'll be good enough.
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Old 08-30-2008, 06:09 AM
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i do hope this continues.. ^^
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Old 09-07-2008, 04:21 AM
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Chapter Two

*to be rewritten*
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Old 09-07-2008, 04:37 AM
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''But you done have to do that. I walked here once, I can just as easily walk back.'' Jeni put in quickly.
One error. Doesn't she mean to say "don't" instead of "done"?

Really good for a second try! Still needs more describing but is geting a lot better! ^^ Keep it up!
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Old 09-07-2008, 05:10 AM
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great chap!!!
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