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Old 05-30-2007, 02:29 AM
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Default Another horrible attempt at a fic... but this time its ZIM!

Kay... i still haven't named it. I'm also somewhat...bad... at fanfics, so... but it would be nice if you read it. I also might edit it, if you spot any screw-ups, that would be nice if you pointed them out to me.

Chapter 1: So it begins...
... I woke up, feeling a slight electric shock. Where was I? My vision was
quite foggy, and I couldn't tell. A while ago I had fallen
asleep, listening to the credits of my favorite TV show, Invader
Zim. From what I could make out now, the area was large
and Dark Purple. It... reminded me of Zim a bit. I also
seemed to feel shorter. As my vision became less and less
foggy, I became more and more nervous and scared. The
Scenery was... familiar. When my vision was fineally
clear, I had too turn my head to make sure I didn't have
my face 1 inch from the TV. ...I seemed too be in an Irken
Birthing facility... I looked around, not knowing whether too
be scared or overjoyed... then I noticed my little green feet.
Noticing them, I looked at my hands. Then I span around to look
at my back. Seeing a Pak on my back, which seemed to be green,
I realized...
That I must be... Irken.
Obviously I was fascinated... but... how did I get this way?
Perhaps... I didn't actually just go to sleep... 'Z?' Popped
into my head. Did I... Did I DIE!? Was this what I was reborn as?
What did my parents think? Or the rest of my family? Were they
worried? Did they know yet?
What was the time there? Were they okay? DO I CARE!? ... A
hole opened underneath me, and I fell into a tube. I was probably
going to the download room too have all the Irken knowledge
downloaded into my Pak. COOL! But... was that where I would
get my Pak encoded with my job too? I was curious about this,
I didn't want too be a food service drone... and I wanted a ship,
So I could go to earth. My old planet, where I had been a human...
Until now.
I fell onto the downloading chair, and was 'Deactivated' for a few
seconds. I'm... not quite sure what happened then... But I DO
know that when I was re-activated, I knew more then I had ever
known... I was filled with great thoughts, I knew things that even
the smartest people on earth had never known. More importantly,
I knew my name. 'Terra'. I was somewhat angry, beacause that
was Spanish for earth (I think...)... but, well, it was okay.

There it is. Umm... comments accepted. I'll write the next chapter soon, I hope.
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Old 05-30-2007, 03:40 AM
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Default Re: Another horrible attempt at a fic... but this time its ZIM!

Good! Your fic is excelent! Also your description is tremendous! I'm not a fan of Zim but, hey this seems like it's worth reading!
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Old 05-30-2007, 04:29 AM
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Default Re: Another horrible attempt at a fic... but this time its ZIM!

good fan fic!I'll keep reading as long as you keep writing!
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Old 05-30-2007, 10:29 PM
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Default Re: Another horrible attempt at a fic... but this time its ZIM!

Ummm... wow. I didn't think i would get so many compliments ^^''
I forgot to write chapter 2 last night, i'll have to do it tonight.
Edit: I finished Chapter 2, ill post it later.
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Old 06-06-2007, 06:39 AM
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Default Re: Another horrible attempt at a fic... but this time its ZIM!

Here it is... the long awaited chapter 2!

Chapter 2: The years below

A voice, which I guessed was the computer, said,
"Welcome to life Irken Child. What is your name?".
"Terra." I replied, in a high pitched voice that was
nothing like my own. A robotic arm picked me up
and placed me on the ground. A small, very cute
Smeet fell into the downloading chair, It looked at
me with its huge green eyes shining with happiness
and curiosity. It was very cute. I walked out of
the room, too find...
The underground Irken Military training facility. It
was HUGE! I walked around with much curiosity, I
had never seen THIS place before...

~5 years later...~

I walked over to the place where I always go, everyday,
for the past 5 years. Oh so long ago had I been born
as an Irken. But i still remembered that I was Human.
I still knew that I had too get to earth somehow...
But how...
I was now older, but still very short (but most Irkens
were...) , I looked almost exactly like Zim, with dark
pink eyes, and such, with the few differences being
that I was a girl, and I had wavy lines on my shirt
instead of just straight ones. I sat down in the same
chair that I always sat in, put on my virtual reality
military training helmet, like always. I wanted some
action... I didn't always want too do the same thing.
But I stayed. I wanted too study, I wanted too get
into the Military so I could get my own ship... perhaps
blow up some stuff... and, most importantly...
To go back to Earth.

~5 more years later...~

I had finally finished my training. I was going too
Devastis, on a Space bus... thingy. I was amazed.
I looked out the window, and could see the large
expanse of space... The Galaxies and Stars, everything
I had always wanted too see back in the days...
We arrived at Devastis, Where I would take the test
Too get into the Irken Military... I hoped that I would
pass.... I started too get nervous. I stood in line,
Waiting.. and Waiting......

hope you guys like it 8)
Thats not even how I originally wrote it ^^""
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this is an awesome fanfic!!!! and this is bloody gir!
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