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Old 05-30-2007, 08:08 PM
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Default Re: The Pokemon Dimwit PG-13

Originally Posted by Eiyoko View Post
Constructive Critisizm time!

Overall, the story sounds pretty good, but there are numerous grammar mistakes and awkward sentences that need to be fixed. Also, the dialogue sounds a bit awkward; dialogue is a difficult thing to get right at times, it just takes practice to get it to sound natural.

Also, the name "Pokemon Dimwit" doesn't quite imply Horror/Action, but that may be just me. *shrug*

Overall, this shows promise. I look forward to seeing how it comes out.
Yeah i'm not very good with giving stories a name. I'll try to fix those things in chapter 3 and probobly change the title.
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