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Old 09-05-2012, 03:47 AM
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Default Re: Yes, Another Nuzlocke Story (White)

Originally Posted by Typhlosion Explosion View Post
I think you were starting a thought and then went off track. ^^;

You may have meant to say, "So, it was Quinn's tenth birthday, as always in the Pokemon world, he would be eligible to receive is first Pokemon."

Also, be sure never to begin a sentence with "So" or "And"!

I'm not sure if this is grammatically correct. Maybe you could've used, "I didn't know any kind of Void" or, "I didn't know anyone named Void".

Otherwise, the story started off great! Good job my little writer! XD
Thanks for the tips, Bro. Also, I think I was feeling...Texan, would it be, going with "He didn't know no Void."

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