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Old 06-23-2007, 11:07 PM
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Default Linkin park like song i wrote

this song is the same genre and similar to linkin park cos thats were i got my inspiration,
this took me about 10-15 mins to write so im not expecting excelent feedback
just tell us wat you think of its cos im personaly quite happy with it

Go
I saw you there,
Lyin on the floor
Wondering what,
You were lyin there for.
just wanted to help
Couldn’t leave you there
But now that ur fine
U just follow me everywere

(chorus)
Why cant you
Go
Leave me alone now just go
home
why do you always follow
me
all I did was help you
once
didn’t want you relying on
me


I wake up in the morning
ur standing over me
walking through the town
ur always behind me
what do you want
just leave me alone
get on with ur life
and give me back mine

(chorus)

(Instrumental solo)


Why
did you have to stay
You might hav been alright
If you’d gone away
But you wouldn’t stop
then I jumped
And now your dead
Lyin next to me

(chorusx2) (Fin)
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Old 06-24-2007, 03:10 AM
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Default Re: Linkin park like song i wrote

Sounds like Disturbed in my head, but less lyrical. It's a nice thought, but a rude and gruesome song, I think Linkin Park is deeper.
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Old 06-24-2007, 03:14 AM
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Default Re: Linkin park like song i wrote

I'm gonna have to agree with Matt on this one. While it is a nice song, it could use some more empathy and less anger.
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Old 06-24-2007, 03:19 AM
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Default Re: Linkin park like song i wrote

As a general rule of thumb, I don't take lyrics or poetry seriously when the author uses "U" in place of "you" and "ur" in place of "you're" or "your"

thats all
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Old 06-24-2007, 03:20 AM
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Default Re: Linkin park like song i wrote

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As a general rule of thumb, I don't take lyrics or poetry seriously when the author uses "U" in place of "you" and "ur" in place of "you're" or "your"

thats all
It was probably just to make typing go faster for him. But I do agree.
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