Re: Behind the Eyes of Cipher
Beginning of chapter one seems a little text-bookish right off the bat, but awesome imagery nonetheless. Dark-themed stories are lacking in Pokemon fan fiction nowadays, so I'm glad to see someone else taking an interest in doing them again. Team-perspective fics usually aren't too good, but this seems really solid. Can't wait to see how this unfolds!
Edit: I see that you seem to have a thing for using "like" in comparisons. Cut down on that when you can. Use "as" or "such as" if you can because it sounds a little more professional.