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Old 04-26-2008, 07:23 PM
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Default Re: FF Tips.

My tip on description: Don't go overboard, but don't do it too little.
EXAMPLE:

"Brendan and May walked on the bridge."

ERROR! Too little description.

"The two teammates known as Brendan and May had just walked through Route 57, and were walking very briskly across the orange bridge, which sparkled in the sunlight like fire."

ERROR! Too much description. Try something like this:

"Brendan and May had just walked through Route 57, and were now crossing the orange bridge."

And when you're submitting your story as a post, double-check it. You never know what you may want to improve on or change.
EXAMPLE (from my fic's prologue, first draft and final draft):

"As the humans were overcome by greed and jealousy, they began to capture the legendaries!"

You may think this doesn't sound quite right for your fic, so why not change it to something like this?

"As the humans on earth were overcome by such feelings as greed and jealousy, they began to capture the legendaries!"

Even a little alteration like that can alter your fic, for the better or for the worse. You decide!
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