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Old 12-02-2009, 03:57 AM
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Default Re: URPG Stories Chat & Feedback

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Originally Posted by Pokémon Partner View Post
I'm unsure about my capitalization in the sentence, and would like somebody to take a look at it.

However, in the inky darkness that only luck we’ve had were a few shards, pearls, and a few other items that didn’t concern us, but we kept every last bit we could find thinking we could sell it later for some more food and equipment.

The worlds in bold are what I'm really focused on, and the general scenario is in the Underground.
I think that that that (xD, the one underlined above) should be the, but even then it still sounds wrong :\, but the words you bolded are fine :)
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