A young girl name Oshe wakes up and is getting a her first Pokemon.
Not a bad introduction but you didn't tell us much about Oshe, what she looked like, what she was wearing or what her house looked like. This part is a bit too short to my likings.
A young girl named Oshe wakes up to recieve her starter Pokemon today at the Pokemon Lab nearest to where she lives. She picks Azumarill as her starter and wonders off into the Forest. She gets tired from riding her bike and decides to walk, but she encounters a Poochyena and battles it.
The plot isn't bad but a bit more length could do, also instead of just saying she was wondering around you could tell us about the scenery ect.
Well, the grammar is actually pretty good on your story, maybe because as there wasn't much length in it. The only part i could find wrong was this:
'Have a good adventure and be careful." he said. Oshe nodded her head and went on.
You forgot to put a speech mark.
Well I couldn't seeany detail here at all, sorry. If you added more detail to the story it would make the length go higher.
The Battle was only 3 attacks and I would of liked it to be more, a Poochyena would probally be able to defeat a Azumarill.
Not enough you only had 2k of characters here and for a Poochyena you need 5-10k, I know this is your first story but still it isn't enough.
This story is missing a longer battle and some more detail. If you added those in you could of made it over the length requirement and I would of given the Poochyena to you. Im sorry to say Poochyena NOT Captured
. Add a longer battle and some detail and i will be happy to re-grade.