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Old 05-28-2007, 04:06 AM
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Default Re: Pokèmon Mystery Dungeon.My version

No offense, but this is the worst mystery dungeon fanfiction I have read. You really need to work on this if you want people to enjoy it. Add description, spaces between paragraphs and don't use a swear word in every sentence. Every now and then is fine, but you over use them to where it's not even funny.
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