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Old 05-30-2007, 06:57 PM
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Default Re: The Pokemon Dimwit PG-13

Constructive Critisizm time!

Overall, the story sounds pretty good, but there are numerous grammar mistakes and awkward sentences that need to be fixed. Also, the dialogue sounds a bit awkward; dialogue is a difficult thing to get right at times, it just takes practice to get it to sound natural.

Also, the name "Pokemon Dimwit" doesn't quite imply Horror/Action, but that may be just me. *shrug*

Overall, this shows promise. I look forward to seeing how it comes out.
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