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Old 05-31-2007, 01:27 AM
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Default Re: if me and my firneds were placed in the pokemon world what would it be like? see

piplup used water gun
torchic lost 40 of his 80 HP
torchic used ember piplup lost 10 of its 80 Hp
piplup used water gun
torchic fainted
I have to admit that that was slightly funny, and sad. Make the attacks more exciting, and don't say "this pokemon lost that much HP!" because then you make your fanfic almost exactly like the game, and that's not what you're trying to aim for.

Other than that, I quote everybody else. XP