Thread: [Pokemon] Through the Eyes of a Flareon ~ [PG] - Book Two
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Old 02-14-2009, 09:11 AM
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Default Re: Through The Eyes Of A Flareon
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Originally Posted by Scytherwolf View Post
Like the last chapter this was described really well, and I love all the emotions you described^^ I'm really curious as to what that golem was talking about now, and about the two trainers.

I didn't notice any typos this time-the only thing I thought sounded weird were the times it mentioned "HP". I think it would make more sense to describe it as loosing strength or something like that.

After reading this chapter I'm even more interested to see where the plot goes, and I'm looking forward to reading the next one!
Thank you, Scy! :D I'm glad it satisfied you. :3 The story about Roarake's words shall be revealed in a few chapters time...

And, yeah, I think I made the story too related to the games--levels, HP, etc. I'll remember that. This is supposed to be like real life, not like simulated Pokemon battles for tiny screens. x3

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