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Old 10-15-2011, 07:13 AM
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Default Re: Diamond's Poetry

Also good. I'm one of those people who will post on everything if I post once, so expect me to be here everytime you post a new one XD

But for some reason, maybe the word 'somewhere' paired with 'there was' damage the flow, but other then that, no problems! Word choice really makes or breaks 'flow' or 'rhythm', and those things are really important in poetry. I lie how this one has a pokemon feel to it, and it was never really explained how Roar of Time works in the games. Though it is a beautiful looking attack, among the top of my favorite looking ones.

Keep it up!

I should rate each one...
Fatal Rhyme-8/10
Roar of Time-8/10
And I give you five stars, my friend.

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