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Old 10-24-2011, 07:09 AM
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Default Re: Diamonds of Poetries Etched in Time

Originally Posted by Max0596 View Post
I haven't watched/read much HP, so I really don't know what it's about.

"On cue, the aerial actors unfurls their wings." I might be wrong here, but shouldn't it just be unfurl? I've been wrong before, so I wouldn't doubt it's nothing.

But other than that, I thik it's pretty solid, but could use a bit more...flow.

7.75/10 (because I can, and it was in between 7.5 and 8.)

Keep 'em coming!

Side note: Nice new title for the thread!
Actually you are right. xD Yeah I guess the flow wasn't really there here, it was meant to be a riddle at first, but riddles -are- poems in a way. :D

Lol, thanks a lot~

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