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Old 02-25-2011, 06:06 PM
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Default Re: What do u think of my fan fic at the moment any advice taken and used as much as

During the conversations, I would suggest describing the surroundings, or better yet, describing the facial expressions or tones of the voice to give it a more life-like feeling. I would also tell you to stop as this is actually pretty long. This would make a good first chapter in a few more sentences. I would also be on the lookout, some of the mods may mistake this for posting in the wrong section. Other than that, great! Hope you enjoy writing as much as I do.
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