Wow really cool chapter! I found a few typos though.
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I closed m eyes for a brief second
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my
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She told me that the poison had only been temporary; that Balian sill cared about her too much to kill her.
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I saw it looked almost exactly like myself, only slighter larger and more graceful
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I glanced down at my stomach nd removed the bandages
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“Then how will you fair?!”
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fare
The story is getting really more interesting. I liked the part with the ancient temple and Altair. Also, I really hope that they'll find a way to solve whatever happened to Rye soon. D=
I liked that you gave Zanna healing powers, but didn't make it so that she could cure others instantly without a problem-that would be too easy. I'm guessing it will be hard for her to learn the other powers that Light pokémon have, and they won't be easy to use either. I'm looking forward to the next one!