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Old 10-14-2011, 06:08 PM
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Default Re: Diamond's Poetry

I think you're a decent poet. Just try to make it short and sweet, "he did not know later on he was to die" seemed a bit odd, could have been changed to "he did not know he was to die" or "he did not know he was soon to die" or something. Other then that, it seems you have a range of different poem styles, and I hope to see more. We absolutely don't have enough here.
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