Thread: [Pokemon] The Path of Destiny (PG/PG-13)
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Old 04-04-2008, 10:39 PM
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Default Re: The Path of Destiny (PG/PG-13)

I found another typo, I think, but it has nothing to do with spelling. Read the sentance below:

“All right everyone, let’s stop for a while. Try and get some sleep,” Blazefang called to the others, “Me, Boneclaw, and Wildflame will be lookouts.”


When Blazefang said "Me, Boneclaw, and Wildflame will be lookouts," it should be: "Boneclaw, Wildflame, and I will be lookouts. It's small, but I noticed it. other than that, the story is perfect. I liked what you did with the Stantler.

P.S. Stantler really do do that.
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