Re: The Pokemon Dimwit PG-13
Constructive Critisizm time!
Overall, the story sounds pretty good, but there are numerous grammar mistakes and awkward sentences that need to be fixed. Also, the dialogue sounds a bit awkward; dialogue is a difficult thing to get right at times, it just takes practice to get it to sound natural.
Also, the name "Pokemon Dimwit" doesn't quite imply Horror/Action, but that may be just me. *shrug*
Overall, this shows promise. I look forward to seeing how it comes out.