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Old 04-13-2008, 01:46 AM
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Default Re: Jack's Quest

Hmmm..I can't really say much about this fic yet, it seems a bit everyday as far as plot goes. Maybe if you add a bit more depth about his parents and his past it might take a step up from the common plotline :).
Knowing the parents pokemon is a a good thing, add more to that idea :D!
What you want to do is have the reader get to know the character and feel for them. Right now I don't feel as if I know what kind of person the main character is, other than the fact he likes fire pokemon .
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