Thread: Jack's Quest
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Old 04-13-2008, 02:48 AM
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Default Re: Jack's Quest should work on your dialogue and formatting.
I caught a few spelling mistakes too.

As for the story, it really is a cliche and people might not bother to read it.
Needs much more desciption and a better sense of describing things.

You should take a look here to help get you started.

Keep up your work.

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