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Old 04-10-2007, 08:18 PM
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But Abra is completely defenseless, whereas Bagon is one of the most powerful Pokemon at a basic level, and evolves into a pseudo-uber. We have told you multiple times what is wrong in both of your threads, but you refuse to listen, and choose to argue and make excuses instead. And stop using the Canadian League for defending yourself; it's the greatest fic ever written and it doesn't determine how everything else should be written.
hey salamance toatly falls to ice pokemon wich are going to be the realy importain battles in the story
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It's a ******* uber! I don't care if it's weak to Ice types, because there really aren't that many in the games. Neo just told you to focus on the story in general, instead of the tiny little things people throw in as an extra. Focus on the entire story, not one thing people say. Also, you continue to argue instead of taking help, so I'm fed up with attempting to help. I won't even post how to improve, I'll just insult the fic now, if you're just going to argue.

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Old 04-10-2007, 08:24 PM
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hey salamance toatly falls to ice pokemon wich are going to be the realy importain battles in the story
Last call, since it really seems the message we've repeated to you is being completely ignored.

Fix the story before you move on with anything else.

Right now, you have many people who want to see what you do have fixed and edited to meet the expectations and standards of this forum. Sorry, but if you continue ignoring it, the whole story gets a lock. No one is going to say "Wow, great story, keep going!" until it really deserves it, and honestly, this doesn't.

So fix it now before thinking what your next chapter is going to be like.
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And one more thing, do you realize that the length of my average posts in this thread are as long as your chapter?
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Old 04-10-2007, 08:26 PM
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well if you do that i will report you anyway alakzam is not weak and this is not a game it is a story featureing evele ice trainers and dragon masters
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Old 04-10-2007, 08:27 PM
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You know what, screw it. You're not listening to anything anyone posts, so forget you. Neo, please just lock this.
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well if you do that i will report you anyway alakzam is not weak and this is not a game it is a story featureing evele ice trainers and dragon masters
Go ahead and report him, and I'll tell the entire moderator staff to ignore it. Honestly, I agree with him, your lack of cooperation is causing everyone else to lose their patience.

Second, if you really wanted your character to have a Dragon Pokemon in the end, Trapinch would have been the better starter choice, as its way more common and becomes a Flygon in the end. After that build on it, but right now, what you have is pretty unorganized.

So please, stop the debating and just get working on your story. People aren't going to accept lower than accepted standard, and we've already shown you several ways to improve.
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well if you do that i will report you anyway alakzam is not weak and this is not a game it is a story featureing evele ice trainers and dragon masters
And we got told that... when, may I ask?!

Stuff Salamence being weak against Ice types. I agree with Neo and LZ.

Also, if there are going to be loads of Ice Trainers, you'll lose. Blam. And this story is cliched. Which means your character would win. But it won't. <___<

So this fic is screwed. End of story.
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Old 04-10-2007, 09:03 PM
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ok if you give me any problems i will fix them
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You're not getting this. Look at all of our posts in both of your preview threads, for power of Hoenn and this one, look in this thread too, and then you will see what we told you to fix. Apparently you didn't read anything we said.
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Old 04-10-2007, 09:11 PM
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You're not getting this. Look at all of our posts in both of your preview threads, for power of Hoenn and this one, look in this thread too, and then you will see what we told you to fix. Apparently you didn't read anything we said.
i meant like gramer mistakes and why take a ground pokemon she want to cary on the family traditon because her father is the best dragon pokemon trainer he is drake
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Old 04-10-2007, 09:15 PM
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She would take a ground Pokemon because it evolves into a Dragon type. You also never said that her father was Drake before and he is also not a Dragon trainer. You would pretty much have to re-write the whole thing to get rid of grammar mistakes. When writing fics, you can't have background information about your character, not say anything, and expect everyone to know.
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Old 04-10-2007, 09:39 PM
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Sorry, but you're obviously not listening to anything we say, so here it is. We told you what was wrong, you ignored it, so its clear you don't care enough about the appearance of this story to do anything to improve it.

And if you want it reopened, PM me the chapter, and I'll decide if its good enough to be reopened. Until then, we've given you more than enough advice, its your choice if you want to follow it.

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